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A Child's Reality

Reflections

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Comment from livelylinda
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amada: I enjoyed this fresh-faced version of how to be a child again and keeping in touch with your inner child. It is a good thing that we have grandchildren and great-grandchildren to remind us. My great-grandson is 3 1/2 and I sit and watch everything he does when I am around him, which isn't often enough. This is a great contest contender. Good luck with it! livelylinda

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
    Thank you for liking my work. Enjoy your great-grandchildren!
Comment from rjuselius
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This is an intriguing piece of poetic art dear friend! I love the use of equations. This is a fine fee verse and I wish you all the luck in the contest!
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
    Thank you, Rebekka!
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi there,

We should all remember how to play. The beauty and innocence of childhood before it is ripped away. I deal a lot with magic in my everyday - I have a three year old and I get to be a kid again. Magical.

I did notice that the resultant letters spell out RUM though - is this the unconscious mind at play? lol

GMG

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
    Thank you for reading and wondering. "Rum" was the unconscious mind, again. :-)
Comment from scd41
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Curiosity is the catalyst that drives creativity to higher and higher levels. Always children need to be encouraged to ask questions however absurd they might appear to others. Your inspirational poem for children is interesting. It has also a rare feature of having mathematical equations.


 Comment Written 16-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
    Thank you for commenting in this work.
Comment from Emily George
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A poem with mathematical equation. I liked the font it was very appealing to the eye.
A poem with a strong message being in the moment being childlike in our hearts.
"Come and visit" a lovely invitation.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
    Thank you Emily.
Comment from TAB_that's me
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/at first I thought this was going to be a children's poem but then I realized it is more of a philosophical poem. Nice free verse. good luck:)
teresa

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
    Thank you, Teresa
Comment from reconciled
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dependable magic...seen threw the right eyes...hello cutie...-smile- exceptional poem of innocence's buried alive to retrieve as treasure....every time you -smile-....love Michael

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
    Thank you, Michael.
Comment from Deejharrington
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Good luck in the contest. That's the great thing about free verse, there are no silly rules of form or count. Yours is a wonderful example of the free flow of ideas/emotions, drawing a picture with words, expressing a deep-seated thought. Keeping childhood close. May we all remember that child in all of us. Well done.
deb

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
    Thank you for your very inspiring words!
Comment from krys123
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Amada;
-I really truly like your free verse poem and find that it's use of syllogistic reasoning
creates an idea that is emblematic and annotated and even though it is mathematically produced, it is poetically created to form a beautiful symmetry of life and the qualities of understanding the truths of being a child.
-Use great use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts and one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Your use of, cadence, timing and tempo help the reading to be clear, fluid and easy.
-Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always, Amada.
Alex

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
    Alex, thank you for your enlightening review. I welcome God everyday!
Comment from dmt1967
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I haven't seen the movie yet, but think your poem is very clever. I like the equations at the end of every verse and the emphasis on being a child. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
    Thank you for commenting in this work.