Butterfly Butter
Just for fun:)23 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
terrific use of enjambment in this wonderfully fanciful and humorous poem
love the strong verbs and the listing
great humor in the alliterative tiny teats, and what a visual LOL
excellent closing rhyme
I used to tell my kids when there would be an essay contest at school that half the battle is selecting a topic that is not the usual topic everyone else is sure to go with - and this is a perfect example of following that advice :-) I'm still smiling :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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terrific use of enjambment in this wonderfully fanciful and humorous poem
love the strong verbs and the listing
great humor in the alliterative tiny teats, and what a visual LOL
excellent closing rhyme
I used to tell my kids when there would be an essay contest at school that half the battle is selecting a topic that is not the usual topic everyone else is sure to go with - and this is a perfect example of following that advice :-) I'm still smiling :-) Brooke
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thanks Brooke - I'm glad you liked it and it made you smile:) Yes, I didn't want the usual 'butterflies are beautiful' poem.
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Thanks Brooke - I'm glad you liked it and it made you smile:) Yes, I didn't want the usual 'butterflies are beautiful' poem.
Comment from mauial
This is a fun poem. It reminds be of what used to run through my mind when I was a delivery driver making deliveries to a health food store. One of the boxes said Tiger's Milk Protein Bars. That got me thinking who was the person who milked the tiger?
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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This is a fun poem. It reminds be of what used to run through my mind when I was a delivery driver making deliveries to a health food store. One of the boxes said Tiger's Milk Protein Bars. That got me thinking who was the person who milked the tiger?
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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cute story:) Thanks so much.
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cute story:) Thanks so much.
Comment from robina1978
Teresa you made an utmost original entry for this prompt. I think you might do well. A free verse how you can make butterfly butter. If you think about it, it might be a bit cruel. Best wishes for the prompt.
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Teresa you made an utmost original entry for this prompt. I think you might do well. A free verse how you can make butterfly butter. If you think about it, it might be a bit cruel. Best wishes for the prompt.
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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It would be cruel I think:) Thanks Ine for the nice review:)