Free Verse Collection
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Comment from Domino 2
Excellent imagery and progression through the conductor's maestro performance, where he is completely in tune (excuse the pun) with the music and all the musicians around him, Tony.
I found the block format rather off-putting, and with respect would suggest breaking this into small random-length stanzas, allowing the reader to pause and ponder more at dramatic moments.
I used to be a conductor, but I never progressed beyond the buses. ;-)
Cheers, Ray
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Excellent imagery and progression through the conductor's maestro performance, where he is completely in tune (excuse the pun) with the music and all the musicians around him, Tony.
I found the block format rather off-putting, and with respect would suggest breaking this into small random-length stanzas, allowing the reader to pause and ponder more at dramatic moments.
I used to be a conductor, but I never progressed beyond the buses. ;-)
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Thanks for the suggestion, Ray. I have chopped it into smaller chunks now and think you are right. It's an improvement. Tony
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Thanks for your gracious reply, Tony, and I'm flattered you thought my suggestion worthwhile.
Cheers, Ray
Comment from Louise Michelle
Wow, Tony, what an amazing poem. You did such a marvelous job describing how every nuance by the conductor serves to direct the musicians.
I've seen conductors on stage and been aware of their movements but this painted a vivid picture for me. What a treat to read. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Wow, Tony, what an amazing poem. You did such a marvelous job describing how every nuance by the conductor serves to direct the musicians.
I've seen conductors on stage and been aware of their movements but this painted a vivid picture for me. What a treat to read. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for this six-star review, Lou. Better than a standing ovation!
Comment from gypsymoth
This reminds me of someone describing a painting to a blind person. The words allows that person to see the painting.
Your words enables the reader to hear the music.
Gypsymoth
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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This reminds me of someone describing a painting to a blind person. The words allows that person to see the painting.
Your words enables the reader to hear the music.
Gypsymoth
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Much appreciated, Gypsymoth. That was the effect I was going for.
Comment from dmt1967
This paints a picture on its own, so I think the picture was overkill. The poem took us through his actions and the readers imagination did the rest. I could visualize him as he conducted the orchestra. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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This paints a picture on its own, so I think the picture was overkill. The poem took us through his actions and the readers imagination did the rest. I could visualize him as he conducted the orchestra. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Thank you, DMT. I am always a bit ambivalent about the inclusion of pictures unless the poem actually arises from them. I guess I do it here because it seems to be the norm. Also, if the picture is good it can lure the browsing passer-by to stop and read. Rather like the cover of a book, I suppose.