5-7-5 (Fall Fun)
The time when boils and ghouls come out to play...30 total reviews
Comment from stroncoso1
This is well done and you creatively described Halloween without using the word in your poem. I love your choice of words, "agonized shrieks pierce" and "forlorn screams." Your last line reminds the reader it is all in fun as "fall fun has begun" reminding us that it is that time again for Halloween! Your picture accompanies your poem quite well. I really enjoyed your piece! Good luck in the contest.
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This is well done and you creatively described Halloween without using the word in your poem. I love your choice of words, "agonized shrieks pierce" and "forlorn screams." Your last line reminds the reader it is all in fun as "fall fun has begun" reminding us that it is that time again for Halloween! Your picture accompanies your poem quite well. I really enjoyed your piece! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from JudyS
This is awesome. And the picture you have to go with it is perfect. Looks like a family shot from my childhood. And they weren't wearing costumes. lol. Super job on this one, really good read. Best of luck in the contest. Judy
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This is awesome. And the picture you have to go with it is perfect. Looks like a family shot from my childhood. And they weren't wearing costumes. lol. Super job on this one, really good read. Best of luck in the contest. Judy
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from lancellot
Your style is well know my friend. I smiled as soon a this popped on the screen. You know how to make the season family fun. Well done.
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Your style is well know my friend. I smiled as soon a this popped on the screen. You know how to make the season family fun. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from Domino 2
Excellent scary presentation and words, 'mystery writer' (accessed via your portfolio). :-)
'agonizes shrieks' and 'forlorn screams' - what more could one ask for if after some harmless fun? LOL.
Top rhyme and alliteration in 3rd line, for a perfect finish.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
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Excellent scary presentation and words, 'mystery writer' (accessed via your portfolio). :-)
'agonizes shrieks' and 'forlorn screams' - what more could one ask for if after some harmless fun? LOL.
Top rhyme and alliteration in 3rd line, for a perfect finish.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from Acquired Taste
Yes, fear is a big business and scarier yet that there are many such things that go 'bump' in the night. But nothing that a double-barrel might not scare away...yet, if you think about...ah won't go there.
Nicely done 5-7-5 and hopefully the artwork was not taken from a family album. AT=/
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Yes, fear is a big business and scarier yet that there are many such things that go 'bump' in the night. But nothing that a double-barrel might not scare away...yet, if you think about...ah won't go there.
Nicely done 5-7-5 and hopefully the artwork was not taken from a family album. AT=/
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from Wendyanne
This is a well written piece of 5-7-5 poetry although I wasn't sure if pierce is one or 2 syllables. I like the image you have conjured up in my mind. Good luck.
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This is a well written piece of 5-7-5 poetry although I wasn't sure if pierce is one or 2 syllables. I like the image you have conjured up in my mind. Good luck.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from RamSlade
Yesss! It is that time of the year again, Heh.Heh Halloween in no longer for the kiddies, but has evolved into grown people reverting back to their childhood except sweet little kiddie costumed we reveal in ghouls, vampires and other beastly and bloody ones. I liked this because of the . . . er . . . artwork, of which I am positive my first mistake in one of the ghouls, the one on the right. I'm shivering as I type.
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Yesss! It is that time of the year again, Heh.Heh Halloween in no longer for the kiddies, but has evolved into grown people reverting back to their childhood except sweet little kiddie costumed we reveal in ghouls, vampires and other beastly and bloody ones. I liked this because of the . . . er . . . artwork, of which I am positive my first mistake in one of the ghouls, the one on the right. I'm shivering as I type.
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from mjac777
Awesome! You brought back memories of fond Halloween fun.
With so little words, you nailed Halloween.
Good luck in the contest. You've got my vote.
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Awesome! You brought back memories of fond Halloween fun.
With so little words, you nailed Halloween.
Good luck in the contest. You've got my vote.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from Charlene0513
Hallowe'en has never been my thing since it has become so dangerous. The night time always turns out cold, damp and miserable out as well. So I think even God abhors such festivities. my own personal feelings.
Charlene
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Hallowe'en has never been my thing since it has become so dangerous. The night time always turns out cold, damp and miserable out as well. So I think even God abhors such festivities. my own personal feelings.
Charlene
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
We have friends that go all out for Halloween.i am really sad but I will miss it this year..but I will be at an authors conference pitching my novel...way scarier....eeeeeeeeek
God bless
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We have friends that go all out for Halloween.i am really sad but I will miss it this year..but I will be at an authors conference pitching my novel...way scarier....eeeeeeeeek
God bless
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2014