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Steve's Poems for Kids

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A collection of my children's poems

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Comment from words
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Talk about scaring a kid straight. LOL

This is quite the harrowing tale.

Sorry, I have to run ... need to brush my teeth.

Hugs,d

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
    Thank you! Watch out for those green bits!
Comment from seaglass
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Ha, ha, ha, what a way to scare a kid into brushing teeth. Better than frightening him with the pain of the dentist tools. it reminds me of my Mom's warning about not washing ears. Supposedly, bean stocks would grow out of dirty ears.

The rhyme and rhythm are smooth in this and it could be illustrated to be a children's book.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
    Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
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Hello there~
Now this poem scares me to no end. Reminds me of the tales I was told. Yeah, something like boogey-man too~
Great Job with this prompt entry! I'm gonna go brush now, excuse me.
Good Luck with the contest and God Bless~!

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
    Thanks for the fun review.

Comment from linsbm
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I enjoyed reading this poem. It's not only for the end rhyming used but for the lesson it conveys to the children but the humor it brings to the readers. The visual imagery in words is such convincing to children. It does motivates them to brush their teeth. The poet's jolly feelings reflects on this write. Excellent write. Thanks for sharing.} Lin

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
    Lin, thanks for the kind words.

    I hope nobody actually takes this too seriously and tries it on their kids...
Comment from His Grayness
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Dear Author: this is a very creative and probably very effective writing to motivate children to brush their teeth! Given that was your intention, it deserves a six star which I unfortunately do not have but you have it from my heart. Great work; HIS GRAYNESS: Vance

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 Comment Written 14-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
    Vance, thanks for the kind words and virtual six.
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Poor Tommy, but a least he got them clean...LOL...it may have taken a chainsaw...LOL...I bet your grandparents idea worked...LOL...very well written...good rhythm and rhyme...and a good smooth read...Luff Linda xxoo

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 Comment Written 14-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014
    Linda, thanks for the kind words.
reply by l.raven on 15-Jun-2014
    you are so welcome...xxoo