Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Thoughtful and unique entry for this contest, true to form and finely presented. It's articulately voiced, and thought provoking. I stumble on just one line:

They are the vehicle to determine

Since THEY is plural, I think vehicles should be too, maybe? Also, the word THE means implies they are the only vehicle. So, I suggest these changes:

They are vehicles to determine

We use words to determine meanings. But there are also non-verbal meanings that can be conveyed beyond the reach of words...through music, prayer, touch, etc.

Good luck in the contest.

Warmly, rd

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 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Thank you so much for pointing out the typos, I have changed it, I wonder if you could just look at it now, Mary

reply by rama devi on 08-Jun-2014

Sure. Good job! :)

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi Mary,

Love the artwork you chose for this poem. Really a complimentary pairing. Illustrating the power of the word is done well.

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers,
Keep Smilin'... Jax

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 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Thanks Jax for the excellent review Mary