Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Okoka Moon, Part 1"Murder Mystery
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Comment from robina1978
After searching so long they find the killer after he killed somebody. Scary chapter this one and well written. I liked it and saw no SPAGS.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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After searching so long they find the killer after he killed somebody. Scary chapter this one and well written. I liked it and saw no SPAGS.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thanks much, Ine. Very nice to hear from you! :0) Bev
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welcome Bev, nice to find an other chapter.
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Thanks again, Ine. :0)
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the director of the senior center lets the priest know one of her patients is having visions of fritz buell.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the director of the senior center lets the priest know one of her patients is having visions of fritz buell.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much, sweet. I appreciate your supportive review! :0) Bev
Comment from Norbanus
A scary segment to get us in the mood for the Halloween season. The Devil living in the Rectory, eh? That ought to keep the priest on his toes. You scene description is excellent, especially in showing thoughts during communion And when George Lutz stopped breathing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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A scary segment to get us in the mood for the Halloween season. The Devil living in the Rectory, eh? That ought to keep the priest on his toes. You scene description is excellent, especially in showing thoughts during communion And when George Lutz stopped breathing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thanks so much, N. I appreciate the great review. :0) Bev
Comment from Adri7enne
Wow girl! I forgot where I was there for a minute. Scary stuff. An evil emanation. It appeared from under the door. That was hair raising. Great chapter. Gave me shivers. Well done, Bev.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Wow girl! I forgot where I was there for a minute. Scary stuff. An evil emanation. It appeared from under the door. That was hair raising. Great chapter. Gave me shivers. Well done, Bev.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Oh, I feel good knowing the chapter met with your approval, Adrienne. Really, you are a good barometer for me on whether I'm on track. That's cuz you are such a talented writer and shrewd reviewer. Thanks so much, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh my God, this was SO frightening, my friend, and I don't scare easily! (It's my genre, and I love it!) Bev, this was just fantastic! Geez, woman you are SO good! Here's my last six! OUTSTANDING! SUPERB! Stephen, baby, move over!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Oh my God, this was SO frightening, my friend, and I don't scare easily! (It's my genre, and I love it!) Bev, this was just fantastic! Geez, woman you are SO good! Here's my last six! OUTSTANDING! SUPERB! Stephen, baby, move over!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Dawn, thank you so much! I'm so grateful for our awesomely generous and supportive review. It means a lot to me that you enjoyed it, because I do think you have a real talent for the horror genre. More creepiness to come in part two. Hugs, Bev
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Oh, I don't know how great I am at writing it, but it's my favorite to read! I'll be on the lookout, my friend. Can't wait!!!
Comment from Joy Graham
I enjoyed the image of the old folks in wheel chairs receiving communion. David used to lead church services in a personal care home so I could I imagine it very well. He used to have to wake them up at various stages of the service.
Another suspense filled chapter. Interesting that the vision was so eerie and on the money. Can't wait for more!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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I enjoyed the image of the old folks in wheel chairs receiving communion. David used to lead church services in a personal care home so I could I imagine it very well. He used to have to wake them up at various stages of the service.
Another suspense filled chapter. Interesting that the vision was so eerie and on the money. Can't wait for more!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Joy, thank you for your great review. I'm thrilled that my chapter had an authentic feel for you. I used my own memories of my Dad's time in the nursing home for inspiration, so it was cool that it jibed with your experience.
Your generosity is so appreciated. You make me want to sit down and churn out another chapter.
I appreciate you, Joy.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from MM lives on :)
Hi Bev, excellent twist and plot here as the story continues, the dialogue and realism of the church is compelling and so well scripted.
Bravo and take a bow :) !
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Hi Bev, excellent twist and plot here as the story continues, the dialogue and realism of the church is compelling and so well scripted.
Bravo and take a bow :) !
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Hey, Christopher. Thank you, my friend, for this gracious and generous review. Glad you liked it! :0) Bev
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You did a good job writing this post. The characters are well defined, the dialogue flowed naturally and the plot remained in tack. Good job.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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You did a good job writing this post. The characters are well defined, the dialogue flowed naturally and the plot remained in tack. Good job.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Barbara, thank you so much for this very generous review. I really appreciate the support and encouragement. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from donkeyoatey
Amazing tension, and a bit of a question, we are still wondering who really is the "bad" guy here? nice way to keep the people moving and developing in character. thanks so mucj for choosing my artwork. Donkeyoatey
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Amazing tension, and a bit of a question, we are still wondering who really is the "bad" guy here? nice way to keep the people moving and developing in character. thanks so mucj for choosing my artwork. Donkeyoatey
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Thanks so much for taking time to read the chapter, D. I'm honored to have your amazing artwork to enhance my story. The next part will lead us closer to knowing who (or what) we're dealing with. Kind regards, Bev
Comment from judiverse
Glad I had a six left, as they've gone fast even this early in the week. This really sends the chills. You give a great description of Tender Care Senior Living when Father Brian goes to give communion. Two of the residents make a spectacle of themselves, and Maureen corners Father with her problem about George. She is so well described! It's really spooky when George tells of having an encounter with Fritz Buell's spirit saying he was murdered by a devil. Then it gets spookier when he says the Devil lives at the Rectory. What's a parish priest to do? Things get really tense when they learn that George has stopped breathing. You really packed the chills in this. judi
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Glad I had a six left, as they've gone fast even this early in the week. This really sends the chills. You give a great description of Tender Care Senior Living when Father Brian goes to give communion. Two of the residents make a spectacle of themselves, and Maureen corners Father with her problem about George. She is so well described! It's really spooky when George tells of having an encounter with Fritz Buell's spirit saying he was murdered by a devil. Then it gets spookier when he says the Devil lives at the Rectory. What's a parish priest to do? Things get really tense when they learn that George has stopped breathing. You really packed the chills in this. judi
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Judi, thank you so much for your very generous review and rating. I know what you mean about those sixes, and appreciate your gift of one.
The next part gets into what's behind the goings-on at the rectory, and I promise to make it as chilling as I possibly can LOL.
Thanks again, my friend.
Warmest regards, Bev
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You're so welcome. judi
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You're so welcome. I have kind of a chilling suspicion of what or who might be behind the happenings at the rectory. Wonder if I'll be right? judi
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I'll bet you are -- you're pretty darned sharp, Judi :0)