Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Inaji Moon, Pt. 1"Murder Mystery
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Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Bev,
An excellent post for this story. I was sad at to read of Stan's death, and the continuing mystery seems amplified.
I enjoyed reading this post. Great dialogue, and a sense of urgency as the story moves on. I also liked the emotion from the whole post, it felt real to me.
Well done and thanks for sharing.
Maureen.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Hi Bev,
An excellent post for this story. I was sad at to read of Stan's death, and the continuing mystery seems amplified.
I enjoyed reading this post. Great dialogue, and a sense of urgency as the story moves on. I also liked the emotion from the whole post, it felt real to me.
Well done and thanks for sharing.
Maureen.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much, Maureen. I really appreciate your wonderful and encouraging review. Hugs, Bev
Comment from barkingdog
Well, Eisner's gone and any information that he might have had about the murder may have died with him unless he left something in writing in the safe.
I'm sure Derek can't wait to find out what's in the letter and if anything else helpful is in there.
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Well, Eisner's gone and any information that he might have had about the murder may have died with him unless he left something in writing in the safe.
I'm sure Derek can't wait to find out what's in the letter and if anything else helpful is in there.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thanks so much, Ellen. I appreciate your supportive review! Warmest regards, Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. You, Av and Margaret are on a diet. No sixes on the menu. :(
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Hey, I'm just so glad you're hanging in there with me, Ellen. You rock! Bev
Comment from nomi338
Wow! This is as well written and suspenseful as anything I have seen on TV or the movies. This story is very well crafted it holds together very well. There is nothing amateurish about it. Your experience shows very well in the way that this story is told from beginning to end. I cannot wait to read what happens next.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Wow! This is as well written and suspenseful as anything I have seen on TV or the movies. This story is very well crafted it holds together very well. There is nothing amateurish about it. Your experience shows very well in the way that this story is told from beginning to end. I cannot wait to read what happens next.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much, nomi. I really appreciate your very encouraging and generous review. So glad you stopped to read! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from jadapenn
Loved this tension filled chapter. This poor detective is never going to get to the bottom of this murder. I'm just sorry to drop in as I have missed quite a bit of this story. But I see nothing is solved so I am not disappointed at all.
Nice fast pace too. Bring on the next. luv jada
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Loved this tension filled chapter. This poor detective is never going to get to the bottom of this murder. I'm just sorry to drop in as I have missed quite a bit of this story. But I see nothing is solved so I am not disappointed at all.
Nice fast pace too. Bring on the next. luv jada
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Hi, Jada. Thank you, my friend, for this awesome review. I know a few folks are wanting to know who the murderer is like right now LOL. They'll have to trust me we ARE getting closer. I have to remember that the average novel is around 100,000, words. It's cool, though, because it shows they're really interested. Again, thanks much, Jada. Hugs, Bev
Comment from robina1978
The only one that has possibly information about Debrah's death is now critically ill in hospital. They fear for his life in a natural way and maybe even foul play. He died of natural causes but there is a safe in his house that might give them more information.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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The only one that has possibly information about Debrah's death is now critically ill in hospital. They fear for his life in a natural way and maybe even foul play. He died of natural causes but there is a safe in his house that might give them more information.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you, Ine. I really appreciate the review. Bev
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so welcome, Bev
Comment from jjstar
Holy cow, Bev! Your writing just gets more prolific and amazing with every new chapter. Sounds like the poets influenced some of your descriptions. I was particularly impressed with the beats and body language.
The plot twist was unexpected and perfectly timed, the dialogue perfect, especially with the introduction of Duffy.
I loved the fact that the sheriff immediately picked up on the ex-military, and loved the recognition of brotherhood between doctors and law enforcement.
Thank you for this. It was a treat to read!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Holy cow, Bev! Your writing just gets more prolific and amazing with every new chapter. Sounds like the poets influenced some of your descriptions. I was particularly impressed with the beats and body language.
The plot twist was unexpected and perfectly timed, the dialogue perfect, especially with the introduction of Duffy.
I loved the fact that the sheriff immediately picked up on the ex-military, and loved the recognition of brotherhood between doctors and law enforcement.
Thank you for this. It was a treat to read!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Hi, jj. Thank you for always being such a support for my writing. Once again, you've touched my heart with your insights and generosity. And, yes, I have did try some poetic touches in this chapter -- so please you noticed. Hugs, Bev
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It was amazing!
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XXX :0) Bev
Comment from misscookie
Oh my goodness I should ghave followed my mind and readed your chapter later in the day.
because it sensed so real that I got choke up with emotion at the hosptial.
wow!
That was great that you could stir up the emotions of a reader. this is s a great chapter.
Sorry I have no more stars***********
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Oh my goodness I should ghave followed my mind and readed your chapter later in the day.
because it sensed so real that I got choke up with emotion at the hosptial.
wow!
That was great that you could stir up the emotions of a reader. this is s a great chapter.
Sorry I have no more stars***********
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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No sorries needed, misscookie. I am thrilled you took the time to read the chapter and send along such kind words of support. Always such a joy to hear from you! Hugs, Bev
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Until next time my friend.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Great as always. I always enjoy reading this book, will be glad and sad when it ends, glad I know who or what is doing all this and sad it's over. =}
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Great as always. I always enjoy reading this book, will be glad and sad when it ends, glad I know who or what is doing all this and sad it's over. =}
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Hi, Rox. Thank you for continuing to follow my story. I really appreciate your time, support and generosity, my friend. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
writingfundimension:
Somehow, with being off and on site so much over the
last few months, I seem to have lost track of this
story. I will try to go back and catch up, although
I will likely not review when I do so.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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writingfundimension:
Somehow, with being off and on site so much over the
last few months, I seem to have lost track of this
story. I will try to go back and catch up, although
I will likely not review when I do so.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Jan, I just appreciate you stopping by at this point. It's hard to keep up with all the great novels going on right now. I've had to pick out just a few because I also follow poets. One only has so much time in the day. Thank you for your words of support and kind review. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, Bev this chapter is like being there - your details, like the woman in the Mercedes talking on her cell phone, Derek mentioning he was sure the doctor had business elsewhere - all of it lends itself so well to immediate plot 'action' and that is exactly what is missing sometimes to keep the reader not only involved, but 'champing at the bit' to read the next line. Exceptional writing, Bev - I swallowed it whole.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Wow, Bev this chapter is like being there - your details, like the woman in the Mercedes talking on her cell phone, Derek mentioning he was sure the doctor had business elsewhere - all of it lends itself so well to immediate plot 'action' and that is exactly what is missing sometimes to keep the reader not only involved, but 'champing at the bit' to read the next line. Exceptional writing, Bev - I swallowed it whole.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Dawn, I am honored by this awesome review. I thank you so much for your generous stars, and for your supportive insights into the chapter. That means so much to me. You've put a big smile on my face! Hugs, Bev
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You are so welcome, my very talented friend. :)
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Thanks sweetie!
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:)