I'm Not the Woman (EEE's version)
A little self-introspection39 total reviews
Comment from unidian
Well, there's a lot of issues here! Seems to be a progression through various parts of your life which have hurt or disappointed you with a statement of defiance at the end. It approaches epic status:) Read it a couple of times and it's quite a work. Well done! Tom
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Well, there's a lot of issues here! Seems to be a progression through various parts of your life which have hurt or disappointed you with a statement of defiance at the end. It approaches epic status:) Read it a couple of times and it's quite a work. Well done! Tom
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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thanks, Tom. I'm humbled by your comments. love, jan
Comment from Julie G
I usually don't care a peanut how something is posted, picture, etc. but this is such a relief from the norm I have to tell you, I love it.
As for the poem: Gads. It is us....all women who work, raise kids, have friends, co-workers (thought we could trust, but, well, couldn't) who find ourselves somewhere along the way and decide we are not all that bad after all and get on with our lives as we wish to live them.
I loved the reference to the boundaries thing--my daughter has been known to mention this word on occasion, forgetting it is she who invites me across; and I loved the stanza about the words, dust, cook, iron, etc. Hard to put one's foot down with a pouting husband, but he is kind to me about it. We have retired well together.
This is a universal poem and will be admired by all women whatever their lot in life. Well done.
Julie G
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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I usually don't care a peanut how something is posted, picture, etc. but this is such a relief from the norm I have to tell you, I love it.
As for the poem: Gads. It is us....all women who work, raise kids, have friends, co-workers (thought we could trust, but, well, couldn't) who find ourselves somewhere along the way and decide we are not all that bad after all and get on with our lives as we wish to live them.
I loved the reference to the boundaries thing--my daughter has been known to mention this word on occasion, forgetting it is she who invites me across; and I loved the stanza about the words, dust, cook, iron, etc. Hard to put one's foot down with a pouting husband, but he is kind to me about it. We have retired well together.
This is a universal poem and will be admired by all women whatever their lot in life. Well done.
Julie G
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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thank you, Julie G. I am humbled by your review. love, jan
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You are welcome.
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good morning poet friend.Wow! This was quite a read my friend. I'm not sure about eveything you wanted to convey, but the message was powerful and I loved the ending. Good work! Happy New Year! poetfriendLoyd
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Good morning poet friend.Wow! This was quite a read my friend. I'm not sure about eveything you wanted to convey, but the message was powerful and I loved the ending. Good work! Happy New Year! poetfriendLoyd
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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thanks, Loyd. love, jan
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It was my pleasure and Happy New Year!
Comment from davidray
Another glorious write, Jan. Have i mentioned how much you're missed when you go away for any period of time? Enjoyed this very much. Always a treat to read your heartfelt and powerful words.
One part you might want to take a look at. TO be honest, I thought you'd forgotten the 'T' in white trash altogether until i copy and pasted it here. i didn't even see the 'Trainer' till then along the right side of the page.
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Thanks again for sharing.Continued fun and success as we make our way into 2009. Sheesh, does it seem strange saying that.
Do take care and keep smiling,
David XX
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Another glorious write, Jan. Have i mentioned how much you're missed when you go away for any period of time? Enjoyed this very much. Always a treat to read your heartfelt and powerful words.
One part you might want to take a look at. TO be honest, I thought you'd forgotten the 'T' in white trash altogether until i copy and pasted it here. i didn't even see the 'Trainer' till then along the right side of the page.
-Writer
Helper
Intuitive Trainer
Expressive
Teacher
Redeemed
Assistant Superintendent
Specialist
Honest
Thanks again for sharing.Continued fun and success as we make our way into 2009. Sheesh, does it seem strange saying that.
Do take care and keep smiling,
David XX
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Funny, when I go to correct it, it looks right. I don't know what to do about it. Thanks, David, for your kind words. love, jan
Comment from luna
Jan,
Welcome back! Sorry that the editor gave you problems, but I can kinda imagine what you were trying to do - very creative! Thanks for sharing these empowering words with us. You've certainly come a long way, my friend.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2008
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Jan,
Welcome back! Sorry that the editor gave you problems, but I can kinda imagine what you were trying to do - very creative! Thanks for sharing these empowering words with us. You've certainly come a long way, my friend.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2008
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thanks, Luna. love, jan
Comment from earthlybeing
Well written and very easy to read and appreciate. The poem starts out and the reader thinks it may be a negative from the line but it ends with such strength and courage.
I'm not the woman you thought I'd be....
I am the woman that I want to be.....
The kind of woman God wants me to be....
Loved it. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2008
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Well written and very easy to read and appreciate. The poem starts out and the reader thinks it may be a negative from the line but it ends with such strength and courage.
I'm not the woman you thought I'd be....
I am the woman that I want to be.....
The kind of woman God wants me to be....
Loved it. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2008
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thanks, again, Jeanette. my husband thought it was "dark" -- LOL! love, jan
Comment from wierdgrace
agian art is important too, and your posting is wonderful and the words say so much, they mean a lot to me as I read them, thank you for sharing, the structure read well, and smooth, the images strong, and the emotional feeling stands out.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2008
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agian art is important too, and your posting is wonderful and the words say so much, they mean a lot to me as I read them, thank you for sharing, the structure read well, and smooth, the images strong, and the emotional feeling stands out.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2008
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thanks, wierdgrace. love, jan
Comment from bluefly
Hi Rdfrdmom,
This is an extremely well crafted and presented poem. Even without all the fancy editing, it carries its own formidable weight quite well. This poem flows with strong emotion and feeling for a woman who has gone through hell and come out on top, thanks to her own choice to be there.
Excellent writing!
Scott
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2008
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Hi Rdfrdmom,
This is an extremely well crafted and presented poem. Even without all the fancy editing, it carries its own formidable weight quite well. This poem flows with strong emotion and feeling for a woman who has gone through hell and come out on top, thanks to her own choice to be there.
Excellent writing!
Scott
Comment Written 29-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2008
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thanks, again, Scott. I truly appreciate it.
Comment from Journey woman
This is a very interesting read and certainly introspective. It is clear the thought and effort that went into forming this poem. I enjoyed the creatvity and the artwork added to the tone.
Journey Woman
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2008
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This is a very interesting read and certainly introspective. It is clear the thought and effort that went into forming this poem. I enjoyed the creatvity and the artwork added to the tone.
Journey Woman
Comment Written 29-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2008
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thanks, Journey woman. Introspection seems to be my middle name. love, jan
Comment from grassroots08
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A very interesting piece you have crafted here. There is a lot of pent up emotion exuding from this. Well done, Don
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2008
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oops:
Writer
Helper
Intuitive
Evil Edie - up to his tricks again) Trainer
Expressive
Teacher
Redeemed
Assistant Superintendent
Specialist
Honest
A very interesting piece you have crafted here. There is a lot of pent up emotion exuding from this. Well done, Don
Comment Written 29-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2008
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thanks, Don. you should have seen what he did to the first version. yep, got a little wound up in this one. love, jan