Precious Gems: An Anthology
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Comment from RapturedHeart
Wow. So well done, alpacalady. I find rhyme and meter to be often tedious and boring if not skillfully crafted, but you have succeeded at weaving a heart wrenching tale within pleasant confines. Like a picket fenced yard, structure can be a beautiful thing as long as it's not barb wire.
Thanks for this reflection.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
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Wow. So well done, alpacalady. I find rhyme and meter to be often tedious and boring if not skillfully crafted, but you have succeeded at weaving a heart wrenching tale within pleasant confines. Like a picket fenced yard, structure can be a beautiful thing as long as it's not barb wire.
Thanks for this reflection.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
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funny isn't it? I can't quite get my head around unmetered poetry a lot of the time, but when I come across one that is skilfully crafted, I enjoy it. Free verse is an area I've only touched on - rhyme is definitely my love with poetry. And I'm glad that you enjoyed this, even though you find rhyme and meter tedious! (And I see what you mean - I've got a couple I want to rework because I've stuck to perfect rhyme/meter and they read a bit stilted to me..) thanks for your comments, review and great encouragement! xoxoxoxo
Comment from RaymondJohn
Flood and drought are the twin plagues of agriculture, along with biological agents. Your graphic and words do a nice job of showing one of the worst. Imagine what it must have been like in the Dust Bowl when whole states were swallowed up, with the farmers forced to leave their lands. Your fine poem could have been the prelude to The Grapes of Wrath. Best wishes. Ray
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
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Flood and drought are the twin plagues of agriculture, along with biological agents. Your graphic and words do a nice job of showing one of the worst. Imagine what it must have been like in the Dust Bowl when whole states were swallowed up, with the farmers forced to leave their lands. Your fine poem could have been the prelude to The Grapes of Wrath. Best wishes. Ray
Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
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I find that hard to imagine. The wrench those farmers would feel at having to leave the land they'd tilled for so many years would have to be one of life's hardest lessons I think. It would be almost like losing a child. I thank you Ray for your comments, and your "comparison" to The Grapes of Wrath. I take that as very high praise indeed. Best wishes to you xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from Broken Fingers
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This is plainly a very good poem. I like your sustained pace and metre. Your language has been well thought through. You maintained a rooted feel an dhigh levels of reality whilst describing this man's feelings. The part about the gun being out of bullets and "teasing" was excellent.
Mr H
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
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Hi
This is plainly a very good poem. I like your sustained pace and metre. Your language has been well thought through. You maintained a rooted feel an dhigh levels of reality whilst describing this man's feelings. The part about the gun being out of bullets and "teasing" was excellent.
Mr H
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2008
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Thank you very much Mr H! I did want to bring out how a desperate man may think of resorting to desperate measures to end his pain, and you have picked that up. This always makes me feel that my objective has been reached. Thank you very much for an insightful and thoughtful review! xoxoxoxoxo