Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Rejected"for various occasions
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Comment from LJbutterfly
I enjoyed the romantic idea illuded to in this beautiful love poem. I especially liked your question, "Can love begin as lust and still be true?" Your clever unexpected twist at the end produces a chuckle and demonstrates your skill as a poet. Best wishes in the contest.
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I enjoyed the romantic idea illuded to in this beautiful love poem. I especially liked your question, "Can love begin as lust and still be true?" Your clever unexpected twist at the end produces a chuckle and demonstrates your skill as a poet. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
Comment from Boogienights
Hahaha...this is too funny. I love the build up to the last two lines...l actually felt sorry for him. A very clever contest entry, best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Hahaha...this is too funny. I love the build up to the last two lines...l actually felt sorry for him. A very clever contest entry, best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much and glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from teafor2
Un-named sonneteer, this is an ambitious personification using a very challenging formal genre...Not only does this write have the tell-tell WS rhyme scheme: ABAB CDCD EFEF GG; intricate internal rhymes (wreathed) in combination with enough alliterations to provide a melodious tint to the non-sensical, whimsical ditty! I enjoyed unwrapping it. Good luck in the contest. teafor2
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Un-named sonneteer, this is an ambitious personification using a very challenging formal genre...Not only does this write have the tell-tell WS rhyme scheme: ABAB CDCD EFEF GG; intricate internal rhymes (wreathed) in combination with enough alliterations to provide a melodious tint to the non-sensical, whimsical ditty! I enjoyed unwrapping it. Good luck in the contest. teafor2
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
Comment from Ulla
A great poem about the expectations of a new love that seemed very promising, but was as soon rejected. He's overtures were rejected in one swift move. The best of luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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A great poem about the expectations of a new love that seemed very promising, but was as soon rejected. He's overtures were rejected in one swift move. The best of luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Thanks very much Ulla!
Comment from Michael John Gould
I struggled with this I read it three times all with the same emotion and and thought process it was like a rollercoaster ride for me I'm still trying to figure out my meaning I know it's a confusing reply but this is how I feel God Bless
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I struggled with this I read it three times all with the same emotion and and thought process it was like a rollercoaster ride for me I'm still trying to figure out my meaning I know it's a confusing reply but this is how I feel God Bless
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Are you talking about the same "going down" as I think you're talking about when you speak of a banana? LOL!
I agree that brown ones are better, especially for the nutrients (and for smoothies!).
This is like an erotic poem about a banana ending with a twist (of citrus).
This is delightful, and very much outside the box for this contest. I like it, and I hope the voters do too.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025
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Are you talking about the same "going down" as I think you're talking about when you speak of a banana? LOL!
I agree that brown ones are better, especially for the nutrients (and for smoothies!).
This is like an erotic poem about a banana ending with a twist (of citrus).
This is delightful, and very much outside the box for this contest. I like it, and I hope the voters do too.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025
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Haha looks like you caught on to my thinly veiled references. The brown ones are superb frozen. Thank you very much Pam,
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Comment from tinkervic
Very good poem you did a great job rhyming the words.I like how expressive it is. keep up the good work. how u put is it really love when it starts out lust. keep writing!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Very good poem you did a great job rhyming the words.I like how expressive it is. keep up the good work. how u put is it really love when it starts out lust. keep writing!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Thank you!
Comment from nomi338
At the age of 81, nearly 82, I feel a oneness with both the one being rejected and the one doing the rejecting. Neither is pleasant, but ultimately necessary. Too ripe or not ripe enough can leave a bitter taste in one's mouth.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025
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At the age of 81, nearly 82, I feel a oneness with both the one being rejected and the one doing the rejecting. Neither is pleasant, but ultimately necessary. Too ripe or not ripe enough can leave a bitter taste in one's mouth.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025
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That is the truth! Thank you very much Nomi,
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm so glad I read your notes and recognised the authorship! So silly but I can't deny the quality of your sonnet, despite the inevitable pain and anguish you must be experiencing as a result of this callous rejection. Your internal rhyming is an additional delight as too the coloured font in the rhyming couplet. Like the visual too. So a complete package and a winner for me:=) Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025
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I'm so glad I read your notes and recognised the authorship! So silly but I can't deny the quality of your sonnet, despite the inevitable pain and anguish you must be experiencing as a result of this callous rejection. Your internal rhyming is an additional delight as too the coloured font in the rhyming couplet. Like the visual too. So a complete package and a winner for me:=) Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025
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Thanks very much Debbie! These sonnets give me a lot of trouble to construct, though they are worth it in the end. Not sure my poor banana can say the same though. 🦍
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Your poo banana came good in the end! You won! Well done!
Comment from ESOSTINE
This is exceptionally beautiful poem. The imagery here bears the signature of a talented poet. 'Can love begin as lust and still be true? 'For lust confounds the search for faithful mates'.
Well done, my friend. Good luck with the contest.
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This is exceptionally beautiful poem. The imagery here bears the signature of a talented poet. 'Can love begin as lust and still be true? 'For lust confounds the search for faithful mates'.
Well done, my friend. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
