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Minute Poem

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Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Here, here!! A minute is called a minute for a reason and that meter is SO VERY NECESSARY to give it the 'waterfall rhythm' necessary for the beauty! ;)
And speaking of beauty... what a BEAUTIFUL use of the form to paint the emotions and the 'thought hinderances' of the jail cell. Of course, we realize that is the purpose of the design, but it doesn't change the mindset of the one inside... Well done, sir, and thanx for sharing your pen! ;) Good Luck! ;)

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
    Thanks so much for the enthusiastic review and for so wholeheartedly agreeing with my programming note!

    Steve
Comment from lyenochka
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I agree that the Minute Poem should include meter! Thank you for showing us how it's done. I also love the focus on outside of ourselves, whether we're in a physical prison or the mental prison of a depression. I think this will do well in the contest!

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
    Helen, thanks for the kind words and the clear understanding of what I was trying to say in my poem.

    Steve
Comment from Jessica Borras
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I, too, chose to stick with the usual rhyme scheme in this contest, but I've got to say... I think you blew it out of the park. Honestly, you make it look easy, and I know first-hand that it's not. I love the poem, I love the imagery, and I wish you the absolute best in this contest!

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 Comment Written 29-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
    Thanks, Jessica.
    I actually read through all the Minute Poems in my portfolio last night in preparation for writing this one. There were about twenty, so I guess I've had plenty of practise.

    That being said, the only one to have won a contest was one of the first that I wrote!

    Thanks for the kind words here.

    Steve
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
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Steve,

This is a great minute poem for the contest. It has a nice rhyme scheme and flows nicely. It is well organizes.

I can't imagine being behind bars. I like my freedom to much.

Great job and good luck in the contest.

Cecilia

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 Comment Written 29-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
    Thanks, Cecilia.

    Always remember with my poems there is generally something hiding beneath the surface. Here it is that you can look at this as not being about a literal prison, but instead as the kind of imprisonment that people inflict on themselves.

    Steve
reply by Cecilia A Heiskary on 30-Jan-2025
    You're welcome. I will keep that in mind next time I read one.