Paper Promises
A Free Verse40 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, those "paper promises" are so hurtful especially, if they repeated a thousand times. The narrator knows the paper boat of promises will never succeed in the winds of life. Great use of metaphor!
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Ah, those "paper promises" are so hurtful especially, if they repeated a thousand times. The narrator knows the paper boat of promises will never succeed in the winds of life. Great use of metaphor!
Comment Written 05-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much, Helen.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Goodness, Jessica, you certainly have a talent for poetry. I really liked this free verse and how smoothly it flowed. I actually read it out loud as it seemed to have a unique ebb and flow.
Douglas
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Goodness, Jessica, you certainly have a talent for poetry. I really liked this free verse and how smoothly it flowed. I actually read it out loud as it seemed to have a unique ebb and flow.
Douglas
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I love this free verse poem. So well-written and the double meaning I am getting from the words is exceptionally done.
How carefully aligned
your every crease,
each fold, with colors
bold and bright enough
to fool me once
a thousand promises
ago.
just lovely! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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I love this free verse poem. So well-written and the double meaning I am getting from the words is exceptionally done.
How carefully aligned
your every crease,
each fold, with colors
bold and bright enough
to fool me once
a thousand promises
ago.
just lovely! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thanks so much, Marilyn!
Comment from Tim Margetts
I love this vision of the transient nature of your paper creation. I can remember days spent making origami boats and floating them in the sink or paper cranes and swans.
Thank you for bringing to fresh view those long past memories.
Tim
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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I love this vision of the transient nature of your paper creation. I can remember days spent making origami boats and floating them in the sink or paper cranes and swans.
Thank you for bringing to fresh view those long past memories.
Tim
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Tim! Xo
Comment from bob cullen
I hope this is not autobiographical. It is however superbly written with great quantities of emotion and pain. Along with a message I'm sure not even the strongest of deniers could miss. Your final three lines deliver the final blow.
To you though I say, 'while a paper promise may indeed crumble in the breeze', determination will ensure that same paper promise will one day come back and avenge the one wounded by those very same words.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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I hope this is not autobiographical. It is however superbly written with great quantities of emotion and pain. Along with a message I'm sure not even the strongest of deniers could miss. Your final three lines deliver the final blow.
To you though I say, 'while a paper promise may indeed crumble in the breeze', determination will ensure that same paper promise will one day come back and avenge the one wounded by those very same words.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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thank you, bob, for your kind words and thoughtful review! Xo
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hi Jessica.
Hello Jessica.
I like your metaphorical phrasing Using images, you express the emotion of the poem very well. Comparing promises made of paper to paper that becomes wet and cannot be flown is excellent. It explains the fragile nature of the promises.
Robert
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Hi Jessica.
Hello Jessica.
I like your metaphorical phrasing Using images, you express the emotion of the poem very well. Comparing promises made of paper to paper that becomes wet and cannot be flown is excellent. It explains the fragile nature of the promises.
Robert
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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I truly appreciate it, Robert. Thank you very much! Xo
Jess
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You're very welcome, Jess.
Comment from DonandVicki
Wow! The images that come to mind when I read your powerful poem. Paper Tigers, weak promises, on and on. It brings to mind self-serving "Individuals"; I would say men but I'm sure some women might fit this category.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Wow! The images that come to mind when I read your powerful poem. Paper Tigers, weak promises, on and on. It brings to mind self-serving "Individuals"; I would say men but I'm sure some women might fit this category.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I would have to agree with you!
Xo
Jess
Comment from June Sargent
A poignant piece about empty promises that crumble in the wind. All too often relationships that are not built on trust dissolve in the rain - one drop at a time. This poem captures the pain that comes from such disappointment.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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A poignant piece about empty promises that crumble in the wind. All too often relationships that are not built on trust dissolve in the rain - one drop at a time. This poem captures the pain that comes from such disappointment.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much, June!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
As with the fragile paper boat, you apply an enchanting light touch to this verse which in turn represents the deftness of deceit. A thousand promises and each as weightless and worthless as the one before. We're left wondering if this is the end or will this relationship be allowed to continue its deception. Thank you for sharing this magically intangible verse, Jess. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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As with the fragile paper boat, you apply an enchanting light touch to this verse which in turn represents the deftness of deceit. A thousand promises and each as weightless and worthless as the one before. We're left wondering if this is the end or will this relationship be allowed to continue its deception. Thank you for sharing this magically intangible verse, Jess. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you, my Debbie, for your keen observations and wonderful review.
Xoxo
Jess
Comment from Daniel Milton Taylor
Jessica, this is a very thought-provoking poem that speaks volumes to me. One question it brought to my mind is "Am I the part or do I spend a lot of time and effort to appear that I am?". If it turns out that "I'm actually not the part", it won't take much to expose it. Wow!! Lately, there's been so much exposure in the public and private sectors that we all should do a self-evaluation to see if we Are or Aren't who we say we are. As a believer in God, I work hard to be what He says a believer in Him is. Now, I don't know if you were hoping for that kind of reaction to your poem, but it really blessed me because I look for external things to help me keep myself in check. I don't want to "act like" I'm Holy, I want to "be Holy". I truly enjoyed your poem and Thank You for writing and submitting it. God bless, Daniel
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Jessica, this is a very thought-provoking poem that speaks volumes to me. One question it brought to my mind is "Am I the part or do I spend a lot of time and effort to appear that I am?". If it turns out that "I'm actually not the part", it won't take much to expose it. Wow!! Lately, there's been so much exposure in the public and private sectors that we all should do a self-evaluation to see if we Are or Aren't who we say we are. As a believer in God, I work hard to be what He says a believer in Him is. Now, I don't know if you were hoping for that kind of reaction to your poem, but it really blessed me because I look for external things to help me keep myself in check. I don't want to "act like" I'm Holy, I want to "be Holy". I truly enjoyed your poem and Thank You for writing and submitting it. God bless, Daniel
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Daniel, I appreciate this so much. Thank you for your wise words and wonderful review!
