Willing Hearts
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Comment from jim vecchio
You don't have to be happy! I and most Fanstory readers will rejoice for you, for another great instillment and one while I still owned a sixth star. Somehow, I feel Ryan isn't a bad guy, just dumb, and I watched a Charlie Chan movie once and guessed the killer!
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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You don't have to be happy! I and most Fanstory readers will rejoice for you, for another great instillment and one while I still owned a sixth star. Somehow, I feel Ryan isn't a bad guy, just dumb, and I watched a Charlie Chan movie once and guessed the killer!
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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I think you're correct about Ryan. Thank you for the kind review.
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If I ever guess another correct ending in a Charlie Chan movie, I'll let you know.
Comment from GoWiSt
Aww, poor baby dog Jasper, scared of thunderstorms. But very brave to protect his wards. Glad to see he's so beloved by the group. Now I'm curious to find out who this Ryan dude 'really' is...
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Aww, poor baby dog Jasper, scared of thunderstorms. But very brave to protect his wards. Glad to see he's so beloved by the group. Now I'm curious to find out who this Ryan dude 'really' is...
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I grew up with a Great Dane. Wonderful breed. Ours was afraid of storms, but would have given his life for me or my mom.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I went through the same thing. Now, I remind myself I am not perfect. You are moving the story along nicely.
I look forward to the second part of this chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. I went through the same thing. Now, I remind myself I am not perfect. You are moving the story along nicely.
I look forward to the second part of this chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very exciting chapter. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue. It was very interesting. I am looking forward to the next chapter my friend! love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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This is a very exciting chapter. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue. It was very interesting. I am looking forward to the next chapter my friend! love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You are so welcome! It is a great story my friend!
Comment from nomi338
Wrong answers in certain situations can get you into hot water the kind that can cause scalding, blisters and burns. It looks like our friend the inquisitive intruder just bought himself some trouble he won't be getting out of anytime in the near future. This is a great break in the story, the exclusion of some tension and possible danger.
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Wrong answers in certain situations can get you into hot water the kind that can cause scalding, blisters and burns. It looks like our friend the inquisitive intruder just bought himself some trouble he won't be getting out of anytime in the near future. This is a great break in the story, the exclusion of some tension and possible danger.
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Noah has a plan for him.
Comment from judiverse
You are a perfectionist! I am assuming that Brown may have some connection with the ring that's involved with the human trafficking? Has he somehow gotten into the safe house under false pretenses? Sad story about Myra, and to think this kind of thing is actually going on it so tragic. It looks like Sami is beginning to realize the significance of what Noah and his crew are trying to accomplish. Fun fit with Jasper. They can be big sissies. Lunch made right after breakfast? That's really planning. Great action in this. Good pace for the story. judi
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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You are a perfectionist! I am assuming that Brown may have some connection with the ring that's involved with the human trafficking? Has he somehow gotten into the safe house under false pretenses? Sad story about Myra, and to think this kind of thing is actually going on it so tragic. It looks like Sami is beginning to realize the significance of what Noah and his crew are trying to accomplish. Fun fit with Jasper. They can be big sissies. Lunch made right after breakfast? That's really planning. Great action in this. Good pace for the story. judi
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate it.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this was a great chapter and it certainly ended with no a great cliff hanger. It's a dangerous situation and it has as to be pursued as soon as possible. I really like this story. You're doing a great work. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Hi Barbara, this was a great chapter and it certainly ended with no a great cliff hanger. It's a dangerous situation and it has as to be pursued as soon as possible. I really like this story. You're doing a great work. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from patcelaw
And I enjoyed listening to it. It flows very well when it is read that you're sending sentence structure and your paragraph is done very well. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. And I also wish you the best with your book. Patricia
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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And I enjoyed listening to it. It flows very well when it is read that you're sending sentence structure and your paragraph is done very well. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. And I also wish you the best with your book. Patricia
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
In this chapter, tension mounts as unexpected events unfold in the dead of night. Sami, Bob, Sarah, and Noah find themselves confronted with a dilemma when Jasper, Sami's dog, becomes distressed by a storm. Despite their efforts to calm him, Jasper's fear disrupts the peace of the night, prompting Sami to consider alternative arrangements to prevent further disturbance to her companions.
I want to read more.
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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In this chapter, tension mounts as unexpected events unfold in the dead of night. Sami, Bob, Sarah, and Noah find themselves confronted with a dilemma when Jasper, Sami's dog, becomes distressed by a storm. Despite their efforts to calm him, Jasper's fear disrupts the peace of the night, prompting Sami to consider alternative arrangements to prevent further disturbance to her companions.
I want to read more.
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from estory
What seems like a continuation of the slow dance of Noah and Sami suddenly erupts out of nowhere into this tense standoff at the end with this guy Ryan trying to get to Sami. Guns drawn, dog bristling; sharp language; it all grabs our attention and we have to wonder what this guy is up to. It throws another monkey wrench into the plot here. Someone else to worry about. estory
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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What seems like a continuation of the slow dance of Noah and Sami suddenly erupts out of nowhere into this tense standoff at the end with this guy Ryan trying to get to Sami. Guns drawn, dog bristling; sharp language; it all grabs our attention and we have to wonder what this guy is up to. It throws another monkey wrench into the plot here. Someone else to worry about. estory
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thanjk you for the kind review. Yes, Noah is struggling. LOL