Willing Hearts
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Comment from tfawcus
I like the way you are gradually preparing the ground to enable Noah and Sami to make up.
Another good chapter.
A couple of small nits:
only that, you waited until Sami was walking Jasper so you're sure she couldn't hear. Just say what (you) want.
Missing line break here:
You know you've got to show it so we can compare it to ones we've had and decide who had the best bruise."
"You know he's right. It's all about bragging rights," agreed Bob.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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I like the way you are gradually preparing the ground to enable Noah and Sami to make up.
Another good chapter.
A couple of small nits:
only that, you waited until Sami was walking Jasper so you're sure she couldn't hear. Just say what (you) want.
Missing line break here:
You know you've got to show it so we can compare it to ones we've had and decide who had the best bruise."
"You know he's right. It's all about bragging rights," agreed Bob.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the catches. I have made the corrections and appreciate the help.
Comment from Daylily
Another excellent chapter with a lot of emotional progress. Your writing continues to be very believable, Barbara. Nothing noted for editing. Great job.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Another excellent chapter with a lot of emotional progress. Your writing continues to be very believable, Barbara. Nothing noted for editing. Great job.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Much, much better, Sami is starting to act smarter now. I did not care for her when she acted out of character like a petulant teenager. It didn't seem to fit. I do not have all the parts and plots in my head like you do, so, I see things different than you. I am starting to like her now. Keep writing this. In your notes you said that you were going to move this to Sunday after Seth and Sami were finished, Don't you mean "Emma"? Karen
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Much, much better, Sami is starting to act smarter now. I did not care for her when she acted out of character like a petulant teenager. It didn't seem to fit. I do not have all the parts and plots in my head like you do, so, I see things different than you. I am starting to like her now. Keep writing this. In your notes you said that you were going to move this to Sunday after Seth and Sami were finished, Don't you mean "Emma"? Karen
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I fixed that area. LOL
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Poor Noah, he tries so hard, but Sami isn't that good at forgiveness. Everything Noah has done for her, and still she doesn't really trust him. One day she will realise he actually has saved her life at least a couple of times. Another excellent chapter, Barbara. Well done! :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Poor Noah, he tries so hard, but Sami isn't that good at forgiveness. Everything Noah has done for her, and still she doesn't really trust him. One day she will realise he actually has saved her life at least a couple of times. Another excellent chapter, Barbara. Well done! :)) Sandra
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm glad you explained the picture, Barbara ( 'bruise' in your notes) because I thought it was some kind of ingested worm - horrible!) Your story flows well with excellent dialogue giving background and character building. I'm glad that Sami is now becoming a bit more understanding of Noah. Small edit:He was shot is(all?) because of me. I think there was another error but can't find it now. But your story is reading well. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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I'm glad you explained the picture, Barbara ( 'bruise' in your notes) because I thought it was some kind of ingested worm - horrible!) Your story flows well with excellent dialogue giving background and character building. I'm glad that Sami is now becoming a bit more understanding of Noah. Small edit:He was shot is(all?) because of me. I think there was another error but can't find it now. But your story is reading well. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You are moving the story along nicely. I am getting to know your characters. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. You are moving the story along nicely. I am getting to know your characters. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I'm happy Noah is okay... and Sami is nicer. LoL I think Sarah helped.
I enjoyed this chapter a lot. The characters are growing on me. Well done.
Gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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I'm happy Noah is okay... and Sami is nicer. LoL I think Sarah helped.
I enjoyed this chapter a lot. The characters are growing on me. Well done.
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Sami is going to become a lot softer. LOL
Comment from Paul McFarland
It looks like we are seeing a little improvement in the relationship between Noah and Sami. I'm sure that you will through some obstacles in their path before the end.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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It looks like we are seeing a little improvement in the relationship between Noah and Sami. I'm sure that you will through some obstacles in their path before the end.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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A have a feeling a few more obstacles will arise in this novel. LOl Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
This was another interesting chapter. Noticing you sort of omit some joining words. Whether on purpose or accidentally. Let me know what you think? Is it coding or something?
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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This was another interesting chapter. Noticing you sort of omit some joining words. Whether on purpose or accidentally. Let me know what you think? Is it coding or something?
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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I'm not exactly sure what you mean, but I will recheck this post, for sure. Thank you for the kind review.
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A few words missing here and there. Let me know.
Comment from Begin Again
I so wish I could give you a six for this chapter. It was awesome. The play between Noah and Sami, the tension and both struggling with whatever emotions that are building. I had to laugh because your Noah and my Jake are almost the same. Great job!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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I so wish I could give you a six for this chapter. It was awesome. The play between Noah and Sami, the tension and both struggling with whatever emotions that are building. I had to laugh because your Noah and my Jake are almost the same. Great job!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate you.