Apple Pie Hill
This is a rhymed poem.42 total reviews
Comment from bob cullen
This is so good. The words flow so nicely and neatly together. to my eyes your meter and rhythm are near perfect. The images too present pictures to the eyes. I felt I was there with the writer. A truly beautiful poem. Thank you. My son used to live in Atlanta. I wish I'd have known where this was when he lived there. I'd love to visit.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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This is so good. The words flow so nicely and neatly together. to my eyes your meter and rhythm are near perfect. The images too present pictures to the eyes. I felt I was there with the writer. A truly beautiful poem. Thank you. My son used to live in Atlanta. I wish I'd have known where this was when he lived there. I'd love to visit.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Hello Bob. Thank you for the marvelous review and rating for my poem, Apple Pie Hill. I?m glad you enjoyed the sensory imagery and the rhymes. Thanks for noting the images too.
We are a long way from Atlanta, about eight hundred miles.
I appreciated the encouraging comments and six stars very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from SimianSavant
Beautifully descriptive, this piece got my attention for its vivid imagery and excellent detailed notes, along with often excellent flow and occasional alliteration.
There're tales of <= this is workable as folksy vernacular, if that is what you are going for. If you want to avoid the extra beat slipped in, some alternate options might include: "I've heard of", "Folks tell of".
The croaking of male frogs <= to keep the accent from ending slightly awkwardly on the adjective, maybe try "bullfrogs" or "peepers", unless you feel that's inaccurate to the species you are hearing.
Thanks for a great read. I wasn't planning on giving out any more 6 ratings before my subscription expires, but this was a solid entry on the site.
SS
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Beautifully descriptive, this piece got my attention for its vivid imagery and excellent detailed notes, along with often excellent flow and occasional alliteration.
There're tales of <= this is workable as folksy vernacular, if that is what you are going for. If you want to avoid the extra beat slipped in, some alternate options might include: "I've heard of", "Folks tell of".
The croaking of male frogs <= to keep the accent from ending slightly awkwardly on the adjective, maybe try "bullfrogs" or "peepers", unless you feel that's inaccurate to the species you are hearing.
Thanks for a great read. I wasn't planning on giving out any more 6 ratings before my subscription expires, but this was a solid entry on the site.
SS
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Hello Sim. Thank you for the marvelous review and rating for my poem, Apple Pie Hill. I?m glad you enjoyed the sensory imagery and the metrical flow, as well as the author notes.
"There're" is a bit awkward, but considered one syllable so the eleven syllables are consist.
Your suggests are very good however. I will give them some thought.
The treefrogs are a specific group of frogs, so bullfrogs won't work.
I tried "male" and "green" and chose male as the best fit, though the flow it's not as smooth as desired.
Sad to here you will be leaving the site soon. You add some much needed zest and humor.
I appreciated the encouraging comments and six stars very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from Wendy G
I thoroughly enjoyed your poem with its rich and eloquent descriptions of nature, the mill, and the passing of time. Beautiful rhyme and metre. I hope you have success for this outstanding entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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I thoroughly enjoyed your poem with its rich and eloquent descriptions of nature, the mill, and the passing of time. Beautiful rhyme and metre. I hope you have success for this outstanding entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Hello Wendy.Thank you for the marvelous review and rating for my poem, Apple Pie Hill. I?m glad you enjoyed the sensory imagery, as well as the rhymes and meter.
I appreciated the encouraging comments and success wishes very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from nancyjam
This is a beautifully descriptive poem of a unique area of New Jersey.
The rhythm and rhyme as well as terrific imagery add to the reader's enjoyment
Of the piece. Well done!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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This is a beautifully descriptive poem of a unique area of New Jersey.
The rhythm and rhyme as well as terrific imagery add to the reader's enjoyment
Of the piece. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Hello Nancy. Thank you for the wonderful review and rating for my poem, Apple Pie Hill. I?m glad you enjoyed the sensory imagery and the rhymes.
I appreciated the encouraging comments and six stars very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a masterful poem about a special place I have never been but always wanted to visit. It is the scene of many mysterious stories. American gothic horror fiction at is best takes place in the Pine barrens, which should be a national park.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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a masterful poem about a special place I have never been but always wanted to visit. It is the scene of many mysterious stories. American gothic horror fiction at is best takes place in the Pine barrens, which should be a national park.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Hello Jake. Thank you for the excellent review and rating for my poem, Apple Pie Hill. I?m glad you enjoyed the sensory imagery and the history, and myth attached to it. The Jersey devil story is well known in this area.
I appreciated the encouraging comments and stars very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from forestport12
The poem really put me in the moment. I loved how you used senses of taste too. My mind's eye could see the walk and effort through the scrub brush and all nature's surroundings. Memorable.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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The poem really put me in the moment. I loved how you used senses of taste too. My mind's eye could see the walk and effort through the scrub brush and all nature's surroundings. Memorable.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Hello Forestport. Thank you for the marvelous review and rating for my poem, Apple Pie Hill. I?m glad you enjoyed the sensory imagery and the history of the area.
I appreciated the encouraging comments and six stars very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Masterfully penned, Robert. You included such descriptive detail as to make me feel I was actually there.
You inclusion of the biodiversity was a great reminder that there are still some preserved places where true nature can be observed and appreciated.
You even had the bit of mystery thrown in with a hint of a devilish haunting. Makes me want to visit even more.
I love the history lesson about the preserve had how much land and how many species are being protected.
The vast array of ecosystems is really astounding. The Dwarf Forest sounds particularly cool.
What made you pick this particular reserve? Is it close to you, or a favorite?
Anyway you look at it, you have a very well written poem with lots of interesting details. Best of luck in the contest.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Masterfully penned, Robert. You included such descriptive detail as to make me feel I was actually there.
You inclusion of the biodiversity was a great reminder that there are still some preserved places where true nature can be observed and appreciated.
You even had the bit of mystery thrown in with a hint of a devilish haunting. Makes me want to visit even more.
I love the history lesson about the preserve had how much land and how many species are being protected.
The vast array of ecosystems is really astounding. The Dwarf Forest sounds particularly cool.
What made you pick this particular reserve? Is it close to you, or a favorite?
Anyway you look at it, you have a very well written poem with lots of interesting details. Best of luck in the contest.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Hello Rhonda.Thank you for the marvelous review and rating for my poem, Apple Pie Hill. I?m glad you enjoyed the sensory imagery and the history of the area.
I've hiked and canoed the trails and rivers for many decades, specifically seeking out the ruins and stories attached to them. We actually live on the edge of the pinelands, and hear the tree frogs on summer nights.
The dwarf forest is about an hour drive from here, closer the the ocean.
I appreciated the encouraging comments and six stars very much, my friend.
Best wishes.
Robert
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You know, I was thinking it sounded like you?d actually been there. I could feel it through your words. How very special!
Comment from QC Poet
A great poem with many visual references that make any reader want to see for themselves plus the added ghost story adds more excitement to the poem Thanks for Sharing
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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A great poem with many visual references that make any reader want to see for themselves plus the added ghost story adds more excitement to the poem Thanks for Sharing
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Hello QC.Thank you for the excellent review and rating for my poem, Apple Pie Hill. I?m glad you enjoyed the sensory imager.
I appreciated the encouraging comments and stars very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from hullabaloo22
Wow! What gorgeous descriptions you managed to give, along with quite a lot of facts. It's certainly not any easy thing to do without sacrificing either rhythm, rhyme or both but you kept it going strong throughout.
Beautiful accompanying pictures too.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Wow! What gorgeous descriptions you managed to give, along with quite a lot of facts. It's certainly not any easy thing to do without sacrificing either rhythm, rhyme or both but you kept it going strong throughout.
Beautiful accompanying pictures too.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Hello hullabaloo. Thank you for the wonderful review and excellent rating for my poem, Apple Pie Hill. I?m glad you enjoyed the descriptive imagery and the rhymes. thanks for noting the picture too.
I appreciated the encouraging comments and stars very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm glad this land is protected. We need more of that in the US. I enjoyed reading contest entry. Your descriptions were perfect as were the rhymes. Good luck with the contest.
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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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I'm glad this land is protected. We need more of that in the US. I enjoyed reading contest entry. Your descriptions were perfect as were the rhymes. Good luck with the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Hello Barbara. Thank you for the excellent review and rating for my poem, Apple Pie Hill. I?m glad you enjoyed the descriptive imagery and the rhymes.
I appreciated the encouraging comments and good luck wishes very much.
Best wishes to you.
Robert