The Broken Pact
Rhyming Poem contest41 total reviews
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Wow!!! This is a very well written piece of fiction. It reads like a fantastic story and the verses are powerful and sharp. I do seriously think this could be turned into a great saga, I can see episode 2, 3 and so on!!
Very well written.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Wow!!! This is a very well written piece of fiction. It reads like a fantastic story and the verses are powerful and sharp. I do seriously think this could be turned into a great saga, I can see episode 2, 3 and so on!!
Very well written.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the great review, Mario. I didn't really have a second one in mind while writing this but I'm sure I'll be giving it some thought. I really appreciate the stars, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, Ron!
What an exceptionally well-crafted rhyming poem.
In terms of meter and rhythm = pristine.
In terms of story = captivating and robust.
I appreciate how your poem teases the reader into thinking that perhaps there may be a sequel! (Hint!)
Masterful and much enjoyed.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Good morning, Ron!
What an exceptionally well-crafted rhyming poem.
In terms of meter and rhythm = pristine.
In terms of story = captivating and robust.
I appreciate how your poem teases the reader into thinking that perhaps there may be a sequel! (Hint!)
Masterful and much enjoyed.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Hey, Diane, happy Easter. Thank you so much for the great review and giant sixer. Yes, a few people have mentioned wanting a second. I didn't really have one in mind but I'm sure I'll be giving it some thought. I'll have to delve into my medieval side and brew up something to follow. Lol. I always appreciate the stop in, Diane. Have yourself a wonderful rest of your weekend and thank you again.
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Ron
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This artwork inspired a great tale of war and loss and the revenge that is to come. Well rhymed, it flows beautifully as you read and a good story. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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This artwork inspired a great tale of war and loss and the revenge that is to come. Well rhymed, it flows beautifully as you read and a good story. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and big sixer, Pearl. When I came across this picture in a Google search I just had to use it. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have yourself a wonderful Easter and thank you again.
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Ron
Comment from Sanku
This is a piece of legendary fiction ,like the clan wars of old days .You have written it in very crisply crafted lines with smooth rhymes. all the best for the contest .I am sure this would win.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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This is a piece of legendary fiction ,like the clan wars of old days .You have written it in very crisply crafted lines with smooth rhymes. all the best for the contest .I am sure this would win.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the great review, Sanku. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked my little tale of woe. Have yourself a great rest of your weekend.
Ron
Comment from Kayliegh
Oh. My. Gosh! This is the best poem I've ever read period! This is absolutely amazing, and tells a full story in just a few perfectly worded, amazingly rhymed lines! It is absolutely perfect in every single way, and I can't find a single flaw with it. From the actual poem, to the picture, to the background color choice everything is amazing! The story and characterization of this is in such detail in so little words that it's almost insane. I know now a lot about this character in so little words, and about the world itself! Also, is there going to be a part two of this, where we find out if he saves his wife or not? Now, quick but important thing, your soul.
Now I'd like you to think briefly of the most beautiful painting you've ever seen.
Do you look at that and think the painting created itself? No of course not. The painting means there must be a painter. Now think of every sunrise, sunset, mountain, blade of grass, your friends, family, pets, every cell in your being. You don't really honk that all created itself do you? Of course not, there has to be a God to create that creation.
And no matter how good of a person you think you are, you have sinned against that God. But there is still hope for you, that's why Jesus died on the cross for you, yes you. Repent of your sins and trust in Jesus and he will replace your heart of stone for a heart of flesh. I'm not exactly the height of knowledge on the topic, so I would highly recommend that for more information you go to Living Waters on YouTube, please just watch one video and you won't regret it. Alright have a nice day, God bless.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Oh. My. Gosh! This is the best poem I've ever read period! This is absolutely amazing, and tells a full story in just a few perfectly worded, amazingly rhymed lines! It is absolutely perfect in every single way, and I can't find a single flaw with it. From the actual poem, to the picture, to the background color choice everything is amazing! The story and characterization of this is in such detail in so little words that it's almost insane. I know now a lot about this character in so little words, and about the world itself! Also, is there going to be a part two of this, where we find out if he saves his wife or not? Now, quick but important thing, your soul.
Now I'd like you to think briefly of the most beautiful painting you've ever seen.
Do you look at that and think the painting created itself? No of course not. The painting means there must be a painter. Now think of every sunrise, sunset, mountain, blade of grass, your friends, family, pets, every cell in your being. You don't really honk that all created itself do you? Of course not, there has to be a God to create that creation.
And no matter how good of a person you think you are, you have sinned against that God. But there is still hope for you, that's why Jesus died on the cross for you, yes you. Repent of your sins and trust in Jesus and he will replace your heart of stone for a heart of flesh. I'm not exactly the height of knowledge on the topic, so I would highly recommend that for more information you go to Living Waters on YouTube, please just watch one video and you won't regret it. Alright have a nice day, God bless.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Kayliegh. I like to do that, put as much as I can in as few words possible. The picture actually inspired the piece. I'm glad you liked it so much. Me and God are pretty tight. Have yourself a great Easter and thank you again.
Ron
Comment from JT traveller
Your well woven descriptions create vivid imagery for the reader. Nicely composed with good meter. Your poem tells an exciting story. A fantastic piece of writing. Well done
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Your well woven descriptions create vivid imagery for the reader. Nicely composed with good meter. Your poem tells an exciting story. A fantastic piece of writing. Well done
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the great review and stars, JT. I really appreciate it. I'm glad you liked my little story/poem. Have yourself a great day.
Ron
Comment from rspoet
Hello Ron,
Top notch. A marvelous entry for the contest with exact rhymes in the abab scheme and smooth meter. The fantasy story is well done and engages the readers from the first line. The Gastiff Clan is in for a reckoning, which would be a splendid part II.
This should do well in the contest, depending on the committee of course.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Hello Ron,
Top notch. A marvelous entry for the contest with exact rhymes in the abab scheme and smooth meter. The fantasy story is well done and engages the readers from the first line. The Gastiff Clan is in for a reckoning, which would be a splendid part II.
This should do well in the contest, depending on the committee of course.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Hey, Robert, hi. Thank you so much for the fantastic review and giant sixer, my friend. Yeah, fantasy doesn't usually fly to high on here but I'll keep my fingers crossed. Lol. I didn't really have a second part in mind yet but there might be. I really appreciate it, Robert. Have a great Easter and thank you again.
Ron
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Dragonskulls.
This is a well told story in rhyme. It sounds like warring Scottish clans.
I feel sorry for, what seems, the soul survivor or the raid on her village.
I don't know what army this man is going to avenge his family land friends with.
Congrats on your second place finish in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Hi Dragonskulls.
This is a well told story in rhyme. It sounds like warring Scottish clans.
I feel sorry for, what seems, the soul survivor or the raid on her village.
I don't know what army this man is going to avenge his family land friends with.
Congrats on your second place finish in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the great review, Joan. He has the little band of a few men and love driving him. That's all he needs. Lol. I appreciate the stars, J. Have yourself a great Easter.
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Ron
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You're welcome on both accounts, DS.
Happy Easter to you too.
Joan
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent ode, and it tells of noble deeds with a bounty on its head, but their is a shift in the saga to another quest, this time of justice in the mind of the lover. A beautifully written work, smooth articulate and well rhymed in tetrameter stanzas with abab as it's rhyme scheme, well done Ron, a classic, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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This is an excellent ode, and it tells of noble deeds with a bounty on its head, but their is a shift in the saga to another quest, this time of justice in the mind of the lover. A beautifully written work, smooth articulate and well rhymed in tetrameter stanzas with abab as it's rhyme scheme, well done Ron, a classic, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the fantastic review and stars, Roy. I love writing medieval based stuff and I was just in the mood again. Lol. I really appreciate it, friend. Have yourself a great Easter.
Ron
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Most welcome
Comment from jessizero
This doesn't remind me of your other work, but I loved it just as much. It was epic, and it matched the picture well. Thank you so much for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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This doesn't remind me of your other work, but I loved it just as much. It was epic, and it matched the picture well. Thank you so much for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the great review, Jessi. Yeah, I was in one of my medieval moods last night. Lol. I always appreciate the stars and stop in, J. Have yourself a fantastic Easter.
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Ron
