Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 103 "My jewel has no price"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Nic
This is a lovely image you have painted here, far more impressive even than the photo. I love the magic that you have found in what many would see as an ordinary place. The only thing I might suggest is moving the reveal of the place as the speakers backyard until further in the poem. It steals some of it's own thunder when stated in the second or third line.
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This is a lovely image you have painted here, far more impressive even than the photo. I love the magic that you have found in what many would see as an ordinary place. The only thing I might suggest is moving the reveal of the place as the speakers backyard until further in the poem. It steals some of it's own thunder when stated in the second or third line.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
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Nic thank you!
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello again JLR I hope you are enjoying your day. I like your Take a photo poetry contest entry. How you got all that from that picture amazes me. looking at the same picture I don't know if I could come up with half as much. Different things inspire different people I guess. Good Job!
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Hello again JLR I hope you are enjoying your day. I like your Take a photo poetry contest entry. How you got all that from that picture amazes me. looking at the same picture I don't know if I could come up with half as much. Different things inspire different people I guess. Good Job!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
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My good friend, so good to hear from you! I am so fortunate to have such a sight to reflect upon so close. The trick for me, however, is to pause and breathe into the tranquility this provides.
Comment from dragonpoet
Jim,
You use line breaks, space and your imagery well in this free verse poem to remind us the peace and Beaty that can be found in our own backyards. It also makes the rain a metaphor for new life.
Good photo and good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
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Jim,
You use line breaks, space and your imagery well in this free verse poem to remind us the peace and Beaty that can be found in our own backyards. It also makes the rain a metaphor for new life.
Good photo and good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
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Joan, I am so fortunate to have such a sight to reflect upon so close. The trick for me, however, is to pause and breathe into the tranquility this provides.
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We often take these thongs fo granted and fail to see the inspiration they can give.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice photo and poem to go with it.
-You create an excellent word picture of the nature that surrounds you.
-There are many good images in this poem:
"rhapsodizing with the whisper of a breeze" and
"dreams of precious fine-cut emeralds."
-I like how you included the animals and characterized them by their behaviors and how you " share with many four-legged neighbors."
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
-One small thing: consider humidity instead of humidness
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-Very nice photo and poem to go with it.
-You create an excellent word picture of the nature that surrounds you.
-There are many good images in this poem:
"rhapsodizing with the whisper of a breeze" and
"dreams of precious fine-cut emeralds."
-I like how you included the animals and characterized them by their behaviors and how you " share with many four-legged neighbors."
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
-One small thing: consider humidity instead of humidness
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
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Pam thanks I did consider this and changes are forthcoming, thank you for this generous sixer! 🤗🤗🎶🎶🎶
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You are very welcome and deserving of the six; an excellent poem, Jim!!!!
Comment from dmt1967
This is a great photo to write a poem about. I like the way your poem adds to the picture as well as the picture adding to the poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Have a great weekend.
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This is a great photo to write a poem about. I like the way your poem adds to the picture as well as the picture adding to the poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Have a great weekend.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
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dmt1967...I am so fortunate to have such a sight to reflect upon so close. The trick for me, however, is to pause and breathe into the tranquility this provides.
Comment from Wendy G
What a marvellous photo. I certainly understand how this view, and the presence of beautiful animals, could prompt a lyrical outpouring such as your poem. Very expressive, luxurious vocabulary. Your jewel is definitely without price. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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What a marvellous photo. I certainly understand how this view, and the presence of beautiful animals, could prompt a lyrical outpouring such as your poem. Very expressive, luxurious vocabulary. Your jewel is definitely without price. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
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Wendy, thank you! Yes, we are truly blessed! But .. we must ...pause and breathe in every precious moment to truly absorb the gift of God.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, My Jewel Has No Price, finds the poet in a state of rapture with the natural world and immediate environment which serves as home and a place for an extended family. Nice.
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This poem, My Jewel Has No Price, finds the poet in a state of rapture with the natural world and immediate environment which serves as home and a place for an extended family. Nice.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
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Hi Bill, Yes, we are truly blessed! But .. we must ...pause and breathe in every precious moment to truly absorb the gift of God.
Comment from Gloria ....
A beautiful free verse poem here, J. Many fine images and an atmosphere that speaks of tranquility. How nice to have a babbling brook just outside your back door along with all the other things in nature.
Excellent photograph and I wish you great luck with the Contest Committee with this gem. :))
Gloria
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A beautiful free verse poem here, J. Many fine images and an atmosphere that speaks of tranquility. How nice to have a babbling brook just outside your back door along with all the other things in nature.
Excellent photograph and I wish you great luck with the Contest Committee with this gem. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
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Gloria, thank you! Yes, we are truly blessed! But .. we must ...pause and breathe in every precious moment to truly absorb the gift of God.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
great poem about nature and your own slice of paradise just outside your door. I like the format and I like the ending stanzas the best as it sums up the poem nicely.
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great poem about nature and your own slice of paradise just outside your door. I like the format and I like the ending stanzas the best as it sums up the poem nicely.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
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Hi Jake, thanks! Yes, we are truly blessed! But .. we must ...pause and breathe in every precious moment to truly absorb the gift of God.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A green scene with much wildlife described here and I enjoyed the magic and freedom in nature here. I never tire of the vibrant life outside our door, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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A green scene with much wildlife described here and I enjoyed the magic and freedom in nature here. I never tire of the vibrant life outside our door, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
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Thank you! Yes, we are truly blessed! But .. we must ...pause and breathe in every precious moment to truly absorb the gift of God.