They Walked Home From The Morgue
Six dead men walked their home from the morgue33 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Six dead men walked their home from the morgue
They Walked Home From The Morgue
Hello unknown author your 33 Word Spiritual Fiction writing.
The only thing I can say to you unknown spiritual writer God never disappears but, God has His Mighty power to bring us to His heavenly home
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Six dead men walked their home from the morgue
They Walked Home From The Morgue
Hello unknown author your 33 Word Spiritual Fiction writing.
The only thing I can say to you unknown spiritual writer God never disappears but, God has His Mighty power to bring us to His heavenly home
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Wayne Fowler
The sentence - They walked home after God ... fails to make sense to me. I don't know if commas would help, or not. Is God Dr. Dawn? Did God release them from the morgue?
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The sentence - They walked home after God ... fails to make sense to me. I don't know if commas would help, or not. Is God Dr. Dawn? Did God release them from the morgue?
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from nomi338
There is only one entity that is an expert on life, its beginning and its ending as well. That entity is of course the creator of life. He is the one who can either shorten or prolong life. It is entirely his choice.
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There is only one entity that is an expert on life, its beginning and its ending as well. That entity is of course the creator of life. He is the one who can either shorten or prolong life. It is entirely his choice.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hi there, I wasn't sure why those six men took three doses of the corona virus. There was two doctors amongst them who should have known better, and they all died! You've used exactly 33 words for this spiritual story. Well done and good luck. Sandra
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Hi there, I wasn't sure why those six men took three doses of the corona virus. There was two doctors amongst them who should have known better, and they all died! You've used exactly 33 words for this spiritual story. Well done and good luck. Sandra
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hi there, I wasn't sure why those six men took three doses of the corona virus. There was two doctors amongst them who should have known better, and they all died! You've used exactly 33 words for this spiritual story. Well done and good luck. Sandra
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Hi there, I wasn't sure why those six men took three doses of the corona virus. There was two doctors amongst them who should have known better, and they all died! You've used exactly 33 words for this spiritual story. Well done and good luck. Sandra
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Dear Alcreator Litt Dear DR,
I enjoyed your short fiction. I pray we all get to walk home to God someday. Your writing was profound and believable. It met the contest rules. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Darlene
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Dear Alcreator Litt Dear DR,
I enjoyed your short fiction. I pray we all get to walk home to God someday. Your writing was profound and believable. It met the contest rules. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Darlene
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Judy Lawless
Hmm, I can't say that I understand this because, honestly, I don't. It could be satire, maybe? You did get the word count right, and you did mention God, so good luck in the contest.
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Hmm, I can't say that I understand this because, honestly, I don't. It could be satire, maybe? You did get the word count right, and you did mention God, so good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Raul1
This is an interesting 33 word flash fiction story. It is well written. I have enjoyed reading your story. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
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This is an interesting 33 word flash fiction story. It is well written. I have enjoyed reading your story. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Good poem for the short spiritual prompt. The last line is especially intriguing to me as it can be interpreted in many ways and you leave it to the reader to decide the meaning. well done.
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Good poem for the short spiritual prompt. The last line is especially intriguing to me as it can be interpreted in many ways and you leave it to the reader to decide the meaning. well done.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from LisaMay
Your thought-provoking short story carries a lot of current preoccupations: The virus itself, those worthy lives cut short, the efficacy of being vaccinated 3 times, and God Himself - should we still follow or has he disappeared from our lives? Skilfully done to craft so much into a mere 3 words.
Initial reading left some ambiguity for me here: "...took three Coronavirus doses but died of Corona."
It sounded like three of them were infected by Coronavirus. Maybe if you changed 'doses' to 'vaccinations' I would've understood immediately. In my country we say someone got a dose of the virus when they catch it.
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Your thought-provoking short story carries a lot of current preoccupations: The virus itself, those worthy lives cut short, the efficacy of being vaccinated 3 times, and God Himself - should we still follow or has he disappeared from our lives? Skilfully done to craft so much into a mere 3 words.
Initial reading left some ambiguity for me here: "...took three Coronavirus doses but died of Corona."
It sounded like three of them were infected by Coronavirus. Maybe if you changed 'doses' to 'vaccinations' I would've understood immediately. In my country we say someone got a dose of the virus when they catch it.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022