Genius in Love
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
WOW!!! You even provided music for us. GREAT! I enjoyed reading this. So basically each parent has something to hide and Cornelius may be the only truly honest person here. Well, probably Jennie, too.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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WOW!!! You even provided music for us. GREAT! I enjoyed reading this. So basically each parent has something to hide and Cornelius may be the only truly honest person here. Well, probably Jennie, too.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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So happy you enjoyed it, Barbara. Howard's a blowhard. Gary's more than happy to point that out to him. Phyllis is hurting. Life is tough, isn't it? Cornelius is the only one who has to dig so deep for every ounce of gain that others tend to take for granted.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I have to say that I enjoyed listening to both pieces of music. It is a great addition to this scene. The dialogues are natural. The mentioning of Howard's chemical being used in the WWII is good. A lot of Fortune500 companies are in that position so they can reap in enormous profits.
Despite of its length, I enjoyed reading this scene.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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I have to say that I enjoyed listening to both pieces of music. It is a great addition to this scene. The dialogues are natural. The mentioning of Howard's chemical being used in the WWII is good. A lot of Fortune500 companies are in that position so they can reap in enormous profits.
Despite of its length, I enjoyed reading this scene.
Well done.
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Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thanks, Lisa. I'm glad you found the music added to the drama.
Comment from Ric Myworld
This could be my favorite scene yet. One that moves us along in a regimented meeting and straight toward the catch in our throat and moist eyes. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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This could be my favorite scene yet. One that moves us along in a regimented meeting and straight toward the catch in our throat and moist eyes. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Oh, thank you, Ric. You made my morning. Though I hadn't intended it at the beginning of scene 12, this may very well be the conclusion of the play. Thank you for supporting it and for your stupendous six stars!
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
OMG! what a reading experience for me. I had read it at a slow pace to understand the characters and their mood and the setting. But I have to admit that you are a master in making readers feel they are watching a play. The dialogues draw you into the scene. Well done!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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OMG! what a reading experience for me. I had read it at a slow pace to understand the characters and their mood and the setting. But I have to admit that you are a master in making readers feel they are watching a play. The dialogues draw you into the scene. Well done!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Seshadri, your review is so special to me. Thank you for taking your time with the reading and being so kind in your accolades, then following it with a six!
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Jay. I wish I could get away with just saying that. But, of course that won't do. A few surprises were sprung in this scene. It was long but, before I knew it, it had come to an end. I did follow your instructions. I've always loved Chopin.
As a by de by, he lived quite a few years in Mallorca, some hundred nautical miles from where I live. His house is now a museum, his piano preserved. Sorry, couldn't help myself. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Wow, Jay. I wish I could get away with just saying that. But, of course that won't do. A few surprises were sprung in this scene. It was long but, before I knew it, it had come to an end. I did follow your instructions. I've always loved Chopin.
As a by de by, he lived quite a few years in Mallorca, some hundred nautical miles from where I live. His house is now a museum, his piano preserved. Sorry, couldn't help myself. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Oh, Ulla thanks for the bit of Chopin history! I'm happy you followed the instructions and that they enhanced your experience. After your kind words, the six star was a cherry on top!
Comment from BethShelby
OH...you are good. You go to great links to make us feel like we are really watching this play on on stage. I feel like I've actually watched all this rather than read it. This is great. I think eveyone is impressed at how well everything is going. Cililla had done a wonderful job with her coaching of Cornelius. Howard wasn't expecting to be impressed by these people but when he find Gary is a famous novelist, he is. This is an amazing scene.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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OH...you are good. You go to great links to make us feel like we are really watching this play on on stage. I feel like I've actually watched all this rather than read it. This is great. I think eveyone is impressed at how well everything is going. Cililla had done a wonderful job with her coaching of Cornelius. Howard wasn't expecting to be impressed by these people but when he find Gary is a famous novelist, he is. This is an amazing scene.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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The problem is ... though I added a few more characters with the Jaxes and Clarinetta, the story seemed to come to a natural end. I think the play might be over. What do you think? Thank you so much for your kindness and he six stars.
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It is ending on a high note if this is where you choose to end it. I will miss it. Only you would know if there is more to tell,
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is riveting, Jay! So much going on here with new personalities being introduced and an interesting revelation about Jennie's family. Since it's the middle of the night here and our condo is small, and my headphones are packed away, I'll re-read this tomorrow while listening to the music. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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This is riveting, Jay! So much going on here with new personalities being introduced and an interesting revelation about Jennie's family. Since it's the middle of the night here and our condo is small, and my headphones are packed away, I'll re-read this tomorrow while listening to the music. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you so very much, Judy. I hope you do read at least the part with the playing of the Pineapple Rag. I tried to time the music with the dialogue so the music ended at the right spot. Really appreciate the six stars.
Comment from Senyai
Hi Jay,
Aww, Cornie did well with the Jax family's visit. The picture you paint in this scene is a relief with Cornie looking at eyebrows when addressing Mr. and Mrs. Jax and even Jennie. Cornie has trouble with eye contact since it is SO personal it throws Cornie off balance. Cililla told him to look at peoples's ears but Cornelius offered one better and said "people, everyone has eyebrows." He is listening to Cililla now and trusting her as he has definitely outgrown Piddly Poo.
The scene in the den with the Plumb's and Jax's is especially revealing and now we get a chance to see that dynamic play out, hear the more in depth background of Mr. Plumb's job of a large Fortune 500 chemical company and more of Toloache's acting coach school with Clarinetta, a student at the school paying her tuition by being the Plumb's maid, as well as Gary Jax being a writer with the pen name of Robin Craddock. The Plumbs have heard of him.
There is a bit of tension with Howard and Gary and is often the case, when their jobs are tossed around, especially when Howard abruptly asked Phyllis what she does. Gary said his wife is a painter and VERY good. With which Howard lobs back, check out this Cubist painting (he doesn't even care to know the artist or the name of the painting, just how much it cost him at auction and that is was a good investment.). Phyllis offers the name of the painting as Midnight Ministry by Mexican artist Jorge Dorado. Not sure if this impresses Howard, as his demeanor is hard to read. Mr Jax has a drink with Howard, even though he said previously that he gave that up, presumably after their son passed away only a month prior. Both sets of parents are nervous about their child meeting the other family as it is easy to read by their body language and speech. The tension rises to a point of contention when Gary says he wants to see if Cornelius is a "...chip off the old block ... if the acorn had fallen far from the oak". Lol
With Howard snapping back, "What's that supposed to mean?"
Jay, you thankfully had Cornie conduct his twelve year old self well, shaking Mrs. Jax's hand with "Pleased to meet you M-ma'm" while looking at her eyebrows and shook Mr.Jax's hand with only a small flub because he was asked "How are you?" and he answered, "I'm twelve, I mean ..p-pleased to meet you, sir". With that Phyllis gushed, "Isn't that precocious!"
and then ... Cornie is asked to perform on the piano, a Chopin, because he loves Chopin!. ...and can Jennie sit by him on the piano. The scene closed with beautiful perfectly played Chopin rising through the room, I can see in my minds eye that Gary and Phyllis are gobsmacked. Toloachi brushing away a tear and Howard Plumb never taking his eyes off his son with a new found respect on his face.
So good,Jay. You are indeed doing justice to this story! I do wish you would reconsider making this into an actual play :-)
All the best,
Senyai
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Hi Jay,
Aww, Cornie did well with the Jax family's visit. The picture you paint in this scene is a relief with Cornie looking at eyebrows when addressing Mr. and Mrs. Jax and even Jennie. Cornie has trouble with eye contact since it is SO personal it throws Cornie off balance. Cililla told him to look at peoples's ears but Cornelius offered one better and said "people, everyone has eyebrows." He is listening to Cililla now and trusting her as he has definitely outgrown Piddly Poo.
The scene in the den with the Plumb's and Jax's is especially revealing and now we get a chance to see that dynamic play out, hear the more in depth background of Mr. Plumb's job of a large Fortune 500 chemical company and more of Toloache's acting coach school with Clarinetta, a student at the school paying her tuition by being the Plumb's maid, as well as Gary Jax being a writer with the pen name of Robin Craddock. The Plumbs have heard of him.
There is a bit of tension with Howard and Gary and is often the case, when their jobs are tossed around, especially when Howard abruptly asked Phyllis what she does. Gary said his wife is a painter and VERY good. With which Howard lobs back, check out this Cubist painting (he doesn't even care to know the artist or the name of the painting, just how much it cost him at auction and that is was a good investment.). Phyllis offers the name of the painting as Midnight Ministry by Mexican artist Jorge Dorado. Not sure if this impresses Howard, as his demeanor is hard to read. Mr Jax has a drink with Howard, even though he said previously that he gave that up, presumably after their son passed away only a month prior. Both sets of parents are nervous about their child meeting the other family as it is easy to read by their body language and speech. The tension rises to a point of contention when Gary says he wants to see if Cornelius is a "...chip off the old block ... if the acorn had fallen far from the oak". Lol
With Howard snapping back, "What's that supposed to mean?"
Jay, you thankfully had Cornie conduct his twelve year old self well, shaking Mrs. Jax's hand with "Pleased to meet you M-ma'm" while looking at her eyebrows and shook Mr.Jax's hand with only a small flub because he was asked "How are you?" and he answered, "I'm twelve, I mean ..p-pleased to meet you, sir". With that Phyllis gushed, "Isn't that precocious!"
and then ... Cornie is asked to perform on the piano, a Chopin, because he loves Chopin!. ...and can Jennie sit by him on the piano. The scene closed with beautiful perfectly played Chopin rising through the room, I can see in my minds eye that Gary and Phyllis are gobsmacked. Toloachi brushing away a tear and Howard Plumb never taking his eyes off his son with a new found respect on his face.
So good,Jay. You are indeed doing justice to this story! I do wish you would reconsider making this into an actual play :-)
All the best,
Senyai
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Senyai, you were on the mark on every point I wanted to make, even as this scene took over and wrote itself, and I only realized my points toward the end. You are indeed a blessing for this play! Thank you for the six--as if your words weren't enough!
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I love Cornie, and Jennie. I am getting to know the parents better, and even have a little more love for stiff Howard, lol :-)
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Compelling conversation--superficial company chit-chat takes a dramatic turn--reminiscent of Who's Afraid of Virginia Woollf?
The Foxes=JAXES are pulling into the driveway. (unless you mean for her to make the error)
effecting=>AFFECTING a smile
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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Compelling conversation--superficial company chit-chat takes a dramatic turn--reminiscent of Who's Afraid of Virginia Woollf?
The Foxes=JAXES are pulling into the driveway. (unless you mean for her to make the error)
effecting=>AFFECTING a smile
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Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Well, Clarinetta is feisty. She also needs to work on her delivery. Just between you and me, it never happened. I certainly don't make mistakes like that. LOL, thanks, Liz. It is fixed. You don't know how many times I have to stop myself from writing Harold instead of Howard. Did you read or see the movie, "Whose Afraid of Virginia Woolfe?
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I saw the movie several times--intense! I think they were unwise to dilute the dramatic tension of the foursome by having them go to a bar where there were superfluous characters. As for making mistakes on names--I sometimes use pseudonyms for friends--mainly because I don't much care for their real names!--and I catch myself slipping.
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I saw the movie one time, with my wife. We were jointly depressed for days. I always wondered if their real-life marriage was that volatile.
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Apparently so--they were married and divorced twice!