Truth is Best
Letting go40 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Absolutely true that truth sets us free. So the quest is to find truth and hold onto it. This is a thought-provoking poem, raising many questions and philosophies for consideration. Thanks for sharing.
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Absolutely true that truth sets us free. So the quest is to find truth and hold onto it. This is a thought-provoking poem, raising many questions and philosophies for consideration. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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My joy in writing comes from helping others realize how wonderful it is to be connected to our own consciousness. Thank You....John
Comment from DonandVicki
I enjoyed reading this because it expresses feelings that I have. Life is temporary and we will never experience death because death is the lack of experience.
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I enjoyed reading this because it expresses feelings that I have. Life is temporary and we will never experience death because death is the lack of experience.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
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Many thanks for your thoughts....John
Comment from Reese Turner
Well, nice rhyme and meter. Interesting visual. The message is too deep for a shallow-end guy like me. For example, I have not even considered that I am "here to grow". I am here because my parents had sex. I have accepted responsibilities to contribute to the common good, and I have determined that with only one life assumed, I have to have a good time, just not make a pig of myself. Oh, and propagating the species? Did my part. 3 daughters. Now, helping them grow was a duty! Anyway, thought provoking poem as you can tell. Merry Christmas
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Well, nice rhyme and meter. Interesting visual. The message is too deep for a shallow-end guy like me. For example, I have not even considered that I am "here to grow". I am here because my parents had sex. I have accepted responsibilities to contribute to the common good, and I have determined that with only one life assumed, I have to have a good time, just not make a pig of myself. Oh, and propagating the species? Did my part. 3 daughters. Now, helping them grow was a duty! Anyway, thought provoking poem as you can tell. Merry Christmas
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
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Many thanks for your thoughts....John
Comment from royowen
Our body is a vehicle for the essence of ourselves, but I doubt human beings have cognisant self knowledge, not do I think that humans actually differ, it depends not on colour intelligence or creed. We all decide how much, or how little self deception we are prepared to use. Only we can decide how we are use this vessel. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
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Our body is a vehicle for the essence of ourselves, but I doubt human beings have cognisant self knowledge, not do I think that humans actually differ, it depends not on colour intelligence or creed. We all decide how much, or how little self deception we are prepared to use. Only we can decide how we are use this vessel. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
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Many thanks for your thoughts....John
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Well done
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem reminds us that we need truth and honesty to begin taking control and return the world to whet it should be. I Lyme the mix of abad rhymes and mono-rhyme.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Dragonpoet
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This poem reminds us that we need truth and honesty to begin taking control and return the world to whet it should be. I Lyme the mix of abad rhymes and mono-rhyme.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Dragonpoet
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Many thanks for your thoughts....John
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Don't mention it, John.
Joan
Comment from T.E. Loper
At first, I thought this was only going to be about the current political state of affairs, but your third stanza takes care of that notion very nicely. The last stanza is also very strong because the final line is "set free" of the rhyme. I found that very clever since in most cases, strength is found within a rhyme, not without it.
I also like the way you subtly develop the conceit of our lives as movies, starting in stanza 5 with "picture", and continuing in ever more explicit terms ("scenes", "records", "moving pictures", "director", "edit") through stanza 10: "who will attend the world premiere." There's a great deal to consider here, and you've got to love any poem that leaves you thinking!
This may just be me, but as I read, I was distracted by two things. First, the paucity of punctuation -- there are only 2 commas. In this case, it's probably just being nit-picky, because very few lines flow into the next. Anyway for consistency, I'd remove the two commas. The second distraction was the lack of a consistent meter. For me, the quatrain structure begs for a clear, consistent meter, which would add strength to your topic. It seems to want to be iambic tetrameter, but it's too inconsistent to be clear.
That being said, this is an excellent write. As you say, "it makes a path we can ascend."
Oh, I see you've made an edit of the last line while I was responding! I really do like your original idea far better. (See above.) Something's not right about "overflow". "Truth sets us free." Nuff said!
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At first, I thought this was only going to be about the current political state of affairs, but your third stanza takes care of that notion very nicely. The last stanza is also very strong because the final line is "set free" of the rhyme. I found that very clever since in most cases, strength is found within a rhyme, not without it.
I also like the way you subtly develop the conceit of our lives as movies, starting in stanza 5 with "picture", and continuing in ever more explicit terms ("scenes", "records", "moving pictures", "director", "edit") through stanza 10: "who will attend the world premiere." There's a great deal to consider here, and you've got to love any poem that leaves you thinking!
This may just be me, but as I read, I was distracted by two things. First, the paucity of punctuation -- there are only 2 commas. In this case, it's probably just being nit-picky, because very few lines flow into the next. Anyway for consistency, I'd remove the two commas. The second distraction was the lack of a consistent meter. For me, the quatrain structure begs for a clear, consistent meter, which would add strength to your topic. It seems to want to be iambic tetrameter, but it's too inconsistent to be clear.
That being said, this is an excellent write. As you say, "it makes a path we can ascend."
Oh, I see you've made an edit of the last line while I was responding! I really do like your original idea far better. (See above.) Something's not right about "overflow". "Truth sets us free." Nuff said!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
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Many thanks for your thoughts....John
Comment from Lance S. Loria
I found your work to be a commentary on our society today. The hypocrisy and the false narratives by politicians and the main media. The lack of depth of understanding by the masses. Your call for individuals to do more to take a stand to know the truth and live our lives for that truth. Particularly since life is temporary, but our culture, society and country should extend for generations. There is much to do in America today and much for individuals to do to protect our way of life for all of us, our children and grandchildren.
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I found your work to be a commentary on our society today. The hypocrisy and the false narratives by politicians and the main media. The lack of depth of understanding by the masses. Your call for individuals to do more to take a stand to know the truth and live our lives for that truth. Particularly since life is temporary, but our culture, society and country should extend for generations. There is much to do in America today and much for individuals to do to protect our way of life for all of us, our children and grandchildren.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
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Many thanks for your thoughts....John
Comment from Taurus the Elder
Very good. I really liked your line "We're only forms of energy " and your comment about Spirit. Technically sound, solid rhyme scheme, strong ending, supported by good art work. Great job, wishing you continued success.
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Very good. I really liked your line "We're only forms of energy " and your comment about Spirit. Technically sound, solid rhyme scheme, strong ending, supported by good art work. Great job, wishing you continued success.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
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Many thanks for your thoughts....John
Comment from kmoss
Brilliant. Such strong rhymes with depth and meaning. This flows easily. My favorite parts:
If we believe absurdities
We fail to use our Common Sense
We then commit atrocities
It's time to drop all the pretense
And
The question is who will attend
The world premiere of Honesty
It makes a path we can ascend
Ignoring it is travesty
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Brilliant. Such strong rhymes with depth and meaning. This flows easily. My favorite parts:
If we believe absurdities
We fail to use our Common Sense
We then commit atrocities
It's time to drop all the pretense
And
The question is who will attend
The world premiere of Honesty
It makes a path we can ascend
Ignoring it is travesty
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
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Many thanks for your thoughts....John
Comment from Gert sherwood
Truth is Best you are so right Cogitator. I like how you brought out why its best to tell the truth. Great rhyming through your poem. I will end with what I like how you
brought our attention about telling the truth---
Once we accept we're here to grow
Our minds blossom by letting go
Eventually we come to know
Truth sets us free to overflow
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Truth is Best you are so right Cogitator. I like how you brought out why its best to tell the truth. Great rhyming through your poem. I will end with what I like how you
brought our attention about telling the truth---
Once we accept we're here to grow
Our minds blossom by letting go
Eventually we come to know
Truth sets us free to overflow
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Many thanks for your review...John
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John you are welcome.
Gert