The Overcomer
My losses and gains.33 total reviews
Comment from Louise Michelle
Oh, Sally, I'm trying to collect my thoughts as I attempt to send you these comments. First of all, I feel so bad for you. This is not pity, this is compassion.
What a strong woman you are! I give you so much credit for dealing with this problem in such a productive and dignified way. How on earth do you do it?! I would think that all this writing would be a strain on your eyes.
By way of critique, I just want to point out that you're calling this biographical fiction. I think you meant to say non-fiction.
I don't know what else to say. I'm just sitting here, thinking of my small problems and admiring your courage immensely. Sending you an extra special cyber hug. Sincerely, Lou
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Oh, Sally, I'm trying to collect my thoughts as I attempt to send you these comments. First of all, I feel so bad for you. This is not pity, this is compassion.
What a strong woman you are! I give you so much credit for dealing with this problem in such a productive and dignified way. How on earth do you do it?! I would think that all this writing would be a strain on your eyes.
By way of critique, I just want to point out that you're calling this biographical fiction. I think you meant to say non-fiction.
I don't know what else to say. I'm just sitting here, thinking of my small problems and admiring your courage immensely. Sending you an extra special cyber hug. Sincerely, Lou
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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A special hug! How wonderful! I can't tell you how sweet this is, dear Lou. I cried when I read this. Thank you so much. I feel so loved on. Everyone has been so incredibly kind in a life affirming way. I'm really a blessed woman despite my difficulties. As I said, we all have them. It's important that we don't let those things define us or keep us from our potential. I am honored to be here on FanStory among such wonderful folks. :)
Love,
Sal xoxoxoxo!!!
Comment from Jacob David Collins
This must have been quite a tough topic to write about. You held my interest with your writing and I felt horrified and sad when you were told the news about your eyes. I thought this was a very well written piece. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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This must have been quite a tough topic to write about. You held my interest with your writing and I felt horrified and sad when you were told the news about your eyes. I thought this was a very well written piece. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Good morning, Jacob! Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind comments. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work. I hope you'll stay with me. :)
Sending my best today as always,
Sally Law xo
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Yes, you most certainly are, Lady Sal!! ;) And beautiful to boot -- what an awesome combination and Jackson got himself a prize!! :) A wonderful offering for the contest, my lady -- well-written and engaging! :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Yes, you most certainly are, Lady Sal!! ;) And beautiful to boot -- what an awesome combination and Jackson got himself a prize!! :) A wonderful offering for the contest, my lady -- well-written and engaging! :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much my sweet lady! I'll let Jackson know. Actually I think he already does! If not, we still have some time left. ;)
Your friendship and support mean the world to me.
Thank you for all you do and all you are!!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxo!!!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Sally, your story is heartfelt. It is difficult to hear such sad news, but at the same time, you have a very uplifting attitude. Bravo! Your title "The Overcomer' and the video attached to your poem, say it all. God Bless you! You will always be in my prayers, daily.
You have penned your story, step by step, very well.
Ralf
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Sally, your story is heartfelt. It is difficult to hear such sad news, but at the same time, you have a very uplifting attitude. Bravo! Your title "The Overcomer' and the video attached to your poem, say it all. God Bless you! You will always be in my prayers, daily.
You have penned your story, step by step, very well.
Ralf
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much, dear Raffaelina. I'm so glad you found my story uplifting. If I encourage or uplift anyone with this, then I've already won. :)
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
Comment from Mastery
Hi Sal. Reding this makes me feel very bad for you but darned glad for me that Thank God I do not have a condition like yours. I am sorry. there. I said it and will not keep repeating it as I am sure that hurts.
I loved this little line from your story though: "You know it's bad when the doctor cries with you as he's delivering the diagnosis."
So sorry I have already blown all of my sixes, Sal. This story is worthy indeed as far as I am concerned.
You start right off with an excellent opening "hook" and it gets better from there, my friend.
Suggestions: "because mostly boys surrounded me." (I suggest you discard the adverb like this
"For the most part I was surrounded by boys."
Aand never ever use the term "I would" (like here for instance "At the closing of the day, I would ask to stand close. . .") Instead say:
"At the close of day, I asked if I could stand close to the blackboard and copy the things I couldn't see during class."
Also: My Word program shows eye doctor spelled like this "opthamologist" which is different than your spelling? Not sure on this one Sal. LOL
And grammar here: " fumbling for my sunglasses in my oversized purse." Note.. change to "fumbling in my oversized purse for sunglasses."
Excellent story and so much fortitude involved all the way.
God bless you Sal. I will try to follow your new novella. : ) Bob
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Hi Sal. Reding this makes me feel very bad for you but darned glad for me that Thank God I do not have a condition like yours. I am sorry. there. I said it and will not keep repeating it as I am sure that hurts.
I loved this little line from your story though: "You know it's bad when the doctor cries with you as he's delivering the diagnosis."
So sorry I have already blown all of my sixes, Sal. This story is worthy indeed as far as I am concerned.
You start right off with an excellent opening "hook" and it gets better from there, my friend.
Suggestions: "because mostly boys surrounded me." (I suggest you discard the adverb like this
"For the most part I was surrounded by boys."
Aand never ever use the term "I would" (like here for instance "At the closing of the day, I would ask to stand close. . .") Instead say:
"At the close of day, I asked if I could stand close to the blackboard and copy the things I couldn't see during class."
Also: My Word program shows eye doctor spelled like this "opthamologist" which is different than your spelling? Not sure on this one Sal. LOL
And grammar here: " fumbling for my sunglasses in my oversized purse." Note.. change to "fumbling in my oversized purse for sunglasses."
Excellent story and so much fortitude involved all the way.
God bless you Sal. I will try to follow your new novella. : ) Bob
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much, Bob dear. I have made most all of the needed improvements. Ophthalmologist is spelled correctly. Walkerman nailed me on that that one. I had it spelled the same way you suggested. LOL! I'm not sure why it wasn't flagged on spell check. Thanks so much for the stars and kind help. I appreciate it so much!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xo
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No big deal Sal. he is an eye doctor that's all. LOL Bob
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Phonically, it sounded good to me. Sal ;)
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Sal. You have a remarkable story in many ways. Relying on faith is an anchor in your life and many people could learn that from you. It takes courage to open a book about self. I wish you the best as always and good luck in the contest.
I agree that you are an overcomer. God Bless You.
Pal Z :~)))
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Hello Sal. You have a remarkable story in many ways. Relying on faith is an anchor in your life and many people could learn that from you. It takes courage to open a book about self. I wish you the best as always and good luck in the contest.
I agree that you are an overcomer. God Bless You.
Pal Z :~)))
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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God does bless me so much. He brought me so many like you on FanStory and my wonderful family. I have many good things to keep me encouraged amd moving forward. Most of all, I have the Lord and the gift of writing which really is an amazing thing.
Sending you my best today as always and many thanks,
Sal xo
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You're welcome.
PAL Z :~)))
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OH my lady, i now know what you have and i am so glad you shared it with us. I am so proud to know you and what you have overcome in your own way and time. This is excellently written and powerful
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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OH my lady, i now know what you have and i am so glad you shared it with us. I am so proud to know you and what you have overcome in your own way and time. This is excellently written and powerful
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Thank you, dear Barb. You are quite the overcomer yourself, my friend. I have read poem after inspiring poem of your brave response to your many devastations. Your life and writing inspires me. Thanks so much for the encouraging review and generous stars. It means so much.
Sending you my best today as always and blessings in Christ,
Sally xoxoxo
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice family photo,
and a well written story, Sally.
-I wondered what it was that
happened to your sight and you
tell the story very well.
-The beginning is telling when
teachers arbitrarily put students
in the back because of height.
-I think has moved forward, there
are more efforts from parents to
communicate difficulties to counselors
and/or teachers.
-What a shame that your condition went
undetected for so long; that had to have
been hard to accept.
-The details you write about some of
the things that happened, especially
while driving, had to have been really difficult.
-I agree with you about most people having
something to overcome; maybe there are some
luck ones who don't.
-I love the last line, too.
-Thanks for sharing your story;
you deserve a win in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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-Very nice family photo,
and a well written story, Sally.
-I wondered what it was that
happened to your sight and you
tell the story very well.
-The beginning is telling when
teachers arbitrarily put students
in the back because of height.
-I think has moved forward, there
are more efforts from parents to
communicate difficulties to counselors
and/or teachers.
-What a shame that your condition went
undetected for so long; that had to have
been hard to accept.
-The details you write about some of
the things that happened, especially
while driving, had to have been really difficult.
-I agree with you about most people having
something to overcome; maybe there are some
luck ones who don't.
-I love the last line, too.
-Thanks for sharing your story;
you deserve a win in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Ah, thank you, Pam. Some of my teachers were more understanding than others. Yes, they used to sit a little petite girls up front, and the tall boys with Sally in the back. In my grade school class photos, I am always standing in the back row with the boys. It's really quite hilarious. I'm glad you enjoyed my true story and found it inspiring. I appreciate your kind review very much.
Sending my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
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You are very welcome, Sally, and I appreciate your reply. I am glad you had some understanding teachers.
Comment from Margaret Bednar
All those years, the ophthalmologists missed it when you went in for your yearly eye check. I'm assuming you went yearly? It sounds like you have bravely taken this disease on - which does not mean you haven't been afraid. With your writing ability and your creativity, I think you can seriously write some books that will make a difference. I'm ordering your paperback on Amazon :)
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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All those years, the ophthalmologists missed it when you went in for your yearly eye check. I'm assuming you went yearly? It sounds like you have bravely taken this disease on - which does not mean you haven't been afraid. With your writing ability and your creativity, I think you can seriously write some books that will make a difference. I'm ordering your paperback on Amazon :)
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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My first official eye exam was the one described here. I was eighteen. I never complained to my single mother because she had a very difficult life. I just kept going, trying to muddle through by myself. She had a sister blinded from the same disease at fifteen. She was institutionalized for awhile then my grandmother brought her home to live until she died in her mid-thirties. It's genetically predisposed, both dominant and recessive, (mine is recessive) and passes from father to daughter or mother to son. It also can skip a generation. My dad passed away long ago, and my mom in 2002. I have one older brother and my only sister still living. None of them have it. My six boys (three sons and three grandsons) have had extensive eye exams. Nothing has surfaced, thankfully. My husband and I are involved with Foundation Fighting Blindness here in Orlando.
Thank you for your wonderful review and generous kindness.I am honored you stopped by. I hope you enjoy my novella. :)
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
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I'm looking forward to seeing it in the mail. Your sister was institutionalized? For being blind? I understand a special school, perhaps. Or maybe I am misunderstanding the word "institutionalized".
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No, my mother's younger sister was institutionalized in the late 40s. My sister is younger than me at 61. I'll be 65 soon. Sigh....
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I'm not far behind. The 40's - not the grand age of institutions...
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My aunt wasn't handled well from what I understand. She was brought home eventually and schooled. She learned Braille and had a guide dog. I met her only once. She was very shy and introverted. My mother was just the opposite. :)
Comment from damommy
I'm so sorry this happened to you, but what a warrior you are. I have a lot of blindness in my family, and I have macular degeneration in both eyes, with one retina that tries to detach itself. So far, so good. You've overcome so much and keep going. Good for you!
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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I'm so sorry this happened to you, but what a warrior you are. I have a lot of blindness in my family, and I have macular degeneration in both eyes, with one retina that tries to detach itself. So far, so good. You've overcome so much and keep going. Good for you!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Everyone with my problems has just been put on my prayer list. That includes you, Miss Yvonne. I am sorry to hear about your retina problems as well my sweet. Know that today I prayed for you and for your detachment issues. Know that it is the Lord who called you and he is the healer of these things. My 95-year-old neighbor has the same issues and he has regular injections to help it keep it at bay. I hope that you have a good eye specialist at your side. Sending my best today as always, Sally xoxoxo!!!
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Thank you, Sally. You are a dear!