The French Letter
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Not at all good. They Charles and Helen are being innocently accused of being terrorists simply because their taxi driver is one. Now I'm wonder if it was a coincidence he was their taxi driver. I doubt it.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Not at all good. They Charles and Helen are being innocently accused of being terrorists simply because their taxi driver is one. Now I'm wonder if it was a coincidence he was their taxi driver. I doubt it.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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I think you might be right there! It would have been a strange coincidence. I wonder what?s at the bottom of it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter, from tourist to terrorist status in a shorttime. In a foreign country it is quite easy to get it trouble unkowingly. The best option has to stay out of sight for a while.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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A very well-written chapter, from tourist to terrorist status in a shorttime. In a foreign country it is quite easy to get it trouble unkowingly. The best option has to stay out of sight for a while.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Sandra. Yes - they might be wise to go to ground.
Comment from Mastery
Hi Tony. Another big change in events I see. You have no concerns about keeping the story full of action my friend. LOL I had the feeling that Charles never finished his shower?
"I'd scarcely begun to wash the city grime from my body when she called out, "Charles! Come quickly. They are showing details of the bombing on the news."
Did he?
Good job again, my friend. : ) Bob
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Hi Tony. Another big change in events I see. You have no concerns about keeping the story full of action my friend. LOL I had the feeling that Charles never finished his shower?
"I'd scarcely begun to wash the city grime from my body when she called out, "Charles! Come quickly. They are showing details of the bombing on the news."
Did he?
Good job again, my friend. : ) Bob
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Thanks for the review, Bob.
I guess Charles would still have been wet when he hurried back into the bedroom with a towel round his torso. Maybe I should make him drip a bit. LOL
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He hadn't even finished soaping down had he? LOL
Comment from Ulla
My goodness, Tony, things are really happening here and the good Charles is in the thick of it all. Now, how is this all tied in with the letter, I can't even guess. I'm sure it will all become clear, though. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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My goodness, Tony, things are really happening here and the good Charles is in the thick of it all. Now, how is this all tied in with the letter, I can't even guess. I'm sure it will all become clear, though. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Ulla. The letter is still there in the back of my mind!
Comment from Sugarray77
I liked the energy and tension you evoke as you write these pivot points in your story. You have changed the entire dynamics by making Charles and Helen the hunted ones now. I am looking forward to seeing where you take them from here. Well done, Tony.
Melissa
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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I liked the energy and tension you evoke as you write these pivot points in your story. You have changed the entire dynamics by making Charles and Helen the hunted ones now. I am looking forward to seeing where you take them from here. Well done, Tony.
Melissa
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Melissa. I appreciate your comments about the energy and tension. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from damommy
Rasheed wasn't protecting them. He was protecting himself. If he hadn't raced off like that, they wouldn't be after Charles and Helen, I think. Good chapter with lots of tension.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Rasheed wasn't protecting them. He was protecting himself. If he hadn't raced off like that, they wouldn't be after Charles and Helen, I think. Good chapter with lots of tension.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your review, Yvonne. Thanks for your remark about the tension. Things are beginning to hot up for these two now, as we approach the climax.
Comment from estory
This is building momentum. I think you did a good job writing Charles and Helen into this terrorist plot, and casting Rasheed as a mysterious possible double faced friend/enemy. This is getting more interesting, as the plot thickens. I liked the tense scene with Rasheed in the taxi, but maybe you could have woven in a little more of the secret police chasing them to keep up the action. The hotel scene was really good. The power outage created some more tension, some more uncertainty, and the dialogue with Helen was tense and this new development sets the story up for some more great tension and action to come. estory
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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This is building momentum. I think you did a good job writing Charles and Helen into this terrorist plot, and casting Rasheed as a mysterious possible double faced friend/enemy. This is getting more interesting, as the plot thickens. I liked the tense scene with Rasheed in the taxi, but maybe you could have woven in a little more of the secret police chasing them to keep up the action. The hotel scene was really good. The power outage created some more tension, some more uncertainty, and the dialogue with Helen was tense and this new development sets the story up for some more great tension and action to come. estory
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your review, estory, and for the sixth star. I'll have a look at that suggestion about making more of the car chase. I appreciate your remarks about the tension. Things are beginning to hot up for these two now, as we approach the climax.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! You had me on the edge of my seat here. It's like watching an action movie and we never know whom we can trust. I was beginning to like Rasheed and now well, he seems to be a big source of trouble!
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Wow! You had me on the edge of my seat here. It's like watching an action movie and we never know whom we can trust. I was beginning to like Rasheed and now well, he seems to be a big source of trouble!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your review, Helen, and for the sixth star. Much appreciated! Things are beginning to hot up for these two now, as we approach the climax. It looks as if Rasheed may turn out to be more than the minor character that I first envisaged.
Comment from Gail Denham
Excellent chapter - enjoyed it - lots of action, good dialog, and believable happenings. I sure don't understand the factions that are fighting, but you explain it very well, slipping in foreign words and descriptions.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Excellent chapter - enjoyed it - lots of action, good dialog, and believable happenings. I sure don't understand the factions that are fighting, but you explain it very well, slipping in foreign words and descriptions.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your review, Gail. I appreciate your remarks about the action and the dialogue. Things are beginning to hot up for these two now, as we approach the climax.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, it does seem as though Rasheed planted the bombs and Helen and Charles were just in the wrong place at the time, Tony. You did a great job with this chapter. There is much action that is intense and leaves readers wondering many things about all three in the taxi. I still have many suspicions about Rasheed and Helen. I believe Rasheed uses the taxi thing as a cover. How easy it would be to plant a bomb--no one would suspect, then drive away with 2 unsuspecting foreigners who he could blame for the bomb. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Well, it does seem as though Rasheed planted the bombs and Helen and Charles were just in the wrong place at the time, Tony. You did a great job with this chapter. There is much action that is intense and leaves readers wondering many things about all three in the taxi. I still have many suspicions about Rasheed and Helen. I believe Rasheed uses the taxi thing as a cover. How easy it would be to plant a bomb--no one would suspect, then drive away with 2 unsuspecting foreigners who he could blame for the bomb. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your review, Jan. I appreciate your encouragement. Things are beginning to hot up for these two now, as we approach the climax. Rasheed has taken on a larger role than at first envisaged.