Feeling Bucked Off?
Wishing you the best in 15 syllables.23 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! You're so funny! I can guess what the "bucked off" might be in another context. And yes, life's ride is painful at times. I liked your final line of the "horse be with you!" I think that horse, I'd rather not have with me.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Lol! You're so funny! I can guess what the "bucked off" might be in another context. And yes, life's ride is painful at times. I liked your final line of the "horse be with you!" I think that horse, I'd rather not have with me.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Life is a hard horse to keep on the course without getting bucked off a few times. Changing horses might be a good idea sometimes.
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but not "in mid stream?"
That's a line from the movie, "My Fellow Americans." It's pretty funny if you get a chance to see it.
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Definitely not 'in mid stream'. That sounds like the horse is peeing!
Thanks for the movie recommendation.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of all your syllables in this thought-provoking comment on life when it throws you off your course.
Creative use of "horse" as a metaphor!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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You have made excellent use of all your syllables in this thought-provoking comment on life when it throws you off your course.
Creative use of "horse" as a metaphor!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thanks Janice. And well done on your job humour win!
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THANKS! :-)
Comment from Joan E.
What a clever title and animated, parallel picture! I admired your "painful ride" metaphor and your creative wordplay with "horse" replacing "force". Big cheers and best wishes in the 15-Syllable Poem contest- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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What a clever title and animated, parallel picture! I admired your "painful ride" metaphor and your creative wordplay with "horse" replacing "force". Big cheers and best wishes in the 15-Syllable Poem contest- Joan
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I laughed out loud when I saw the photo and read the poem. The photo fits the poem perfectly. I love your use of like-sounding words to get the point across. The last line is the kicker. "May the horse be with you!" is a wonderful play on a phrase from the past. This lighthearted piece expresses in jest, how many of us feel, at the present time. Better to laugh at it than to cry, right? This is a wonderful use of 15 syllables. Thank you for the morning chuckle.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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I laughed out loud when I saw the photo and read the poem. The photo fits the poem perfectly. I love your use of like-sounding words to get the point across. The last line is the kicker. "May the horse be with you!" is a wonderful play on a phrase from the past. This lighthearted piece expresses in jest, how many of us feel, at the present time. Better to laugh at it than to cry, right? This is a wonderful use of 15 syllables. Thank you for the morning chuckle.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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I am happy to have provided that chuckle!
Comment from juliaSjames
This one made me giggle. You sustain the metaphor with brilliant skill. Even without the great artwork the poem captures the imagination with effortless ease.
Love the subtle suggested wordplay in "horse", and earlier in "bucked off". The latter was more of a stretch because it's followed by "with" but the reader gets the message.
May the force continue to be with you!
Blessings Julia
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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This one made me giggle. You sustain the metaphor with brilliant skill. Even without the great artwork the poem captures the imagination with effortless ease.
Love the subtle suggested wordplay in "horse", and earlier in "bucked off". The latter was more of a stretch because it's followed by "with" but the reader gets the message.
May the force continue to be with you!
Blessings Julia
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thanks for reviewing, Julia. The last line had to have 'with' so it could reference the Star Wars catch phrase.
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Oh yes. I was referring to the first with.
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Initially I thought of using 'on', but then we say 'effed off with something' so I figured 'with' had to be used.
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Yes, I figured. I was thinking "pissed off", same difference!
Comment from Gail Denham
This is great - the photo is tremendous with your poem. But the poem made me laugh. Very creative. Several meaning couched in those few words. Good entry for that contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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This is great - the photo is tremendous with your poem. But the poem made me laugh. Very creative. Several meaning couched in those few words. Good entry for that contest.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Glad I could add a laugh to your day. Thanks for the display of stars!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Horse humor and Star Wars humor? I am in heaven! And that is a good place to be on a Sunday. Good choice of photo/illustration. I could not find anything to fix in this short short. Very nice 15 syllable poem entry.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Horse humor and Star Wars humor? I am in heaven! And that is a good place to be on a Sunday. Good choice of photo/illustration. I could not find anything to fix in this short short. Very nice 15 syllable poem entry.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thanks for getting both aspects tucked in here. Giddyup! I feel praised and lavished with stars/
Comment from Gunner Lil
Excellent poem.
So few words-but- makes
the reader search their mind
for when they were last bucked!
Love the word play and picture.
Easy read.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Excellent poem.
So few words-but- makes
the reader search their mind
for when they were last bucked!
Love the word play and picture.
Easy read.
Thank you.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
LOL! You do love your word play and rightfully so since you do it so well. This meets the contest requirements splendidly with a 15 syllable verse. The content is witty making for a delightful read. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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LOL! You do love your word play and rightfully so since you do it so well. This meets the contest requirements splendidly with a 15 syllable verse. The content is witty making for a delightful read. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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I'm glad this entertained you! The bucking horse, Life, can run away with us at times.
Comment from RodG
This short poem is both amusing and witty. Great pairing of photo and poem. Rodeo riders will appreciate the allusion in lines 1-2 and Star Wars enthusiasts will adore line three. Great way to start my day with a chuckle. Rod
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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This short poem is both amusing and witty. Great pairing of photo and poem. Rodeo riders will appreciate the allusion in lines 1-2 and Star Wars enthusiasts will adore line three. Great way to start my day with a chuckle. Rod
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thanks Rod. I found some action-packed photos featuring bucking broncos at rodeos, but as I flinch at the notion of horses getting 'tortured' like that i was pleased to find an eventing horse ride and the eviction of the rider under less stressful circumstances. Although the old nag, Life, can certainly turn into a bucking bronc sometimes for sure.
