Comment from Mistydawn

Exceptional

It seems like the ladies are surviving one trouble only to run into another poor things. I really feel sorry for Veronica wanting to help but can't figure out how, that must be a horrible feeling. Your story is well-written, very interesting your plot, characters, dialogue and action seems real. Great job as always.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019

Thank you so very much, Misty, for all those stars and fabulous review. Veronica is very stubborn, she won't give up. :)) I'm so pleased you thought the dialogue and actions seemed real, that's a lovely compliment. Bug hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Lady Jane

Exceptional

Another well penned installment, Miss Sandra. I've missed a few, but it's easy to follow as the smooth writing allows for one to pick up and reunite with the characters and their surroundings easily. Wow, they are in a pickle aren't they, but a bit further from the heat at least?

Clean, succinct writing with steady pace and excellent imagery. The dialogue was crisp and clean, very relatable and realistic. Nice plot formation and well, like I said, though I'd been away a while, I fell right back into the story...

This is a solid six in my book. Keep writing, dear.
Janelle

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019

You've had so much worry and heartache over the last few weeks, Janelle, and I know it's still ongoing. We're all here for you, my friend.

Having said that, I'm just pleased you were able to come and read another part, it was lovely to see your name in my reviews. Thank you so very much, my friend, for that, the wonderful review and all those lovely stars. Sending a humongous hug. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Hi Sandra,

You always amaze me with how you can write this story and keep readers on the edge of their seat. You are a talented writer. This is a fantastic story.

You did something to me in this chapter to make Lottie pop into my mind. I now have a new script to write about Lottie's Kitchen. Thanks!

- "I (relly) appreciate your input" - this is in your author notes.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019

LOL, I never think to check my author's notes for spellings! That'll teach me, lol. Thank you so much, Joy. I'm glad you enjoyed this part. And I'm glad I've inspired you to write another Lottie script. I'll look out for it. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from susand3022

Excellent

This is good Sandra... They've got to get out of Dodge... and fast! But why aren't the people following them down the tunnel, or at least a few of the more able-bodied ones, to help find a way out?

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019

The patients are, they are waiting to get through the locked metal door. Veronica being able to walk through walls and doors is trying to find a way to get the door unlocked before they all die from the smoke. There is only that way out. To go back, is to walk into certain death. The next part is being written, and should be ready in a few days. Then we'll all know their fate. Thank you so much for getting so involved, that is the best form of encouragement! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Exceptional

You are doing a great job writing the descriptions and the emotions. I feel like I'm right there with them as I read. I really do like this story. Wonderful job.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019

Thank you so much for the lovely six stars, my friend. And now I know how poorly you've been, I appreciate that you were able to read and review this part, too. That was so kind of you, my friend. Big hugs, Sandra xxxx

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Exceptional

Hi Sandra - another good chapter, full of tension. Very well written. One little point -
' horrifying images floating around my head' - perhaps 'IN or INSIDE' her head otherwise those horrifying images would be another problem to deal with LOL. This is one hell of an action packed book you are writing. Another good way you've ended the chapter - keep the reader wondering WHAT NEXT?? Love Dorothy xxx
ps - '' For crying out loud! What else can go wrong?'' Did you have me in mind when you wrote those words early in the chapter - LOL! Will give you a ring and tell you. x

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019

LOL!!! Yes, do let me know what's happening now. I think I'll write a novel called: Dorothy's Daunting Dilemma! There would be loads of sequels! Thank you so much for another 6 stars my friend, and for that helpful input. Going in right now to correct that. Big hugs, my friend.:)) Sandra xx

Comment from Mustang Patty

Exceptional

Hi, Sandra,

This was great! Your descriptive words and animated speech made me so much more aware of just how dire the situation is. I do wonder how the spirit Veronica and the corporal Mildred will be able to save all these people, but I have to believe they will.

Great writing -thanks for showing me how it's done!

~patty~

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019

Thank you so very much, Patty, for another lovely review and all those stars. That is so nice of you. Well, Veronica has her thinking cap on, I'll let her know you're worried!! Thanks for the lovely compliment, dear, but your writing is superb. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from l.raven

Exceptional

Hi Sandra, she thinks she's running out of time...I have her beat...they found a blood clot in my arm today...talk about pain...and the fun just keeps coming....LOL...I know there's a reason for all of this...headscratch...I just don't know what it is...LOL...

now listen up....these two chicks have got to get it together...and the powers that be...what are they thinking ???...and I guess if they can't find a way out...they can always start sewing...and go out in class...always a positive side to everything...Ok you...lets see where this takes us...ya know I love your stories...very well written chapter my wonderful sweet friend...love you soooooo much...Linda xxoo goodnight...

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019

Linda! When did you discover that? Can they get rid of it? You try to come over so cheerful, but I know you now, my friend. If you ever want to chat more, email me.

Thank you so much for the Golden Globe award, and wonderful, funny review. I love it that they can always start sewing! LOL. Working on the next part now. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by l.raven on 04-Feb-2019

Hi Sandra, I found it yesterday at church...I went to put my arm on the table an almost flew off the sit...I touched where it hurt...LOL....and there she be...I have a doctor appt in a hour...I know Sandra it will be ok....I prayed it wouldn?t be surgery...or I was a goner...LOL...I just want the test from the hospital....boy....when it rains it pours....Everything will be fine...I tell my friends and family that....my daughter tells me now...I know you are fine...LOL.....I have a strong belief in Jesus...and count on Him to get me through....look I was in church when He showed me how bad this thing is....of course He could have done it in a more painless matter...LOL...well don?t want to be late....later beautiful girl...so much love....xxoo

Comment from WryWriter

Excellent

Another excitingly delicious chapter! I really liked this one. On the edge of my seat the whole time. Keep up the good work!

Suggestions:

But(,) what if there isn't another way out?

"No! We can't give up. There's got to be a way,(;) we've just got to find it."

the powers-that-be wouldn't take her out of here if (omit the) worst came to (omit the) worst, as they had when she'd been incarcerated in Holloway Prison,(.) (omit but, I know) (T)they wouldn't have sent us here to fail. "Come on, Mildred,(;) there must be a door or something that we've missed.(!)"

It might have been the sound of determination in my voice,(;) but(,) whatever the reason, Mildred became as animated as me.

"What? What've you found.(?)"

"I can see why the porter missed it,(.) (I)it's not easy to see in this dim candlelight. Bring your candle closer (omit ,) so we can see what we have here," I told her, grinning excitedly. It was indeed a door, but where did it go? It came as no surprise to find it locked,(.) (omit and) Mildred began pummeling on it with her fists in the hope someone on the other side would hear her.

"Then I'll damn well have to find someone!" I barked (omit frustratedly) before running through the door.

But what if another bomb landed on whatever was at the other end of this passageway,(?) (omit as well?)

I didn't have the luxury of time to sit around and ponder all the possibilities,(.) (omit so,) (F)feeling the wall as I went, I ran along until I could see light filtering under the doorway up ahead. I prayed (omit that) it was good news(;) (omit because,) with a bit of luck, (omit it meant) whatever I found on the other side would not have been bombed.

When I passed through the door, the sudden glare blinded me(.) (omit for a moment and) (I)it took a few seconds to get my bearings. Once I could focus, I could see I was standing in a basement of some sort,(.) (I)it was a fraction of the size of the (omit one) (basement) at the hospital.

There were several racks of fabric, (and) large work tables spread across the room,(.) (omit and) (F)oot-pedal sewing machines (were) positioned along one wall.

It appeared to be a tailors (omit or dressmakers) (room),(;) but with no one around, I couldn't be sure. Did you really expect to find someone here? For goodness sake, (omit I expect) they all ran for cover in the underground when the bombing started. I groaned. "Now what (omit do I do) ? How can I ask someone to unlock the door if there is no one (around) to ask?"

I couldn't help (omit it) (myself), (;) (omit but) I (omit suddenly) let out a sarcastic snort.

Now it really hit home why the powers-that-be had Mildred in physical form, whilst I was invisible. As a team, we were invincible,(.) (omit but) (A)alone, I could do nothing (omit to help except check out things when I returned to my own time and) (but) offer moral support (omit when I came back again).

Dear God, what am I going to do? (omit I'm fast running out of time....) (Time is running out....)

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019

Thank you so much, my friend, for another helpful review. I've copied and pasted it to my manuscript and will do a thorough going over. I'm glad you are still enjoying the story. Big hugs. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from aryr

Excellent

A fantastic level of suspense, Sandra. Indeed what could Veronica do in her nonphysical state. She had discovered the door, the tunnel and the untouched shop but could not find someone to help her help them. Very much enjoyed, well done, hugs and smiles.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019

Thank you so much, Alie, for another of your lovely reviews. Veronica is getting desperate now. lol. We'll see what she does next. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

reply by aryr on 04-Feb-2019

You are so welcome, friend, hugs and smiles.