Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Slack-Jawed Tide"A collection of free verse poems
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Comment from Dawn Munro
Yikes! I've been stung by jellyfish - twice - and lived to tell about it. I don't know what kind they were, but obviously not fatal (though at the time, I wished they were. LOL.)
I honestly don't know what to say about this incredible work of art - Mr. Fawcus, you show us how it's done. (No one can miss the shape of the text either, BTW - fantastic free verse/shape poem!)
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Yikes! I've been stung by jellyfish - twice - and lived to tell about it. I don't know what kind they were, but obviously not fatal (though at the time, I wished they were. LOL.)
I honestly don't know what to say about this incredible work of art - Mr. Fawcus, you show us how it's done. (No one can miss the shape of the text either, BTW - fantastic free verse/shape poem!)
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Dawn, and the six star award. Much appreciated! I've never been stung by one of these but have been told the pain is excruciating. Tony
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Oh, it is - absolutely horrible - the first time. But having been stung once, the second time (seriously) you would rather be dead! LOL. (I can laugh about it now, but I thank God my husband was around - yep, that really is the only relief.)
You're very welcome, Tony.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Wow Tony, this is fantastic! It is so full of imagery and I love the wording.
and murmuring,
that softly sucks the life from hidden holes - wow, very imaginative and great sound and visual imagery.
teresa
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Wow Tony, this is fantastic! It is so full of imagery and I love the wording.
and murmuring,
that softly sucks the life from hidden holes - wow, very imaginative and great sound and visual imagery.
teresa
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Teresa, and the six star award. Much appreciated! Tony
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
All appears calm on the surface, but who knows what lurks beneath. This is a bit of a dark and sinister write that makes me want to steer clear of the ocean. I hope to never encounter one of these "Physalia" creatures.
This is an exceptionally well written free verse poem, Tony. I love your creativity with your "sting" tail. Brilliant and very striking. Excellent alliterations. Terrific title. One can take this write at face value or can also view it as the monster being someone's want to commit suicide by throwing themselves in the ocean to drown.
A masterful write, most worthy of a sixth star! ~ ~ Connie
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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All appears calm on the surface, but who knows what lurks beneath. This is a bit of a dark and sinister write that makes me want to steer clear of the ocean. I hope to never encounter one of these "Physalia" creatures.
This is an exceptionally well written free verse poem, Tony. I love your creativity with your "sting" tail. Brilliant and very striking. Excellent alliterations. Terrific title. One can take this write at face value or can also view it as the monster being someone's want to commit suicide by throwing themselves in the ocean to drown.
A masterful write, most worthy of a sixth star! ~ ~ Connie
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Connie, and the six star award. Much appreciated! I enjoyed reading your various interpretations.All the best, Tony
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Tony;
another stunning poem that draws vivid images and takes the mind to another place. I was taken to the sea and the moonlit nights. Thank you so much for sharing this wonder.
~patty~
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Hi Tony;
another stunning poem that draws vivid images and takes the mind to another place. I was taken to the sea and the moonlit nights. Thank you so much for sharing this wonder.
~patty~
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for your lovely review, Patty. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from robyn corum
that softly sucks the life from hidden holes
where monsters lurk and wild imaginings
drift dead men in to shore
WOW! Tony -- this was so entrancing! These descriptions were so cool and so completely different than anything I have seen before about the ocean. I could see it and feel it's salty spray! Thanks!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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that softly sucks the life from hidden holes
where monsters lurk and wild imaginings
drift dead men in to shore
WOW! Tony -- this was so entrancing! These descriptions were so cool and so completely different than anything I have seen before about the ocean. I could see it and feel it's salty spray! Thanks!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for your lovely review, Robyn. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from closetpoetjester
An alluring poem Tony and this dragged me in, hook line and sinker to the evil and deadly tenticles below.
I appreciated the use of "viridian"...as an artist, I can SEE the colour vividly. I actually have it in my oil paint box haha
It is clearly evident however that the jaw would be far from slack if one of these babies got hold of little ol' me LOL
Glad I live near the river and not the coast LOL
Beautifully scripted mate. You are a talent at free verse as well
Cheers P
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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An alluring poem Tony and this dragged me in, hook line and sinker to the evil and deadly tenticles below.
I appreciated the use of "viridian"...as an artist, I can SEE the colour vividly. I actually have it in my oil paint box haha
It is clearly evident however that the jaw would be far from slack if one of these babies got hold of little ol' me LOL
Glad I live near the river and not the coast LOL
Beautifully scripted mate. You are a talent at free verse as well
Cheers P
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks for your very kind words, Philippa, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! There's much poetry in the naming of colours. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Tony,
What a mouthful of wonderful descriptive words.
I applaud your patience and resilience in putting this together,
especially the very clever sting in the tail.
Free verse eludes me but you have created an impressive piece.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Hi Tony,
What a mouthful of wonderful descriptive words.
I applaud your patience and resilience in putting this together,
especially the very clever sting in the tail.
Free verse eludes me but you have created an impressive piece.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for your lovely review, Shirley. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Oatmeal
tfawcus,
Thoughts are expressed and described well. Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible. Your arrangement here is very creative. Very enchanted flow of words.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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tfawcus,
Thoughts are expressed and described well. Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible. Your arrangement here is very creative. Very enchanted flow of words.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 23-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Oatmeal, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Boogienights
Wow,this is great! I may never go into the water again. Very great imagery and the way the poem was formatted... With a tail! That was very clever. It kind of looked like a sea creature,and I also liked the picture you paired with it.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Wow,this is great! I may never go into the water again. Very great imagery and the way the poem was formatted... With a tail! That was very clever. It kind of looked like a sea creature,and I also liked the picture you paired with it.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Boogienights, for dropping by to review and for your generous award of six stars. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ya see, Tony? That's why I would love to visit Australia but would never--and I do mean, NEVER--swim off their shores.
As if Great Whites sharks and giant jelly fish weren't enough, now I learn they also have Portuguese Man-O'-War swimmin' around out there as well.
Your free verse was exceptionally well written as is all of your poetry. The accompanying presentation is stunning.
In addition, you also managed to shape the poem with a stinger on the end.
Bravo, sir!
~Dean
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Ya see, Tony? That's why I would love to visit Australia but would never--and I do mean, NEVER--swim off their shores.
As if Great Whites sharks and giant jelly fish weren't enough, now I learn they also have Portuguese Man-O'-War swimmin' around out there as well.
Your free verse was exceptionally well written as is all of your poetry. The accompanying presentation is stunning.
In addition, you also managed to shape the poem with a stinger on the end.
Bravo, sir!
~Dean
Comment Written 23-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Dean, for dropping by to review and for your generous comments.Much appreciated. I'm of much the same opinion as you about swimming in the sea! Tony
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It is always my pleasure, Tony.
Best wishes,
