Faith
Self-worth coupled with God's love leads us to success61 total reviews
Comment from Pyrrho
You have lectured on English, and I assume you included lectures on poetry over your forty years. I am curious. As an expert, have you ever run across the thought that use of reverse syntax to force a rhyming word into place at the end of a line is somehow a deficient practice? In the subject poem, you do it too often for my taste
I've been writing rhymed/metered poems since I was five years old ... 77 years ago, and I concluded, once I had honed my skills a bit, that when a poet uses reverse syntax it is because either because he does not 'feel' how poorly it reads, or is too lazy to figure out how to eliminate it.
I am appending my rules of poetry which I dub my ten Commandments of Poetry. I hope you will be kind enough to read them and send me a criticism rhymer1@hotmail.com.
Fraser's Ten Commandments of Poetry:
1) Thou shalt master the crafts of rhyme and meter before writing free verse.
2) Thou shalt mold the craft of meter into the art of flow.
3) Thou shalt not use reverse syntax at no time to place at the end of a line a rhyme.
4) Thou shalt not insert boring, non-contributing words like 'did' and 'do' to correct deficient meter.
5) Thou shalt not use the crutch of assonance.
6) Thou shalt never rhyme love with above or dove or strife with life.
7) Thou shalt write four culturally significant poems for every poem you write about love, children, pets, parents, grandparents, sunsets, he/she done me wrong, depression, how much you love to write, how your muse abandoned you, your deity, or how words can't describe....
8) When writing western versions of the classic Japanese poetic forms, Tanka, Haiku, Senryu, thou shalt refer to them as Tofu-Tanka, Tofu-Haiku and Tofu Senryu, and thou shalt not count syllables.
9) When writing Ricktameters, Lanturnes, Acrostics or any of the endless other poetic forms, thou shalt include at least two of the following: wit, humor, rhyme, meter, alliteration, metaphor, simile, enjambment, visuals, smelluals, feeluals, et cetera.
10) Thou shalt place two signs above thy writing area: Excellent Poetry Paints a Thousand Pictures, and Think Laconic.
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You have lectured on English, and I assume you included lectures on poetry over your forty years. I am curious. As an expert, have you ever run across the thought that use of reverse syntax to force a rhyming word into place at the end of a line is somehow a deficient practice? In the subject poem, you do it too often for my taste
I've been writing rhymed/metered poems since I was five years old ... 77 years ago, and I concluded, once I had honed my skills a bit, that when a poet uses reverse syntax it is because either because he does not 'feel' how poorly it reads, or is too lazy to figure out how to eliminate it.
I am appending my rules of poetry which I dub my ten Commandments of Poetry. I hope you will be kind enough to read them and send me a criticism rhymer1@hotmail.com.
Fraser's Ten Commandments of Poetry:
1) Thou shalt master the crafts of rhyme and meter before writing free verse.
2) Thou shalt mold the craft of meter into the art of flow.
3) Thou shalt not use reverse syntax at no time to place at the end of a line a rhyme.
4) Thou shalt not insert boring, non-contributing words like 'did' and 'do' to correct deficient meter.
5) Thou shalt not use the crutch of assonance.
6) Thou shalt never rhyme love with above or dove or strife with life.
7) Thou shalt write four culturally significant poems for every poem you write about love, children, pets, parents, grandparents, sunsets, he/she done me wrong, depression, how much you love to write, how your muse abandoned you, your deity, or how words can't describe....
8) When writing western versions of the classic Japanese poetic forms, Tanka, Haiku, Senryu, thou shalt refer to them as Tofu-Tanka, Tofu-Haiku and Tofu Senryu, and thou shalt not count syllables.
9) When writing Ricktameters, Lanturnes, Acrostics or any of the endless other poetic forms, thou shalt include at least two of the following: wit, humor, rhyme, meter, alliteration, metaphor, simile, enjambment, visuals, smelluals, feeluals, et cetera.
10) Thou shalt place two signs above thy writing area: Excellent Poetry Paints a Thousand Pictures, and Think Laconic.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
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Thanks for your long lecture.
Comment from AnnieGale
I loved reading this. It flowed so natural from my tongue while I read it out loud. the artwork compliments this piece because it reflects all beliefs. I was raised to have faith, the wisdom unseen, bring all things to Christ for our sanity. Thank you for this beautiful work and for sharing this.
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I loved reading this. It flowed so natural from my tongue while I read it out loud. the artwork compliments this piece because it reflects all beliefs. I was raised to have faith, the wisdom unseen, bring all things to Christ for our sanity. Thank you for this beautiful work and for sharing this.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Hello AnnieGale,
Thank you very much for your lovely review and comments, and the most coveted SIX STARS. I am so glad you liked it.
~RP.
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You are very welcome, all the best to you :)
Comment from wordspinner314
The rhyming and flow of your poem are done very well. Your faith definitely comes through in your writing, sending the clear message that faith will lead to positive things. Great job.
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The rhyming and flow of your poem are done very well. Your faith definitely comes through in your writing, sending the clear message that faith will lead to positive things. Great job.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your lovely review and comments. I am so glad you liked it.
~RP.
Comment from Raoul D'Harmental
Hi RPSaxena,
This is an excellent inquiry into the oddity of faith that seems to require a collective declaration although it is personal. A big conundrum well described. Thanks for sharing. R
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Hi RPSaxena,
This is an excellent inquiry into the oddity of faith that seems to require a collective declaration although it is personal. A big conundrum well described. Thanks for sharing. R
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Hello Raoul D' Harmental,
Thank you for your lovely review and comments. I am so glad you liked it.
~RP.
Comment from DragonSkulls
This is a great piece for the faith contest, RPS. Yes, self worth and God's love 'will' lead us to success. You chose the perfect picture to accompany your work. I wish you the best of luck in the contest, friend. Have a great night.
DS
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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This is a great piece for the faith contest, RPS. Yes, self worth and God's love 'will' lead us to success. You chose the perfect picture to accompany your work. I wish you the best of luck in the contest, friend. Have a great night.
DS
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Hello Dragon Skulls,
Thank you very much for your lovely review and comments, and the best of luck wishes.
I am so glad you liked it.
~RP.
Comment from amahra
Very interesting art work you've chosen for this piece. I loved the poem for its rhyming and for the rhythm. The rhyming made sense and didn't appear forced.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Very interesting art work you've chosen for this piece. I loved the poem for its rhyming and for the rhythm. The rhyming made sense and didn't appear forced.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your lovely review and comments. I am so glad you liked it.
~RP.
Comment from Lesley Collier
A wonderful poem stressing the point that although we seek God in different places He is everywhere and most importantly with our soul which combined with self worth is the key to relieving life's stress. Beautifully written, nicely rhymed and nicely flowing!
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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A wonderful poem stressing the point that although we seek God in different places He is everywhere and most importantly with our soul which combined with self worth is the key to relieving life's stress. Beautifully written, nicely rhymed and nicely flowing!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your lovely review and comments. I am so glad you liked it.
~RP.
Comment from Poetofheart2013
A very thought proving poem fill really good imaging.
And very heartfelt . and feeling.
I really enjoy reading it.
Keep the good work
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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A very thought proving poem fill really good imaging.
And very heartfelt . and feeling.
I really enjoy reading it.
Keep the good work
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your lovely review and comments. I am so glad you liked it.
~RP.
Comment from Unspoken94
This is an excellent rhymed poem regarding Faith.
I think it's a poem that meets the contest's
expectations and I wish you well. Calling upon
our faith clearly can improve our attitude and
self worth. It does indeed call us to put our
best self into our relationships and service to
others. That is the success I hope your are
referring to. I hope that you are not implying
financial or material success.
I too am in the contest and incidentally, this contest
does not require that you be anonymous. Voting is
done by a committee.
My poem for the contest is titled, "A Christmas Faith." I
hope you will read it. All the best to you. Bill
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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This is an excellent rhymed poem regarding Faith.
I think it's a poem that meets the contest's
expectations and I wish you well. Calling upon
our faith clearly can improve our attitude and
self worth. It does indeed call us to put our
best self into our relationships and service to
others. That is the success I hope your are
referring to. I hope that you are not implying
financial or material success.
I too am in the contest and incidentally, this contest
does not require that you be anonymous. Voting is
done by a committee.
My poem for the contest is titled, "A Christmas Faith." I
hope you will read it. All the best to you. Bill
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your lovely review and comments. I am so glad you liked it.
I'll certainly like to read your poem and wish good luck for the same.
~RP.
Comment from Eternal Muse
This is a nice spiritual poem with a deep m!message. I agree that faith in God results in self-confidence which give you strength. God does give you strength and guides your way.
The rhyming seemed forced throughout, this the reduced rating.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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This is a nice spiritual poem with a deep m!message. I agree that faith in God results in self-confidence which give you strength. God does give you strength and guides your way.
The rhyming seemed forced throughout, this the reduced rating.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Thanks for reading.