2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "5/7/5 ( Living in nudist)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
19 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
haha. this is a rather entertainig piece of poetry dear anonymous! and quite clever a that. my only concern is that it does not stand alone without the picture.
however, thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
haha. this is a rather entertainig piece of poetry dear anonymous! and quite clever a that. my only concern is that it does not stand alone without the picture.
however, thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Hello Rebekka, the joke without the picture is that nudist don't wear costumes. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Selina Stambi
I for one wouldn't want a nudist sitting on my furniture!
Mystery writer, you've given me some food for thought. I guess a nudist's costume could be a ... different expression, perhaps?
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
I for one wouldn't want a nudist sitting on my furniture!
Mystery writer, you've given me some food for thought. I guess a nudist's costume could be a ... different expression, perhaps?
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali :)
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Hello Selina, the joke is that nudist don't wear clothes so they don't wear costumes :) Thank you very much for the review.
Comment from mvbrooks
very tongue-in-cheek humor and the picture is a great match for the poem. The irony of "reverse flashing" is successfully humorous without being offensive. Fun poem.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
very tongue-in-cheek humor and the picture is a great match for the poem. The irony of "reverse flashing" is successfully humorous without being offensive. Fun poem.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the awesome review. :)
Comment from Domino 2
I laughed out loud at the artwork - hilarious!
With the upmost respect, though your words are fun, too, I had to read them a few times to get the meaning, as the lines seem 'falsely tailored' to meet the syllable count.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
I laughed out loud at the artwork - hilarious!
With the upmost respect, though your words are fun, too, I had to read them a few times to get the meaning, as the lines seem 'falsely tailored' to meet the syllable count.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the review. :)
Comment from Joyce Long
I can't believe your picture. It says it all. You were so lucky to find it. This truly is humorous without the words. The words really adds a different point of view to a fun time of dressing up.
The syllable count is perfect.
I enjoyed my chuckle with your poem.
To bad this isn't a contest as I believe you would surely win.
Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 10-5-15
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
I can't believe your picture. It says it all. You were so lucky to find it. This truly is humorous without the words. The words really adds a different point of view to a fun time of dressing up.
The syllable count is perfect.
I enjoyed my chuckle with your poem.
To bad this isn't a contest as I believe you would surely win.
Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 10-5-15
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the awesome review. :) It is for a contest.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
I enjoyed your humorous poem and the picture your selected for it was perfect. You followed the rules; I cannot add any corrections, except for my preference I wanted it to rhyme. I know that is not the rule, just my flavor.
Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
I enjoyed your humorous poem and the picture your selected for it was perfect. You followed the rules; I cannot add any corrections, except for my preference I wanted it to rhyme. I know that is not the rule, just my flavor.
Well done.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the awesome review. :)
Comment from TAB_that's me
Because of the picture, this is hilarious though without the picture I don't think it would stand alone. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
Because of the picture, this is hilarious though without the picture I don't think it would stand alone. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the awesome review. :)
Comment from vigournet
The imagery made me laugh. Its a bit like a naughty postcard. You have kept to the contest rules, and it is humorous, so good luck! I feel with a little more thought the lines could improve.
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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
The imagery made me laugh. Its a bit like a naughty postcard. You have kept to the contest rules, and it is humorous, so good luck! I feel with a little more thought the lines could improve.
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Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the review. :)
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. Well, you certainly made us laugh with this one. This is marvelous, a good contest entry. I love your cartoon to go with the poem. Very good work. Luck in the contest
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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
Excellent. Well, you certainly made us laugh with this one. This is marvelous, a good contest entry. I love your cartoon to go with the poem. Very good work. Luck in the contest
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Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the awesome review. :)