Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Carolyn,

This is a really nice poem too. I don't know if I've ever written a Triolet poem either. Lately I can't seem to think of anything to write. My forgetfulness and aches and pains are keeping me down.

Kat

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015

Dear Kat,
I felt like I was reading my own daily report.:-)I finally posted 2 after a long dry spell. Since mid December I have gone from one thing to another. You are in my thoughts and prayers often.
Take care my friend,
Carolyn
I'm glad you enjoyed the poem,

reply by MizKat on 03-Jun-2015

Thanks for keeping me in your thoughts and prayers. You are a great friend.

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is yet another beautiful and spiritual poem that the author has created with this piece of work. I love these spiritual poems. Faith gives us the strength to carry on.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015

Thank you Tom, I have been so un-inspired lately that its good to get some poetry going that is so well received by the readers such as yourself. I appreciate all you have said. :-) Carolyn

reply by Tomes Johnston on 03-Jun-2015

I feel the same way. I need inspiration too.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, Carolyn, you did an excellent job writing this triolet about being one with God, I loved reading this and love the picture. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015

Thanks for the great review and good luck wishes. So glad you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Carolyn;
-I really like your triolet poem and found that it is written very well and very expressive and ingeniously creative.
-The rhyming is superb and each rhyming word is contingent to the meaning and concept of each line.
-The rhythms, cadence, timing and tempo help with the reading to make it easy, fluid and clear.
-Very good use of enjambment.
-One suggestion though and I believe it is your Sixth line: "My soul will live, though, I (may) die". I believe it flows just a little bit smoother without the even in there? What do you think?
-I just love this poem as it and it is a good example of unselfishness.
-Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015

Thank you Alex for this most wonderful review and helpful statements. I will take a look and consider your suggestion.
:-) Carolyn

reply by krys123 on 03-Jun-2015

You are so sincerely welcome, Carolyn.
Alex

Comment from royowen

Excellent

This triolet reads like a short form Psalm some of them have repetitive lines in, something like the one you chose! "Lord my soul is thine alone.". Very clever, Carolyn my friend, it's good to have you back for this short time. Elaine and I are leaving for Europe tomorrow night, I'm not sure how often I'll be able to get on face, but our love to you and Larry, may you both grow, in His knowledge and grace. Blessings, Roy. Good luck in the comp.

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 Comment Written 02-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015

Thank you dear Roy and have a safe and wonderful time in Europe. Give Elaine our love as well. :-) Carolyn

reply by royowen on 02-Jun-2015

Thank you Carolyn

Comment from zanya

Exceptional

And the spiritual sentiments here in this Triolet are sublime - a reminder of humanity's better self and wondrous spiritual destiny and portrayed appropriately with the poetic embellishment of fine archaic language

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015

Thank you so much zanya for this insightful review. I appreciate all you have said. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Curly Girly

Exceptional

I think this is a lovely poem. What a pleasure it is to rest knowing that God has our soul in his palm.
One suggestion:
Lord my soul is thine alone
Suggest using comma for address:
Lord, my soul is thine alone

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015

Thanks Nicole for the heads up on personal possessive, I will take care of it. :-) The extra shining cross is an honor to receive. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Nice entry which speaks of the immortality of the soul.
I like the line about it being a loan from God. Good assonance with thine and mine, soul and though.

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 Comment Written 02-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015

Thanks Shari, I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. The comments on assonance makes me feel like I may be getting the hang of this thing called poetry. :-) Carolyn