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Viewing comments for Chapter 103 "Together"
'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway

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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. I think your creative approach as using faith as the framework for a stable relationship was wonderful and something many folks will benefit from in the reading. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2014


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
    Thank you also for this wonderful review. I always appreciate the encouragement you give. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Benny Beeharry
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Hi Carolyn, there is a very great sense of determination here. And love.All we can pray for is to be together, through thick and thin.
The writing is not forceful ,but flows with a lot of ease , which seems to increase the love and sincerity it was written.
Benny Beeharry

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2014


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
    Thank you Benny for always understanding what I write. I appreciate you and your comments about 'Together.'
    :-) Carolyn
Comment from Smoothiecool
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good luck in the contest

your words allow the reader to see and feel no matter what with Faith one can weather the storms till the end

good visual

good enjambment through sentences allows flow

good use "P" "L" "S" consonance

good use "E" "O" assonance

flows easy read

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2014


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
    Dear SC, your reviews are so affirming off my growth as a writer. I look forward to them and thank you for your encouragement. :-) Carolyn
reply by Smoothiecool on 04-Dec-2014
    most welcome..SC <:> Faye
reply by Smoothiecool on 04-Dec-2014
    most welcome Carolyn
    have a blessed day...SC <:> Faye
reply by Smoothiecool on 04-Dec-2014
    most welcome ...SC <:>Faye
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi, Carolyn,

Great entry of faith. I like the repetition of 'together.' It helps to make it strong and cohesive. Nice progression of thoughts as well.

Nicely done! Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*,*)

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2014


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
    Thanks Jax, it reminds me a little of you and Tom as well as myself and loved one. So glad you liked it. Thank you for the great comments. :-) Carolyn
Comment from royowen
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You have most definitely got that right dear Carolyn, without faith it is impossible to please Him, Elaine and I are about, when age catches up... Not the normal romantic poem you get when love is expressed, but the love that endures, well written, articulately described, beautifully presented, dear sister, good luck in the competition, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2014


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
    Thanks Roy for this wonderful review, summary and best wishes. :-)Love, Carolyn
Comment from Walu Feral
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That's great work my friend. Togetherness is so important, if only more people understood then there would not be so much sorrow and sadness in the world. Great contest entry and all the best with it. Cheers Fez

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 Comment Written 03-Dec-2014


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
    Thanks Feral for enjoying this one. I appreciate your fine comments. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Erys
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I don't know about faith, I agree with this too, but people can do a lot of beautiful things together if they share the same values.
I enjoyed reading your poem.

Best wishes!

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 Comment Written 03-Dec-2014


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
    Yes, sharing values would certainly build faith in each other. Thank you so very much for your fine review and all those stars. :-) Carolyn