haiku (trudging up the hill)
an ant at work31 total reviews
Comment from rrabinow
I like the line ant carrying chocolate. Wonderful use of description. It creates a great image in my mine. Great job with the syllable count. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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I like the line ant carrying chocolate. Wonderful use of description. It creates a great image in my mine. Great job with the syllable count. Best of luck.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the nice comments. I appreciate what you wrote!
Comment from l.raven
OMG how cute is this...I know they can carry well over their weight...I think that's a Christmas M&M...LOL...I love your poem...very well written
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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OMG how cute is this...I know they can carry well over their weight...I think that's a Christmas M&M...LOL...I love your poem...very well written
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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You just made me smile. Thanks so very much!
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Hi Loanna, you are so very welcome...so glad I could make you smile...Linda xxoo
Comment from Delahay
This is a cute poem to go along with the picture you chose to accompany it. I saw the picture and was thinking of "The ants go marching". This little ant is plodding up the hill with his bounty of chocolate swiped from a backpack.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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This is a cute poem to go along with the picture you chose to accompany it. I saw the picture and was thinking of "The ants go marching". This little ant is plodding up the hill with his bounty of chocolate swiped from a backpack.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the note, Ward..I appreciate the nice comments.
Comment from granny goes viral
I don't know if this followed all the rules or not. Don't hold to rules much myself. But I loved the visual, so funny. And the poetry that explained it, too adorable. Good job.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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I don't know if this followed all the rules or not. Don't hold to rules much myself. But I loved the visual, so funny. And the poetry that explained it, too adorable. Good job.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the lovely note!
Comment from Acquired Taste
Too cute this one - closer to the truth than we might admit especially when we leave our sacks on the floor. Think teachers might find this cute to post for their younger children to encourage them to keep their food and snacks off the ground. Good luck with the contest.
Just my thoughts...AT=/
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Too cute this one - closer to the truth than we might admit especially when we leave our sacks on the floor. Think teachers might find this cute to post for their younger children to encourage them to keep their food and snacks off the ground. Good luck with the contest.
Just my thoughts...AT=/
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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So true, about the snacks...thanks for the sweet note.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ants are capable of carrying objects 50 times their own body weight with their mandibles. Ants will enslave other ants, keeping them captive and making them do work for the colony. And we all thought slavery was dead. Ants sometimes herd or tend to insects of other species, like aphids or leafhoppers. So their are some species who take care of their own, as well as others of completely different species.
Nicely done. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Ants are capable of carrying objects 50 times their own body weight with their mandibles. Ants will enslave other ants, keeping them captive and making them do work for the colony. And we all thought slavery was dead. Ants sometimes herd or tend to insects of other species, like aphids or leafhoppers. So their are some species who take care of their own, as well as others of completely different species.
Nicely done. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Hi Dean! It is always a joy to receive your notes, friend.
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My pleasure, Lois.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi anon - A cute haiku with first two lines interconnecting perfectly which you follow with the necessary satori. Do ants eat chocolate LOL? They certainly work hard. Good luck in the contest. Kind regards Dorothy
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Hi anon - A cute haiku with first two lines interconnecting perfectly which you follow with the necessary satori. Do ants eat chocolate LOL? They certainly work hard. Good luck in the contest. Kind regards Dorothy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from Alan K Pease
Your Haiku fits its constraints admirably for the hill is excellent and the carrying up the m&m herculean. You picture is very creative and I hope instrumental in winning the contest.
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Your Haiku fits its constraints admirably for the hill is excellent and the carrying up the m&m herculean. You picture is very creative and I hope instrumental in winning the contest.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from HAREEDS
Great picture and good use of this short form of poetry to tell a brief story. With what you've got to work with it doesn't leave much room to write a flowing short poem. In your case you've made a good job of it. Good luck in the contest.
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Great picture and good use of this short form of poetry to tell a brief story. With what you've got to work with it doesn't leave much room to write a flowing short poem. In your case you've made a good job of it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Y'know, for that Sisyphus ant laboring with the piece of chocolate- I hope you let him eat a piece for his efforts. I like your transformation of landscape.
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Y'know, for that Sisyphus ant laboring with the piece of chocolate- I hope you let him eat a piece for his efforts. I like your transformation of landscape.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014