The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Condors Flight"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from jmdg1954
I honestly could not distinguish a quatrain from the L train, (and that is not at all written to minimize your work). I like to learn these various poem styles. It sometimes puts the reading in perspective...
This was fantastic. 'Behemoth bird most awesome view' is the view, us seeing the condor in flight or do we visualize what the condor is seeing? I saw it both ways and enjoyed the poem equally.
Nicely done Carolyn. John
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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I honestly could not distinguish a quatrain from the L train, (and that is not at all written to minimize your work). I like to learn these various poem styles. It sometimes puts the reading in perspective...
This was fantastic. 'Behemoth bird most awesome view' is the view, us seeing the condor in flight or do we visualize what the condor is seeing? I saw it both ways and enjoyed the poem equally.
Nicely done Carolyn. John
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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I am learning poetry form names from many of our peers here on FS. Writing to that description is another task indeed. :-) Yes, the bird is awesome to our view and can you imagine how large his own view is? Glad you enjoyed it. :-) Carolyn
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I am note sure if there is a name for this, but as creative poets, we are able to explore outside the box. I would just call it free verse; Lovely words and presentation. Hugs, Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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I am note sure if there is a name for this, but as creative poets, we are able to explore outside the box. I would just call it free verse; Lovely words and presentation. Hugs, Debbie
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Hi Debbie, thanks for this great review. It is a Quatrain, with line 1-3 rhymed and line 4 unrhymed. I think the sylable count makes it a little unique free verse works too. I hope 2014 is being good to you my friend. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is just a beautiful read. One can visualize the flight of this fabulous bird through the lovely imagery conveyed in your well chosen words. Well done and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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This is just a beautiful read. One can visualize the flight of this fabulous bird through the lovely imagery conveyed in your well chosen words. Well done and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for the great comments and rating. :-) Carolyn
Comment from evrenios
Carolyn - I liked the alliteration in span, sky, so; and Behemoth Bird, body. I especially like the line behemoth bird most awesome new. The rhyme scheme in the first three lines is also excellent. I would call this a quatrain with an un-rhymed fourth line. There are many forms that are not named, but what you have done is excellent.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Carolyn - I liked the alliteration in span, sky, so; and Behemoth Bird, body. I especially like the line behemoth bird most awesome new. The rhyme scheme in the first three lines is also excellent. I would call this a quatrain with an un-rhymed fourth line. There are many forms that are not named, but what you have done is excellent.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Thank you for this wonderful review, that's what it will be called Quatrain, specific syllable count and unrhymed fourth line. ;-) Carolyn
Comment from emjaihammond
What a well done poem. Using 7 8 7 8 syllable count, agrees with the writing you share here with us. I also loved the picture you combined it with. All in all a great job.
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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What a well done poem. Using 7 8 7 8 syllable count, agrees with the writing you share here with us. I also loved the picture you combined it with. All in all a great job.
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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I appreciate your fine comments. Glad you enjoyed it. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Gungalo
Condor wings span sky so blue
Behemoth bird most awesome view
Pristine landscape to renew
Nourished body cleanses land's soul
So wonderful is your quatrain Carolyn. It's amazing to say the least. Awesome write for this bird.
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Condor wings span sky so blue
Behemoth bird most awesome view
Pristine landscape to renew
Nourished body cleanses land's soul
So wonderful is your quatrain Carolyn. It's amazing to say the least. Awesome write for this bird.
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Thank you Pam, and I just reviewed one of your wonderful works. I hope 2014 is treating you well. We are not back to Missouri yet, hope to make it in tomorrow. Lots of snow. Will return to AZ when called. Take care, Carolyn
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Oh good to hear from you. Hope you are having fun but know you can't wait to get home.