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Comment from Charlene0513
An interesting view of how this song(poem)improvises the wonders found outside to show the tremendous adoration found between them.
Good metaphors noted:rain to hide the love we feel
thunder shields the kiss we steal
Charlene
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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An interesting view of how this song(poem)improvises the wonders found outside to show the tremendous adoration found between them.
Good metaphors noted:rain to hide the love we feel
thunder shields the kiss we steal
Charlene
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Nice observations. Appreciate the thoughtful review. Thank you kindly.
Comment from MarjorieAnne
The rhymes, rhythm and repetition are musically pleasing. First two lines are difficult to understand. The poem is definitely romantic, but not really light and sweet, more mysterious and dark, even profound which is intriguing.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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The rhymes, rhythm and repetition are musically pleasing. First two lines are difficult to understand. The poem is definitely romantic, but not really light and sweet, more mysterious and dark, even profound which is intriguing.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind remarks. The first two lines are just the couple in their own little world, nothing too deep really. Perhaps a touch of forbidden love gives it a darker feel. Interesting comments. Thanks again.
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You're welcome
Comment from SteveY
A very beautifully written and romantic poem done by this talented author. Great picture that you chose as well to compliment this little masterpiece!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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A very beautifully written and romantic poem done by this talented author. Great picture that you chose as well to compliment this little masterpiece!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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How very kind and complimentary. Most encouraging and appreciated. Thank you kindly!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a lovely entry for the Light and Sweet contest. It is sweet and full of light. I love the repetition of 'the sun will never know'. Sunlight and moonlight. Lovely. Good luck in the competition - Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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This is a lovely entry for the Light and Sweet contest. It is sweet and full of light. I love the repetition of 'the sun will never know'. Sunlight and moonlight. Lovely. Good luck in the competition - Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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So pleased you enjoyed this. I shall cross my fingers. Thank you kindly.
Comment from allborn66
This is a lovely poem. I love the sky/cloud terms that ran through it. It has a sweet and light tone. I liked the flow.
Barbara
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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This is a lovely poem. I love the sky/cloud terms that ran through it. It has a sweet and light tone. I liked the flow.
Barbara
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Wonderful review. I am delighted that you enjoyed this. Thank you so much.
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the pictured piece sitting arm and arm watching the sun set the stars ride on their dreams oh the charm of this piece beautiful dear friend
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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from the pictured piece sitting arm and arm watching the sun set the stars ride on their dreams oh the charm of this piece beautiful dear friend
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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glad you liked this. thank you kindly. most appreciated.
Comment from Bojenn
Your poem is my favorite. I had to read it a few times to understand the depth and sort out the details.
Is your poem about an affair? I thought it was because "the sun will never know."
Very interesting.
Bojenn
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Your poem is my favorite. I had to read it a few times to understand the depth and sort out the details.
Is your poem about an affair? I thought it was because "the sun will never know."
Very interesting.
Bojenn
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much. Yes, not exactly an affair, but a relationship that others wouldn't be pleased with. Very perceptive. Much appreciated.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is beautiful, mystery writer, the sun will never know of the love found in the darkness of the night that only the stars are allowed to see. i enjoyed reading it...
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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this is beautiful, mystery writer, the sun will never know of the love found in the darkness of the night that only the stars are allowed to see. i enjoyed reading it...
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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So nice to hear. Very pleased that you enjoyed it. Thank you for the kind remarks. Most appreciated.
Comment from Rondeno
your song lyric-poem fulfills the brief splendidly. You get a really nice romantic feel into it. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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your song lyric-poem fulfills the brief splendidly. You get a really nice romantic feel into it. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much. I shall cross my fingers. Most kind and appreciated review. regards.
Comment from Lily Y
I really enjoyed this song. Did you write it? Your author notes confused me a bit. Anyway, I liked "stay with me and the sun will never know." It strikes me as dreamy and inviting, just like love! But some parts of this poem (song?) don't perfectly fit the prompt of light and sweet, in my opinion. Some parts felt almost a little dark, or even foreboding. But your word choice was phenomenal, for the most part, and I loved the melodic rhythm to it and the intention. I hope you consider my comments and suggestions. Keep writing!-Lily
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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I really enjoyed this song. Did you write it? Your author notes confused me a bit. Anyway, I liked "stay with me and the sun will never know." It strikes me as dreamy and inviting, just like love! But some parts of this poem (song?) don't perfectly fit the prompt of light and sweet, in my opinion. Some parts felt almost a little dark, or even foreboding. But your word choice was phenomenal, for the most part, and I loved the melodic rhythm to it and the intention. I hope you consider my comments and suggestions. Keep writing!-Lily
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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I enjoyed reading your comments and will consider them. I am not sure what is dark or foreboding perhaps a sense of forbidden love maybe which makes sense. I appreciate the compliments and the thoughtful review. And yes it is all mine; words, music and the girl! but, I don't have her anymore. ha!