A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Don't Fear the Reaper: cryptic 5-7-5"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
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Comment from Martin Chan
The poem " Don't Fear the Reaper " is a cryptic 5-7-5 poem conforming to the 5-7-5 format principles .
The poem ie very nicely presented and also has a nice theme.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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The poem " Don't Fear the Reaper " is a cryptic 5-7-5 poem conforming to the 5-7-5 format principles .
The poem ie very nicely presented and also has a nice theme.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Thanks, Martin! I appreciate it.
Comment from Sagnik Das
Very informative & impressive, my dearest friend! When it comes to the 'emotive twisting' of a reader's mind, I presume you are second to none. What a 'grim' extravaganza fraught in dire premonition have you herein improvised! (made even grimmer, by the trademark employment of blatant footnotes, combined with a subtle hint of pragmatic wit [akin to what one normally associates with such avid 'Modernists' as R.L. Stine - or even, H.P. Lovecraft]).
To sum up an inference, this 17 syllabled work fares OUTSTANDINGLY (no lesser word will do), in evoking a conspicuous array of morbid mental images, & associative sensibilities, beseeming thereby my wholehearted appraisal ....
I love the suave alliterative effect, & the rhyming conjured all through (despite it being a 5-7-5) -- very innovative & ORIGINAL -- both from the perspective of an elaborate theme & a discernible narrative flow.
The subtle brevity has indeed been brilliantly utilized, especially in the concluding line (though I for one am rather a novice when it comes to Japanese poetic forms).
Thus, to conclude precisely, this work possesses a terse vitality to appeal directly to the 'refined' aspects of sensibility, & fares wonderfully to stand out on its own.
Impeccably fared, Dean - Who knows? - Maybe he's lurkin' by your door ... right now .... MAYBE! ...
;)
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Very informative & impressive, my dearest friend! When it comes to the 'emotive twisting' of a reader's mind, I presume you are second to none. What a 'grim' extravaganza fraught in dire premonition have you herein improvised! (made even grimmer, by the trademark employment of blatant footnotes, combined with a subtle hint of pragmatic wit [akin to what one normally associates with such avid 'Modernists' as R.L. Stine - or even, H.P. Lovecraft]).
To sum up an inference, this 17 syllabled work fares OUTSTANDINGLY (no lesser word will do), in evoking a conspicuous array of morbid mental images, & associative sensibilities, beseeming thereby my wholehearted appraisal ....
I love the suave alliterative effect, & the rhyming conjured all through (despite it being a 5-7-5) -- very innovative & ORIGINAL -- both from the perspective of an elaborate theme & a discernible narrative flow.
The subtle brevity has indeed been brilliantly utilized, especially in the concluding line (though I for one am rather a novice when it comes to Japanese poetic forms).
Thus, to conclude precisely, this work possesses a terse vitality to appeal directly to the 'refined' aspects of sensibility, & fares wonderfully to stand out on its own.
Impeccably fared, Dean - Who knows? - Maybe he's lurkin' by your door ... right now .... MAYBE! ...
;)
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Thank you so very much, Sagnik. Your reviews are always such a delight to read & receive, my friend.
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And I shall not merely welcome you today - I shall vouchsafe a hearty embracement! - Here's to you, Dean, for your recent feat :
Accept this, I beseech, as a trivial (but heartfelt) endowment, besides our unending respect & ovation.
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He is, Sagnik, just around the corner. Can you see him standing there...?
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LOL ... If mind-games could have served a vocation, you for one would have been a billionaire ...
;)
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer has it all the this piece. The syllable count is correct. This piece has rhyming. This piece has a nice flow and a message that is clear and easy to understand. Good job my brother. Oh yeah, that photo sends chills down my spine, I had to say Jesus!
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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The writer has it all the this piece. The syllable count is correct. This piece has rhyming. This piece has a nice flow and a message that is clear and easy to understand. Good job my brother. Oh yeah, that photo sends chills down my spine, I had to say Jesus!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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I had to say Jesus, when I wrote it, my brother, (LOL)! Thanks for your wonderful review!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Well, you certainly know how to display your work. We try not to fear the reaper but we can't ignore him. Couldn't sing along - don't LIKE he words! Very good! Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Well, you certainly know how to display your work. We try not to fear the reaper but we can't ignore him. Couldn't sing along - don't LIKE he words! Very good! Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Thanks very much, Dorothy, I appreciate you viewing it objectively...
Comment from Gravell
This is a great 5-7-5 poem. Your words had been chosen carefully. The word near has a well placed meaning to it, signifying that the fear is still there, as the word is a little apart. Excellent presentation. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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This is a great 5-7-5 poem. Your words had been chosen carefully. The word near has a well placed meaning to it, signifying that the fear is still there, as the word is a little apart. Excellent presentation. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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You nailed it, Gravell, you're obviously a very perceptive individual...
Thanks for that wonderful review!
Comment from alexgeorge
Wow! Loved this song. The whole poem and the author's description reminded me of "Supernatural". The Grim Reaper has always captured our imagination. In Ancient Greece Hades was feared as we fear the Grim Reaper today.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Wow! Loved this song. The whole poem and the author's description reminded me of "Supernatural". The Grim Reaper has always captured our imagination. In Ancient Greece Hades was feared as we fear the Grim Reaper today.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Thanks very much, Alex. I'm on pg. 218, awesome write, simply amazing!
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That's great, Dean!
Comment from headingley
Well done here Dean. So great to see that the standard, impact, and most certainly the creepiness of your work is not lost in any way by using so few words and verses compared to normal.
Don't get me wrong. love all your work as you know. Yet in a strange way, this was such a surprise to read.
A triumph and it would make a great movie poster with the perfect slogan
Well done
You are Kuch a legend
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Well done here Dean. So great to see that the standard, impact, and most certainly the creepiness of your work is not lost in any way by using so few words and verses compared to normal.
Don't get me wrong. love all your work as you know. Yet in a strange way, this was such a surprise to read.
A triumph and it would make a great movie poster with the perfect slogan
Well done
You are Kuch a legend
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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A legend? Wow, headingley, that's such a wonderful compliment! Thanks, and I appreciate the spot-on review, as well.
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You're welcome mate. Keep your rye out for my latest attempt at something similar written by my goodself and inspired by your work. Should be posted today at some point. Would be great to get your feedback on it
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Will do, headingley!
Comment from JM daSilva
Yeah. Don't fear the reaper, but don't take the reaper as inevitable either. I know one day we will beat this son of a gun. Too bad I won't be around. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Yeah. Don't fear the reaper, but don't take the reaper as inevitable either. I know one day we will beat this son of a gun. Too bad I won't be around. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Heh, I certainly hope so, my friend! Sadly, I won't be around to see it, either. Time goes by so quickly, doesn't it?
Thanks for your fantastic review!
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Absolutely. Times flies in my life. I never have enough of it. You're welcome.
Comment from Treischel
A creatively composed 5-7-5 formatted poem about the Reaper. True to your horror theme, it evokes dread, even in counterpoint to the message not to fear. Thus creating a palpable tension that permeates, like the taste of rotted meat. Truly enjoyed it. The author's notes were very enlightening too.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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A creatively composed 5-7-5 formatted poem about the Reaper. True to your horror theme, it evokes dread, even in counterpoint to the message not to fear. Thus creating a palpable tension that permeates, like the taste of rotted meat. Truly enjoyed it. The author's notes were very enlightening too.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Thanks very much, Mr. 'T', I am very pleased that you enjoyed it...
Comment from write hand blue
Another high quality production with appropriate background music.
I'm amazed at the speed you turn these masterpieces out.
The poem seems to me to fulfill the 5-7-5 format.
Well done:) mel.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Another high quality production with appropriate background music.
I'm amazed at the speed you turn these masterpieces out.
The poem seems to me to fulfill the 5-7-5 format.
Well done:) mel.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Thanks, Mel. I get them ready in advance, then leave them in preview mode until I have enough member dollars to promote them enough so that they'll be read. People aren't too keen on reviewing two-cent posts, no matter how well written they are.
Thanks for the fantastic review...
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My pleasure, you are right about two-cent posts not being popular. Though I occasionally review a two-cent work if it's something special or a person I wish to review.
I stand in awe at the way you present your work. I have to get my son to put a picture with my story (never mind the special effects).
I won't ask you how you do it. That is for me to learn. LOL.
:) mel.