Longtime Since I Heard Silence
A Villanelle: Long Time Since I Heard Silence30 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
out of all your work that I have reviewed so far, I enjoy this one the most. I think perhaps the villanelle may be your form. I love silence too and your metaphors for it work well " autumn leaves fall muted in almond shaped tiers"; " no lavish language to save in a glowing silver case" - good job
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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out of all your work that I have reviewed so far, I enjoy this one the most. I think perhaps the villanelle may be your form. I love silence too and your metaphors for it work well " autumn leaves fall muted in almond shaped tiers"; " no lavish language to save in a glowing silver case" - good job
Comment Written 20-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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This is a great honor, that you are following my work. Speechless. Wow!
Comment from robina1978
Quiet can be so nice and I liked your Villanelle a lot. You kept to all the requirements. It is a real gem. One to remember. I also liked how you kind of painted a picture in it.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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Quiet can be so nice and I liked your Villanelle a lot. You kept to all the requirements. It is a real gem. One to remember. I also liked how you kind of painted a picture in it.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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Thank you for reading and commenting in my work. Blessings to you.
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very welcome
Comment from MizKat
Amada - Your Villanelle style poetry is very nice. I sure appreciate quietness too. I haven't read very many Villanelle poems but think you did a super job on this. Kat
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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Amada - Your Villanelle style poetry is very nice. I sure appreciate quietness too. I haven't read very many Villanelle poems but think you did a super job on this. Kat
Comment Written 20-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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I truly appreciate your lovely review. Peace to you dear poet.
Comment from 9999pool
If we like the quietness and silence then it is not loneliness. We best describe this inner peace as solitude. Solitude can be a very good old friend if we push aside it as loneliness of a different nature.
In solitude we usually open our minds to thoughts of greatness and to excel and overcome the toils and trials of life.
We find enlightenment and solitude will give us the solace, peace and tranquility we seek.
Excellent write about solitude - describe in a different way but on a comparative basis. Everyone loves solitude - if we are able to find it in our hearts when at peace with God.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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If we like the quietness and silence then it is not loneliness. We best describe this inner peace as solitude. Solitude can be a very good old friend if we push aside it as loneliness of a different nature.
In solitude we usually open our minds to thoughts of greatness and to excel and overcome the toils and trials of life.
We find enlightenment and solitude will give us the solace, peace and tranquility we seek.
Excellent write about solitude - describe in a different way but on a comparative basis. Everyone loves solitude - if we are able to find it in our hearts when at peace with God.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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Thank you Ritchie for this very encouraging review! You caught so well my feelings in solitude, a healer.
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Hi Amada.
I can relate very well to your excellent piece because i have written a similar one "Alone but not loneliness!". Do check it out if you like solitude and its feeling.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment from Carrie Smith
Have no clue what Villanelle is, Amada, but this poem spoke volumes to me. Silence is a gift that I believe many crave today...total silence...inside and outside. What wonderful rhyme and rhythm. Thank you, my friend, for such insightful thoughts this morning. xxSusan
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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Have no clue what Villanelle is, Amada, but this poem spoke volumes to me. Silence is a gift that I believe many crave today...total silence...inside and outside. What wonderful rhyme and rhythm. Thank you, my friend, for such insightful thoughts this morning. xxSusan
Comment Written 20-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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Thank you Susan for this great acknowledgment! For sure, it makes my day.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The message is clear and understandable. The rhyming is good. This piece flows well and the harmony is where it needs to be. My attention is captured and held to the end. Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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The message is clear and understandable. The rhyming is good. This piece flows well and the harmony is where it needs to be. My attention is captured and held to the end. Good job.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much for this encouraging and supporting review.
Comment from words
I appreciate your ode to silence.
I too am a big fan of the quiet ... almost a luxury in the noisy world we live in.
I like your repeating lines.
I especially liked: l
ike when silences embrace the veil of inner ear,
In its shield, I feel that Heaven's almost near.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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I appreciate your ode to silence.
I too am a big fan of the quiet ... almost a luxury in the noisy world we live in.
I like your repeating lines.
I especially liked: l
ike when silences embrace the veil of inner ear,
In its shield, I feel that Heaven's almost near.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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For sure, great to have your comments. Yes, I so love my quiet times!
Comment from Charlene0513
To amada,
There is a subdued aura about this poem that captures the innocence of quietude.
It has a calming and most distant sound of stillness.
I really liked you metaphor of: Autumn leaves fall muted in almond-shaped tiers
Nice flow and very good rhythm.
Charlene
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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To amada,
There is a subdued aura about this poem that captures the innocence of quietude.
It has a calming and most distant sound of stillness.
I really liked you metaphor of: Autumn leaves fall muted in almond-shaped tiers
Nice flow and very good rhythm.
Charlene
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you Charlene for commenting in the phrase that caught your heart. Blessings.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Excllent amada I know it's not an easy chore to write a
Villanelle:
I totlaay agree wht Brooke said--
vivid detail of setting that adds to the serene, sacred
tone
Gert
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Excllent amada I know it's not an easy chore to write a
Villanelle:
I totlaay agree wht Brooke said--
vivid detail of setting that adds to the serene, sacred
tone
Gert
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Gert, thank you so much dear friend, I like "sacred tone."
Comment from adewpearl
strong aba rhymes in your tercets with a solid closing quatrain
Excellent use of the alternating refrain lines borrowed from the first and third lines of the opening stanza
Good consonance of soft S sounds in silences embrace
good alliteration in tracked trace
and sacred space
and in lavish language
and in calm kissed
good internal rhyme in background soundtrack
vivid detail of setting that adds to the serene, sacred tone
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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strong aba rhymes in your tercets with a solid closing quatrain
Excellent use of the alternating refrain lines borrowed from the first and third lines of the opening stanza
Good consonance of soft S sounds in silences embrace
good alliteration in tracked trace
and sacred space
and in lavish language
and in calm kissed
good internal rhyme in background soundtrack
vivid detail of setting that adds to the serene, sacred tone
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Brooke, you made it possible! Thank you.