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An Earlette of Lament ...38 total reviews
Comment from Minglement
Hello my long lost friend :) I got a real kick out of this form, but it feels bio to me - but what do I know :) I haven't been around much (since I broke my other elbow, yes, believe it). So it was fun to log on and find this sweet little gem. Whoever you wrote it for will recognize it. Nice job with the transition. Marcia
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Hello my long lost friend :) I got a real kick out of this form, but it feels bio to me - but what do I know :) I haven't been around much (since I broke my other elbow, yes, believe it). So it was fun to log on and find this sweet little gem. Whoever you wrote it for will recognize it. Nice job with the transition. Marcia
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Haha, they WON'T if they don't read it...then again, I'm denying its a bio...LOL
Thanks for the sterling review...now WTF? You broke your OTHER elbow...NO!!!! You've broke your ass bone, your frickin elbows...both now...please don't break anything else.
I've had a bunch of stuff thats snowed me under so barely time to post and review...trying to catch up on chapters in bulk...it keeps me closer in tune with story...I'll go for a dig through yours now...I am itchin to know whats a happenin with Summer and Chasey baby...PROTECT that f**kin elbow Marci...PLEASE?
Hope you feeling better soon.
Cheers Phillippa xoxoxo
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Aw, bless you. The elbow is much better, thanks. I've decided I have to pay more attention to trying to stay upright LOL. I know you're busy and you are so prolific. You can't tell me it isn't 'bio' :) It occurred to me it could be about BP? I know you two got quite clsoe. I hope the rift heals. Life is too short.
I'm well and hope you and the little ones are the same. Take care, Marcia
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Nope honey, its NOT about bp. But it IS a bio.
Smart lady.
xxx
Thankyou for your concern and yes the rift is healing with the one concerned.
Cheers Phillippa xo
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there pretty Lady
Friendships are the wonderful parts of life that are worth their weight in gold. I have lived all over the western hemisphere and find through it all, I can only count my true friendships on one hand. Nicely written
Bear
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Hey there pretty Lady
Friendships are the wonderful parts of life that are worth their weight in gold. I have lived all over the western hemisphere and find through it all, I can only count my true friendships on one hand. Nicely written
Bear
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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I have only a handful too Bear, I know exactly what you mean.
I am a loyal friend so it takes a fair bit to rattle me. However stress can be a bitch and I do tend to be all or nothing...I can't change that. Thanks for your support.
Cheers Phillippa xo
PS I read one of yours today and meant to go back and review it. I didn't have the chance at the time but I go do in a minute. Sounds like you need a little support too...we all need to bare our soul now and then...readers are helpful to affirm its the right thing to let it out.
Comment from nancyjam
Well crafted variation of a Sonnet. Excellent rhyme and meter
and heartfelt expression of regret at the loss of a friend.
I love the final couplet emphasizing the extent of your
regret.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Well crafted variation of a Sonnet. Excellent rhyme and meter
and heartfelt expression of regret at the loss of a friend.
I love the final couplet emphasizing the extent of your
regret.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Thanks so much Nancy, I appreciate your thoughtful words in review.
Closet xo
Comment from Hitcher
Bloody-Hell woman I'm just learning the complexities of the basic sonnet and here you are throwing an Earlette into the mix...Cheers! :) It is impressive, bio or not, it is emotional charged, and who amongst us hasn't walked in similar shoes at some point in our lives, friendships like a marriage[without the sex], they need looking after and a lot of attention if you want to keep them.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Bloody-Hell woman I'm just learning the complexities of the basic sonnet and here you are throwing an Earlette into the mix...Cheers! :) It is impressive, bio or not, it is emotional charged, and who amongst us hasn't walked in similar shoes at some point in our lives, friendships like a marriage[without the sex], they need looking after and a lot of attention if you want to keep them.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Thanks for your support Hitch...its ONLY a basic Sonnet with an extra stanza for a little further elaboration...I got all acrobatic with the reverse volta...but I am convinced you'd nail one of these...your rhyme and meter and depth is choice. You sure summed it up good, mate. A bit like a garden I reckon too...water it and tend to it with lots of attention and you have yourself a flourishing petalled paradise. Forget the water and nutrients and its all down the shitter tube. Dead as a f**king dodo. I'm a shit gardener to be honest. But I AM a verrrrry loyal friend who KNOWS when to say she has been a complete sh*thead and is wrong. A short wick don't help neither though. *hanging head* It makes for some humbling apologies now and again, NOW being the operative word. Thanks again. You are a very thoughtful reviewer. Can I keep you? LOL
Cheers C
xo
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I'm not going anywhere for now friend, but I do drift on and off the site,work,family. Young Jada is my kick-ass buddy on site, and she helps to keep me motivated and coming back for more, she's just challenged me two write 10 quatrains of sensual fire, yea! she's bad... I'll have to see what I can do about that one, the challenge... :) Nice getting to know you C
OH! c===8, I was thinking... Get down on your knees and pray-YEA! NICE,
You are as mad as f/n me, we are so lucky to have found each other, ha ha. Now enjoy what is left of your weekend...
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Haha...nice to know have a life (I got two little ones and a big one to look after)... Also good to know you already got some kick ass ladies on your side...I am sure you will rise well to the challenge laid out before you. I shall look out for the Erotica-train! LOL
Chow for now
xo
PS...Luck? What you mean luck?
I hunted you down! LOL
Kidding.
Stay mad...that's just how I like ya.
Comment from Doc Holiday
First of all, I like your Earlette style poem.
Secondly, I don't care if it is a bio or not; it's still emotionally driven.
I think the verse is well-written and the extra two lines provide not only closure, but an editiorial opinion that strengthens the piece.
Nice work!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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First of all, I like your Earlette style poem.
Secondly, I don't care if it is a bio or not; it's still emotionally driven.
I think the verse is well-written and the extra two lines provide not only closure, but an editiorial opinion that strengthens the piece.
Nice work!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Thanks for not caring either way..sometimes its just nice to write it. When I don't put anything in my notes...they think its a bio...when I say its NOT a bio, they think its a bio...when I say it IS a bio...well, its a bio right?
See? Screwed whatever I do...I don't have closure, I just have an open wound...if I get a response - I'll know whether I have a chance to mend or infact whether I will be getting around with a gaping hole in a very special friendship. A short wick is a buggar at times. (I meant a temper...LOL...somehow that didn't sound right on the back of my last post)
Thanks for your thoughtful review Doc...most appreicated.
Phillippa xo
Comment from Connie C
I like this format invented by Earl because that extra stanza allows you more words to expand in your message. And what a message this is! Sounds like you are feeling responsible for a break in a friendship and that you realize now the importance of that friendship and hope to reconcile. Given that interpretation, based on what I think I'm reading here, the last two lines are especially touching. If this were to be biographical, I would hope that the friendship is mended now, Sweetie. If it's not biographical, then you've done an excellent job through your language and rhyme, of expressing the sorrow that comes with the loss of a good friend. And about that fourth stanza, I like how it appears to reverse the third stanza. This is a sad one, not your usual fare, these days; so perhaps you'll soon be back into some humorous and/or naughty poetry. Of course, I love everything you post. Sorry I've no sixes left.
Connie xoxoxo
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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I like this format invented by Earl because that extra stanza allows you more words to expand in your message. And what a message this is! Sounds like you are feeling responsible for a break in a friendship and that you realize now the importance of that friendship and hope to reconcile. Given that interpretation, based on what I think I'm reading here, the last two lines are especially touching. If this were to be biographical, I would hope that the friendship is mended now, Sweetie. If it's not biographical, then you've done an excellent job through your language and rhyme, of expressing the sorrow that comes with the loss of a good friend. And about that fourth stanza, I like how it appears to reverse the third stanza. This is a sad one, not your usual fare, these days; so perhaps you'll soon be back into some humorous and/or naughty poetry. Of course, I love everything you post. Sorry I've no sixes left.
Connie xoxoxo
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Hey Connnie, thanks so much and yes I totally agree.
I needed to say a bit more in this one and hope to mend this bridge which didn't really break in the first place...Long story. Suffice to say sometimes we regret things we do and say.
Thanks for the thought of a sixer but your review is da bomb.
Cheers and thanks a bunch.
Hope you are enjoying your weekend.
Phillippa xoxoxo
Comment from steevie
Okay, listen up her, girl! Is this a bio or is it not? I only asked because you mentioned in your bio that you are happily married MOST of the time, so this believes me to think that this is actually autobiographical in nature.
Now for the review, I really like your poem. It starts out great, as does most relationships and then hits rough roads, which they all do, and then its turned around because, surprise, surprise, the guy does the, "I'm so sorrry", thing ... LOL. Then all is well as the fairy tale ends.
How's that for a review?
have a good one, my friend
steve
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Okay, listen up her, girl! Is this a bio or is it not? I only asked because you mentioned in your bio that you are happily married MOST of the time, so this believes me to think that this is actually autobiographical in nature.
Now for the review, I really like your poem. It starts out great, as does most relationships and then hits rough roads, which they all do, and then its turned around because, surprise, surprise, the guy does the, "I'm so sorrry", thing ... LOL. Then all is well as the fairy tale ends.
How's that for a review?
have a good one, my friend
steve
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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In answer to your question: YOU get to decide. I seem to be screwed whatever I write...if I say NO bio, they think its a bio...if I say Its a bio, then its a bio...if I leave authors notes blank...oh its a bloody bio alright. I can't win.
Now for your response...its a great one and pretty close...just a very good friendship that lost its way due to a few obstacles. However I wish to overcome them and am asking for a second chance to do so...
Of course its NOT a bio...LOL
Thanks for your intuitive review Steve...most appreciated.
Closet xo
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you are so very welcome, that its not even funny ... :0)
steve
Comment from Gypsymooncat
Well, I kinda like this Earlette thingy; typical of our friend Sir Ox! But yknow, when I got the last line, I thought you wrote "...I'd surely sTink" laughed a lot and thought: love that tongue in cheek this girl writes. Then read it again and realised it was sink ... (and that was with specs on!!) That said, this was another excellent piece from you, but whoever this friend is who's left must be pretty GREAT, coz I can't see how you'd "stink" without her influence; you do fine all by yourself :) Fine job my friend! Cheers xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Well, I kinda like this Earlette thingy; typical of our friend Sir Ox! But yknow, when I got the last line, I thought you wrote "...I'd surely sTink" laughed a lot and thought: love that tongue in cheek this girl writes. Then read it again and realised it was sink ... (and that was with specs on!!) That said, this was another excellent piece from you, but whoever this friend is who's left must be pretty GREAT, coz I can't see how you'd "stink" without her influence; you do fine all by yourself :) Fine job my friend! Cheers xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Haha stink? Yeah I prolly stink too! LOL
Its okay Chris, I have done that before and then gone back on a re read and swore they musta changed a line...not to worry.
I thank you for your delightful review and appreciate muchly.
Cheers Closet xoxo
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... or sink ... hahaha
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Doesn't matter bio or not it's an easy emotion and state of affairs that most can relate to, unfortunately.
Exceptional execution of thiss sonnet about a modern day tagedy.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Doesn't matter bio or not it's an easy emotion and state of affairs that most can relate to, unfortunately.
Exceptional execution of thiss sonnet about a modern day tagedy.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Yes indeed it is...someone actually thought it was about writing and do you know on a second read, it actually could have that intepretation too...and I have had to neglect the writing lately so it seems to have a bit of a dual reference without me even realising it. Thankyou for your exceptional review.
Cheers Phillippa xo
Comment from strandregs
This so cool a drizzle on a hot day ,me thinks you are writing about me :) although we havn't drunken from the same mug yet.
On a serious note: I can't , I can't, you tickle my crazy creativity,or others will say insane streek
After second read I decided it is clear and beautiful.
To interfere and make us bend and sway
bend and sway sounds too nice, not quite fits with the context , how about:
But something would obstruct our carefree road
to squander faith and make us loose our way
best wishes.Z.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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This so cool a drizzle on a hot day ,me thinks you are writing about me :) although we havn't drunken from the same mug yet.
On a serious note: I can't , I can't, you tickle my crazy creativity,or others will say insane streek
After second read I decided it is clear and beautiful.
To interfere and make us bend and sway
bend and sway sounds too nice, not quite fits with the context , how about:
But something would obstruct our carefree road
to squander faith and make us loose our way
best wishes.Z.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Awww thankyou Z...don't worry though, I'll be dropping in for milk and sugar soon. LOL
Clear and beautiful - wow, thats all I could hope for...thankyou.
I do agree about that line and I shall go take a look...I appreciate your input.
Cheers Closet xo