The Glass Cat Eye
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Midnight Seance"Talking to the dead has its consequences
25 total reviews
Comment from MS Writer
Great beginning. YOu've captured my interest. I want to read more and find out what happens. Good flow and interesting characters that are developing well. Anxious to read more.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2011
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Great beginning. YOu've captured my interest. I want to read more and find out what happens. Good flow and interesting characters that are developing well. Anxious to read more.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2011
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Thank you MS Writer. This is my first short; needed to know if I was any good at it before completing it. Thank you; I'm encouraged.
Comment from Laurie Clayton
This is a good start to a potentially excellent read.
Good narration helping to build the characters nicely as the story progresses.
Looking forward to the next installment.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2011
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This is a good start to a potentially excellent read.
Good narration helping to build the characters nicely as the story progresses.
Looking forward to the next installment.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2011
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Wow. Thank you Laurie. I'm having a little trouble finding the right time to write. I've just moved to a new place. I hope you'll enjoy the next installment.
Comment from joannesnow
Well written. Easily interpreted. Your use of narration and dialogue bring your characters to life. You have presented some extremely deep material and this is an interesting and provocative story.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2011
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Well written. Easily interpreted. Your use of narration and dialogue bring your characters to life. You have presented some extremely deep material and this is an interesting and provocative story.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2011
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Thank you so much joannesnow. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Now if I can only finish it. lol
Comment from marcii
This is an interesting story.
I found I really liked a lot of your descriptions like when Dr Connelly repeatedly squeezed the bridge of his knows.
It understandable for one to not believe what might be going on.
Marcii
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2011
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This is an interesting story.
I found I really liked a lot of your descriptions like when Dr Connelly repeatedly squeezed the bridge of his knows.
It understandable for one to not believe what might be going on.
Marcii
Comment Written 10-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2011
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Thank you marcii. He squeezed the bridge of his nose because he was tired.
Comment from marcellawachtel
Well This is a good beginning, please get the rest of it written soon! Your descriptive passages are excellent, and characterizations are good, too.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2011
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Well This is a good beginning, please get the rest of it written soon! Your descriptive passages are excellent, and characterizations are good, too.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2011
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Thank you marcellawachtel. I'm working on it now.
Comment from wiskas677@yandex.ru
This is spooky and imaginatively written. I like your premise. There were a couple of spelling errors and run-ons
we've (known) each other...
(,)washed her hair
(wound) up scared (sp) (understanding)
These are minor corrections that will help the story read better
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2011
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This is spooky and imaginatively written. I like your premise. There were a couple of spelling errors and run-ons
we've (known) each other...
(,)washed her hair
(wound) up scared (sp) (understanding)
These are minor corrections that will help the story read better
Comment Written 10-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2011
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Thank you. Will correct.
Comment from The Stranger
well I am not very well educated on these sceances, personally I think they are all stage produced, Mrs Keller, now then, a seriial husband killer perhaps?
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2011
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well I am not very well educated on these sceances, personally I think they are all stage produced, Mrs Keller, now then, a seriial husband killer perhaps?
Comment Written 09-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2011
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lol I never thought of that Stranger. Thanks
Comment from c_lucas
For something to be fraudalent, there must be at least a little truth in it. The paranormal exists on a different plane than the physical world. It is not as dramatic as some people want you to believe. This is very well written.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2011
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For something to be fraudalent, there must be at least a little truth in it. The paranormal exists on a different plane than the physical world. It is not as dramatic as some people want you to believe. This is very well written.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2011
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Thank you c_lucas.
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You're welcome, Amahra. Charlie
Comment from markk
A very well written and enjoyable piece. thanks so much for sharing. I found the writing intense and enjoyable and the story facinating. well done.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2011
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A very well written and enjoyable piece. thanks so much for sharing. I found the writing intense and enjoyable and the story facinating. well done.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2011
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Thank you Markk.
Comment from Rose Hearth
I see the potential for a good story here. A few suggestions for your next installment.
1. First and foremost.....spellcheck. I noticed several errors.
2. If you're not sure of a word's definition, either look it up or don't use it. Forte is a very nice word, however it means "a strength" and you used it to mean "a preference."
3. Unless in quotations, grammar counts. He "pled" it out, not "pleaded."
4. Speaking of quotations, a new paragraph should be started with each added line of dialogue. For example, the conversation between Dr. C and his colleague.
5. Last, but not least...never underestimate the benefits of proofreading. It will help to catch such errors as maintaining tense and general flow.
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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2011
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I see the potential for a good story here. A few suggestions for your next installment.
1. First and foremost.....spellcheck. I noticed several errors.
2. If you're not sure of a word's definition, either look it up or don't use it. Forte is a very nice word, however it means "a strength" and you used it to mean "a preference."
3. Unless in quotations, grammar counts. He "pled" it out, not "pleaded."
4. Speaking of quotations, a new paragraph should be started with each added line of dialogue. For example, the conversation between Dr. C and his colleague.
5. Last, but not least...never underestimate the benefits of proofreading. It will help to catch such errors as maintaining tense and general flow.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2011
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Thanks.