Solace in My Quill
a pantoum33 total reviews
Comment from findingmyroom
Alvin, this one is just perfect. I love the use of the pantoum form here; it matches well the feeling of waves undulating. Just too many kudos to list.
reply by the author on 27-May-2010
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Alvin, this one is just perfect. I love the use of the pantoum form here; it matches well the feeling of waves undulating. Just too many kudos to list.
Comment Written 27-May-2010
reply by the author on 27-May-2010
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Thank you for the exceptional rating. I am quite touched emotionally.
Comment from Deejharrington
People actually do that, without a picture. How childish. The best of luck in the contest. I found myself shaking my head in agreement with every stanza. Writing has been my hiding place, my saving grace, my joy for many years. You did a wonderful job of espressing just that.
dj
reply by the author on 27-May-2010
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People actually do that, without a picture. How childish. The best of luck in the contest. I found myself shaking my head in agreement with every stanza. Writing has been my hiding place, my saving grace, my joy for many years. You did a wonderful job of espressing just that.
dj
Comment Written 27-May-2010
reply by the author on 27-May-2010
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Thank you for such a good review; I truly appreciate it.
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you're welcome
deb
Comment from samandlancelot
Someone would reduce your rating because you don't have a picture? That seems absurd. I like pairing unique pictures with my writings, but that's a personal preference.
This poetry format worked well with your escape mechanism in the form of writing. The repeated lines gave strength to your successful journey to a secure place in your mind.
Patricia
reply by the author on 27-May-2010
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Someone would reduce your rating because you don't have a picture? That seems absurd. I like pairing unique pictures with my writings, but that's a personal preference.
This poetry format worked well with your escape mechanism in the form of writing. The repeated lines gave strength to your successful journey to a secure place in your mind.
Patricia
Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 27-May-2010
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Thank you for a good review. It seems as if the picture crisis is over, but still all the entries on the main page have pictures attached to them.
Comment from Brad Sterling
Solace in My Quill - great title - yes, thoughts portrayed on paper can give peace of mind - a lovely piece of flowing verse - the simplicity of deceptive ease is so effective - a true mark of real skill - so many beautiful, descriptive phrases delivered to form a powerful rhyming story - difficult poetic structure well carried out - congratulations and worthy of full six stars - more power to your pen..Brad.
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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Solace in My Quill - great title - yes, thoughts portrayed on paper can give peace of mind - a lovely piece of flowing verse - the simplicity of deceptive ease is so effective - a true mark of real skill - so many beautiful, descriptive phrases delivered to form a powerful rhyming story - difficult poetic structure well carried out - congratulations and worthy of full six stars - more power to your pen..Brad.
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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Thank you for such a fine review. I am honored.
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Stars deservedly awarded...Brad.
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You are very kind.
Comment from RebelRose
Even though I am not all that familiar with the Quatrain, this looks like a fine example. Your rhyming scheme is right on target.
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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Even though I am not all that familiar with the Quatrain, this looks like a fine example. Your rhyming scheme is right on target.
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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Thank you for a good review.
Comment from Gooloom
What better way to lessen your sorrow than to write it down in pen and ink? Alvin, technically you have written a Quatrain and written it very well too. But what I have really admired is your profound thought and depth of feeling, in your poignant words "ocean (sorrow) tossed and turned on me, only sadness I could see, then I found you set me free." Writing about your sorrow you found "solace in my Quill." Very well said indeed! The words flow easily from your pen and one likes to read it again and again. I enjoyed reading your poem. It touched my heart and made me shed some tears as well. Lovely.
Gooloo Mehta
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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What better way to lessen your sorrow than to write it down in pen and ink? Alvin, technically you have written a Quatrain and written it very well too. But what I have really admired is your profound thought and depth of feeling, in your poignant words "ocean (sorrow) tossed and turned on me, only sadness I could see, then I found you set me free." Writing about your sorrow you found "solace in my Quill." Very well said indeed! The words flow easily from your pen and one likes to read it again and again. I enjoyed reading your poem. It touched my heart and made me shed some tears as well. Lovely.
Gooloo Mehta
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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If you feel like reading it over again, I feel I have done well as a writer. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from adewpearl
That is ludicrous if there is someone downgrading people based on illustrations. I had someone do that once over a year ago, and yes, it is terribly frustrating.
Alvin, the pantoum is a beautiful form but not all that easy to compose well, so I applaud your lovely composition with excellent iambic tetrameter, strong rhyme and excellent structure with the repeating lines. You've gone above and beyond the call of duty for the quatrain contest and such a thoughtful poem, too :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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That is ludicrous if there is someone downgrading people based on illustrations. I had someone do that once over a year ago, and yes, it is terribly frustrating.
Alvin, the pantoum is a beautiful form but not all that easy to compose well, so I applaud your lovely composition with excellent iambic tetrameter, strong rhyme and excellent structure with the repeating lines. You've gone above and beyond the call of duty for the quatrain contest and such a thoughtful poem, too :-) Brooke
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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Thanks. Yes, now sometimes on the home page, pictures are added. I am not fond of that custom. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from chita
This poem is beautifully written and tells a story that I can identify with. Your flow was outstanding and dramatic. A very good read.
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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This poem is beautifully written and tells a story that I can identify with. Your flow was outstanding and dramatic. A very good read.
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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Thanks for such a great review.
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Thank you Alvin for such a good poem!!1
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You're welcome. Thank you for the compliment.
Comment from Krugerrand
Just loved this poem's structure. Often times repeating words makes it seem as if the poet couldn't think of anything else, but when done right, they feel like a whirlpool and pull the reader in. I didn't want this poem to end. And who in their right mind deducts for no artwork?!
Superb poem. Great turns of phrase, with such heartache expressed until a happy resolve.
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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Just loved this poem's structure. Often times repeating words makes it seem as if the poet couldn't think of anything else, but when done right, they feel like a whirlpool and pull the reader in. I didn't want this poem to end. And who in their right mind deducts for no artwork?!
Superb poem. Great turns of phrase, with such heartache expressed until a happy resolve.
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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Believe me, some do. I want this to have a liturgical quality and it seems I succeeded. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Vladilynn
(chuckling) Funny for your author's note, about the picture, geeeeezzhh is there folks here, do that!? My goodness! :0)
They supposed to rate the content, not the picture.lol
I like the repetition of the words that lays back again to build the next stanza. I've tried to write this form but I'm not good enough to follow the sequence.
The words flows well, to make the whole piece stands out of what you wanted to show. It's a wonderful piece to share, Alvin. Thank you.
Love much
Lynn:0)
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2010
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(chuckling) Funny for your author's note, about the picture, geeeeezzhh is there folks here, do that!? My goodness! :0)
They supposed to rate the content, not the picture.lol
I like the repetition of the words that lays back again to build the next stanza. I've tried to write this form but I'm not good enough to follow the sequence.
The words flows well, to make the whole piece stands out of what you wanted to show. It's a wonderful piece to share, Alvin. Thank you.
Love much
Lynn:0)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2010
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Yes, twice by two different people for two different poems I was docked a star for lack of a picture. I wrote Tom about it and he said the whole presentation was judged, but that the picture should be a minor part of that. If you notice now, all the poems on the front page have pictures attached, even mine that had none with which to begin (I don't have anything there now.)
Pantoums are very hard to write; it's difficult to have the repetition not sound tedious. Thanks for a great review.
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Ohhh, that's explained why those pictures out there, But I find it lame sometimes, cause it depends if the writer wants a picture or not, it's the writer's right.
Ohh..well, some people!(throwing hands out) lol
Good luck my friend, just ignore them!! :P
