Blind Trust
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Lowell House"A woman is stalked by a fan
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Comment from fictionwriter
I loved the dialouge in this chapter. Seeing how the alter egos were manipulate was great. A wonderful little chapter. Great job.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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I loved the dialouge in this chapter. Seeing how the alter egos were manipulate was great. A wonderful little chapter. Great job.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Ah, good to see you again, my friend. Glad you liked this one. It will be fun to get back to the action, but we have a stage to set! Won't be long!
Gayle
Comment from shelley kaye
Mira Mar <-- i've only seen miramar as one word - you may wanna check it out
other than that a great chapter
can't wait to see what happens next!
thanx for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Mira Mar <-- i've only seen miramar as one word - you may wanna check it out
other than that a great chapter
can't wait to see what happens next!
thanx for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Hi Shelley
Man, I'll have to check into that. Thanks for the heads up! Always great to hear from you, m'dear!
Hugs,
gayle
Comment from El.Marjie
Interesting picture of alter ego situation. Thanks for writing it and sharing. Just a couple suggestions below.
"Did you grow up by the beach,(;) surf and stuff?" I would choose a semicolon.
After highest bidder, need quotation mark; also after 'guess' in the last line.
Good luck in your writing. You're on the way! Best, Marjie
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Interesting picture of alter ego situation. Thanks for writing it and sharing. Just a couple suggestions below.
"Did you grow up by the beach,(;) surf and stuff?" I would choose a semicolon.
After highest bidder, need quotation mark; also after 'guess' in the last line.
Good luck in your writing. You're on the way! Best, Marjie
Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Hi Marjie,
So nice to see a new friend. Thank you for the fine R&R and your comments.
Gayle
Comment from nor84
The sound is thrilling, deafening(.) It's, like, almost >>>I'm hearing a period after 'deafening, not a slight pause.
Might be overusing that semicolon a tad in this chapter.
"Do you know what his(--) that frickin' bastard (--)did
Good job here, Gayle.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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The sound is thrilling, deafening(.) It's, like, almost >>>I'm hearing a period after 'deafening, not a slight pause.
Might be overusing that semicolon a tad in this chapter.
"Do you know what his(--) that frickin' bastard (--)did
Good job here, Gayle.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Hey Norma,
Do you like the dashes better? I can do that! Also, I must have rewritten that sentence a dozen times. End at deafening. Okay, I can hear that too. Sorry, about the ";s" every once in a while I get on a tear. If it's not !s, its ...s or ;! Oy. I'll fix. Big thanks and hugs,
Gayle
Comment from patmedium
I know this is all necessary to the story... but I am sort of twitching to get back to the blind lass... Don't listen... NO hints! I am sitting here, reading, but I feel I'm marking time until we return to the main characters that interest ME... then I feel doubtful whether they'll come back! It's beginning to feel as if this chap's illness and treatment is the ultimate aim of the whole book! (DON'T forget... NO HINTS, missus!) Pat.
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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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I know this is all necessary to the story... but I am sort of twitching to get back to the blind lass... Don't listen... NO hints! I am sitting here, reading, but I feel I'm marking time until we return to the main characters that interest ME... then I feel doubtful whether they'll come back! It's beginning to feel as if this chap's illness and treatment is the ultimate aim of the whole book! (DON'T forget... NO HINTS, missus!) Pat.
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Well, Pat, hang in there a bit. We're about to engage in the second half of the story. Thanks for the wonderful words, my friend. You make me smile.
Hugs,
Gayle
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I SAID NO...NO...NO HINTS! Pat.
Comment from jayesnb
Interesting look into Nathans psyche...The alter Michael seems to be the protector of sorts attempting to shield nathan from the abuse he suffered in the past... I like the alters pitted against Norman, from what i have read its usually like that were one is bad and destructful...This chapter was totally engrossing and you managed to progress it with ease...great job
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Interesting look into Nathans psyche...The alter Michael seems to be the protector of sorts attempting to shield nathan from the abuse he suffered in the past... I like the alters pitted against Norman, from what i have read its usually like that were one is bad and destructful...This chapter was totally engrossing and you managed to progress it with ease...great job
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Thanks a bunch, Jay. I so appreciate your comments and your great review.
Gayle