Comment from Readywriter52

Excellent

Nathan/Norman has been arrested. He doesn't remember what Norman has done. He does know he stopped taking his meds. I don't know if Marsha Scanlon, his public defender, believes him. I hope she can get help for Nathan before Norman does something stupid.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010

Hi Ready,

Glad you liked this one, my friend. I appreciate your comments.

Gayle

Comment from RenieReader

Excellent

You've done your homework, Gayle. This is fascinating stuff here. That's a long time for a DID/MPD to go without an episode. I can't wait to find out more about Nathan and his attorney, Marsha Scanlon.

I admire her work tremendously especially since she'[d==>s] blind ...

Hugs,
Renie

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010

Hey Renie,

Poor Nathan. He's in a fog half the time and doesn't know which end is up. I think we're going to find he's got another couple of friends lurking about.

Thanks for the great comments and I got that "D" outta there!

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from nhorlandi

Excellent

Congratulations, a thousand applause for you. I find no violation of language rules here. I observed every line especially the dialogues, they're believable, there's reality, I would say it's perfect. I wish I have read the story from the beginning. Thanks and keep the good work.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010

Hello to a new friend! So nice to meet you. I'm thrilled you liked my story and hope you'll come back again!

Gayle

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

i don't think i like marsha lol :-P

short chapter but good :)

didn't notice any spaggies or typos - except....

I admire her work tremendously especially since she'd blind ... bought several pieces over the years.

read it three times and i was still - like - huh? :-P
then again it could be just me LOL

other than that a great transition chapter
i'll be waiting....

shelley :)

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010

That should be 'she's' Shelley. I fixed, and thanks for the eagle eye. This is actually half a chapter. The next one should be out this afternoon.

Segue, It's beautiful here today and the mountains are covered with snow. Not just the usual light dusting, but real snow! Snowball fights snow! Wow!

What's it like down your way?

Thanks again,

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Korton

Excellent

Another excellent chapter, Gayle. Well, it looks like Norman/Nathan is going to skate this time, but I seriously doubt that he will give up. At least they know who to look out for. Very well done.

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 Comment Written 22-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010

Thanks Frank! I appreciate your input. Yeah, I don't think this is over by a long shot. Besides, Kip is suffering from "bitus interruptus" and we can't have a frustrated Dobie on our hands, lol.

Thanks for the great review!

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from jayesnb

Excellent

"Do you ever have any warning before another alter is about to take over your body?"

'I can't believe I'm having this conversation. Take over your body?'
these lines came aack to back..didnt quite understand..

I admire her work tremendously especially since (she'd) blind ... bought several pieces over the years... think you meant she's

Well now is where things begin to get interesting... I like the skeptical public defender..the conversation between them seems to play out well...I cant help but wonder how this is going to be resolved..Great job.. You left me hanging again..

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 Comment Written 22-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010

Hi Jaye,

I know that's confusing. I cannot use, although I know how, the advanced editor here on FS so I can't use italics. What it is, is, she's asking him a question about something she doesn't believe in. Ah, I hate EE with a passion!

Thanks for the great review and this is actually the first half of a chapter, so the other half will be out this afternoon.

Thanks and all the best,
Gayle