Comment from ZigzagMLT

Excellent

Wow. Well done. I was waiting to see when they would notice the blood and injuries on Kip... it seems to have taken a while, though it works for the plot...

A couple of things: Kip's low-pitched howls

choosing to leaver her cell, ...

Kip continued to talk at him...

in the guy's coffin

ready to be driven home?

or he was ready to drive home another nail in this guy's coffin


Thanks!

Zigzagmlt

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010

Hi Zig,

Thanks for stopping by and the fine R&R. I'll check out your ideas.

Thanks
Gayle

Comment from patmedium

Excellent

WOW!!! WOW!!! I am now breathless with the speed you've accelerated to! What a zzzzziiiiiippppp! Keep it up, up, up! More please!
Gayle, I am on the edge of my seat, holding my breath so often, smiling and frowning in all the right places. Pat.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010

LOL, Pat, you just tickle me! So you liked that one, huh? Well, we're on a sustained ride with few breaks until the end. Buckle up, and big thanks,

Gayle

Comment from Readywriter52

Excellent

Cathy has disappeared. Rudy and the dogs are upset. It's too bad the dogs can't talk, but Rudy did see the injury on Kip. They also suspect Nathan. I hope they catch him before he disappears at sea.

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010

Hi Ready,

We're on the trail now. Let's hope Rudy catches up to them soon.

Thanks,
Gayle

Comment from joelh605

Excellent

Didn't the condo manager think it odd that Nathan Stanley's original address was so close by? - or, no, she only had his license plate.

It nags at the reader that the passage between the two units, which Norman worked so hard to construct, isn't being admired. ;-)

Joel
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Kim continued to talk at him; the range and tenor of her sounds

Typo, Kip

"A man called Nathan Stanley. He leased it several weeks back. He's a paparazzi,

You used "[he's] paparazzi" in an earlier post, but the singular is paparazzo; the condo manager might be expected to know that.

"Hold the elevator until I get the door open. I don't want any surprises." Jim bent over with his packet of locks
Not "lock picks?

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010

Hey Joel,

Well, Norman explained that away when he first met Desiree. He'd been hired to do some photo shoot of the ocean. That's how he explained he only wanted a penthouse unit, for the view.

LOL, yes, lock PICKS! Duh! I'll also change paparazzo! Thanks for the eagle eyes.

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from jayesnb

Excellent

Great job with this chapter..

This story is really starting to get intense now.. The pace seemed to be in high gear..

I kept hoping they would catch up with him but they were a step behind... Poor Rudy.. cant wait fo the next chapter.......

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010

Thank you so much, Jay, I always appreciate your comments and review. I think it's gonna get worse before it gets better!

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Korton

Excellent

It just gets better and better. So Nathan did present himself to Desiree as Nathan and not as Norman. Not a smart move. Undoubtedly they will find something in his condo that will indicate the charter. He wouldn't have any reason to try and cover up things there. Very well done.

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 Comment Written 14-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010

Hey Frank,

Well, he had no choice. Had to present his ID, including a working checking account, lol. Now, he also had to give his other address so he knows it's just a matter of time before they get to his alternative address, but he has no idea how fast his plans are crumbling. It's gonna be a squeaker, for sure!

Thanks for the great comments and your review,

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Xuders

Excellent

Good for Rudy. I like his (and his companions') trusting the dogs and getting them involved--animals are so much smarter than we are!

This continues to be a fun read.

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 Comment Written 14-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010

Hi Redux,

You might have missed early chapters, but the guys are Private Investigators. They train the dogs for their work as well as a variety of security jobs including military work. If you get a chance, go back and read the early chapters. The bucks are gone, so you don't need to leave a review, but it'll bring you up to speed on who everyone is.

Thanks so much!
Gayle