I'm Not the Woman (EEE's version)
A little self-introspection39 total reviews
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Hi Rdfrdmom2,
I think you might well be your own person!
I wonder as your poem suggests, does any other person really know us totally?
I like this poem. There is great depth and a little sadness about it too.
Kindest regards,
Juliette Chamberlain
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Hi Rdfrdmom2,
I think you might well be your own person!
I wonder as your poem suggests, does any other person really know us totally?
I like this poem. There is great depth and a little sadness about it too.
Kindest regards,
Juliette Chamberlain
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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thanks, Juliette. I've been accused of being my own person a time or two in my life. love, jan
Comment from Myspal
Admittedly i was going to give a bit of a lower rating due to the misplaced notes and layout. However, I too have had trouble with the editor and know first hand how it can muddy one's work when not fitted appropriately. That said, the piece was well written and interesting! Thanks for the contribution!
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2008
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Admittedly i was going to give a bit of a lower rating due to the misplaced notes and layout. However, I too have had trouble with the editor and know first hand how it can muddy one's work when not fitted appropriately. That said, the piece was well written and interesting! Thanks for the contribution!
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2008
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thank you, Myspal. EEE has just about driven me nuts on this one. jan
Comment from joan marie
First of all I read all of Wiva Red Birds work. She was correct. Been there. Not the place God intended woman to be and I loved the acrostic in the middle. I wish I had a six. joan marie
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2008
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First of all I read all of Wiva Red Birds work. She was correct. Been there. Not the place God intended woman to be and I loved the acrostic in the middle. I wish I had a six. joan marie
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2008
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thanks, Joan Marie. The thought is just as good as the six. love, jan
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It was great writing. jm
Comment from mamre07
I had to pause a few times to digfest all this infomration. It is a great poem with many thought-provoking lines. We need to just live our lives and not worry too much about the opinions of others.
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I had to pause a few times to digfest all this infomration. It is a great poem with many thought-provoking lines. We need to just live our lives and not worry too much about the opinions of others.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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I think you are right. love, jan
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
See, now aren't you glad you posted it? Anyways, it's not what you had written on the paper you showed me but this turned out very, very well.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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See, now aren't you glad you posted it? Anyways, it's not what you had written on the paper you showed me but this turned out very, very well.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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thanks, again. love, jan
Comment from easyeverett
This was a powerful and revealing read Rdfrdmom2 and
I can feel all the sharp edges in every line. A unique
presentation which I admire in poets. Well scripted and
well crafted. Emotional. Very, very good write. easy
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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This was a powerful and revealing read Rdfrdmom2 and
I can feel all the sharp edges in every line. A unique
presentation which I admire in poets. Well scripted and
well crafted. Emotional. Very, very good write. easy
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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high praise from one of my favorite poets. thanks, easy. love, jan
Comment from shimmeringlights
Interesting style, great content...I'm glad for you that you're not the women you used to be and I hope you are now the woman that you want to be. Don't worry so much about the layout, it reads just fine the way it is.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Interesting style, great content...I'm glad for you that you're not the women you used to be and I hope you are now the woman that you want to be. Don't worry so much about the layout, it reads just fine the way it is.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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thanks, shimmeringlights. I'm a work in progress and I believe that's the way it's supposed to be. love, jan
Comment from Roisin
Well this is something different. You've worded a brilliant poem with lots of deep thoughts. I don't know whether you're pulling from your own experiences or not but either ways, it shows a very sad, bleak side of life. Your presentation is beautiful and very original. I really enjoyed it.
Warm regards.
Roisin
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Well this is something different. You've worded a brilliant poem with lots of deep thoughts. I don't know whether you're pulling from your own experiences or not but either ways, it shows a very sad, bleak side of life. Your presentation is beautiful and very original. I really enjoyed it.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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yes, this is pulled from my life. thank you for this wonderful review. love, jan
Comment from WRITER1
Well Written, clear in purpose. An interesting look at life from the point of a mothers view. Although sad to some degree. Wishing you a very good New Year!
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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Well Written, clear in purpose. An interesting look at life from the point of a mothers view. Although sad to some degree. Wishing you a very good New Year!
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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thanks, WRITER1. love, jan
Comment from EllenV
The entire poem is magnificent, but the following lines especially jumped out at me:
I?m not the woman you thought I?d be
back when you were abusing me
even though I knew your identity
friend?s father
you said I?d just be white trash
Writer
Helper
Intuitive Trainer
Expressive
Teacher
Redeemed
Assistant Superintendent
Specialist
Honest
A great definition for white trash, turning it into a compliment rather than a horrendous insult.
A very meaningful read.
ellen
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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The entire poem is magnificent, but the following lines especially jumped out at me:
I?m not the woman you thought I?d be
back when you were abusing me
even though I knew your identity
friend?s father
you said I?d just be white trash
Writer
Helper
Intuitive Trainer
Expressive
Teacher
Redeemed
Assistant Superintendent
Specialist
Honest
A great definition for white trash, turning it into a compliment rather than a horrendous insult.
A very meaningful read.
ellen
Comment Written 30-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2008
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thanks, EllenV. love, jan