Renewal
Free Verse; As the New Year dawns. . .116 total reviews
Comment from G-mom
Ingenous. You covered it all. I could put music behind this poem and sing it. It has such a lilt to it and one that brings a smile to my face. Very nicely done I think.
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Ingenous. You covered it all. I could put music behind this poem and sing it. It has such a lilt to it and one that brings a smile to my face. Very nicely done I think.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from Magpiemazy.
Your mixture of hope and hope lost made this reader really stop and look back over the past year. Maybe the trip through memories will clear the path for a happier new year.
Thank you,
Maggie
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Your mixture of hope and hope lost made this reader really stop and look back over the past year. Maybe the trip through memories will clear the path for a happier new year.
Thank you,
Maggie
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from Lead Scout
Greatly written with a wide variety of subject. The imagery is clear and this piece is very colorful. I really love this poem. Very well done and good day.
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Greatly written with a wide variety of subject. The imagery is clear and this piece is very colorful. I really love this poem. Very well done and good day.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Very enjoyable and well written poem. Much emotion expressed and a fine uplifting ending to the piece, which starts out so depressing. Wish I had six to offer....well deserving! Hugs and smiles, Susanne
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Very enjoyable and well written poem. Much emotion expressed and a fine uplifting ending to the piece, which starts out so depressing. Wish I had six to offer....well deserving! Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from winnie
Hello my friend,
This is a wonderful piece of writing.
Full of wisdom and great thoughts.
Love the theme and content of this work.
Happy New Year to you and yours.
God Bless,
winnie xxx
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Hello my friend,
This is a wonderful piece of writing.
Full of wisdom and great thoughts.
Love the theme and content of this work.
Happy New Year to you and yours.
God Bless,
winnie xxx
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from authorauthor
this fits me to a tee...remorse and regret must two of the four terrible horsemen....I must live for this day only...sometimes I do great at it and other times I don't do so well...thanks for this
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this fits me to a tee...remorse and regret must two of the four terrible horsemen....I must live for this day only...sometimes I do great at it and other times I don't do so well...thanks for this
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from Lokman
Wow.
What a powerful poem so full of what we do need to do in the New Year, what we should have done all along. Eloquently stated and simply beautiful.
Lokman
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Wow.
What a powerful poem so full of what we do need to do in the New Year, what we should have done all along. Eloquently stated and simply beautiful.
Lokman
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from hwbw
You have some wonderful lines here.
"Pulsating at the edge of memory."
What a great view of New Year's approach. Places it where it is and what it's about to be. Places it in the future and past at the same time. Love it.
"The past surreptitiously makes its presence known:
Taunting
Threatening
Terrorizing"
Great description of our fears that we often carry into the future, Can you blame us? Have we not learned from the past? Yet, your poem warns us.
Do we hear? Did we hear before?
Ahh, but the poet reveals herself. She is like us all.
"Will not find me a
Fool... once again..
Very nicely written.
Just a simple question. Should it not read, "as sparkling, newly fallen silent snow" rather than 'of'' ?
I seem to read it, as The snow modifying the New Year Breaking as it falls on a pristine landscape ready to be written on by time. Am I missing to point or am I changing your meaning?
Just wondering.
No matter what, It's well written.
If I had 6 stars one world be yours.
Always Bill
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You have some wonderful lines here.
"Pulsating at the edge of memory."
What a great view of New Year's approach. Places it where it is and what it's about to be. Places it in the future and past at the same time. Love it.
"The past surreptitiously makes its presence known:
Taunting
Threatening
Terrorizing"
Great description of our fears that we often carry into the future, Can you blame us? Have we not learned from the past? Yet, your poem warns us.
Do we hear? Did we hear before?
Ahh, but the poet reveals herself. She is like us all.
"Will not find me a
Fool... once again..
Very nicely written.
Just a simple question. Should it not read, "as sparkling, newly fallen silent snow" rather than 'of'' ?
I seem to read it, as The snow modifying the New Year Breaking as it falls on a pristine landscape ready to be written on by time. Am I missing to point or am I changing your meaning?
Just wondering.
No matter what, It's well written.
If I had 6 stars one world be yours.
Always Bill
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from S.T.A
Just wonderful! I'm going to send this one to my best friend who, at 4 a.m. New Years Day, lost her precious baby girl..."Maggie". Ten years old and dearly beloved....
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2008
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Just wonderful! I'm going to send this one to my best friend who, at 4 a.m. New Years Day, lost her precious baby girl..."Maggie". Ten years old and dearly beloved....
Comment Written 09-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2008
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Oh my goodness Thank you so much for your moving and heartffelt review. And know that your friend is in my thoughts and prayers...diane
Comment from lerkun
hello mrs kt, hope your new year went well, A good piece here with many thoughts displayed. I missed the imagery I've become accustomed to when reading poetry and found without it this piece sounded a little 'preachy' mo
have a gr8 '08
lerk
past surreptitiously < reverse and -ly maybe.. I found this a little jarring and thought it may read better reversing those two words and removing the 'ly'...a good thing.. no?
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2008
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hello mrs kt, hope your new year went well, A good piece here with many thoughts displayed. I missed the imagery I've become accustomed to when reading poetry and found without it this piece sounded a little 'preachy' mo
have a gr8 '08
lerk
past surreptitiously < reverse and -ly maybe.. I found this a little jarring and thought it may read better reversing those two words and removing the 'ly'...a good thing.. no?
Comment Written 09-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2008
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Thanks for stopping by. I don't have any clue as to what your last comment means. Pleas elucidate, and Happy New Yearr to you as well...diane
P.S.
You missed the imagery?
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I have expanded my review , hope it makes more sense to you now..lerk