The Whispering Shadows
Haunted house, eerie whispers.12 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your story instantly draws me in with the eerie atmosphere you've created. The image of the "old house groaning with the weight of decades" is so perfect. It really sets the tone for what's to come. I especially like how you build suspense with the whispers and the book with just the word "Leave." The moment when Sam's lantern flickers out feels like the perfect ending! The tension is so well done - keep writing like this - you have a great talent for building suspense!
  |
Your story instantly draws me in with the eerie atmosphere you've created. The image of the "old house groaning with the weight of decades" is so perfect. It really sets the tone for what's to come. I especially like how you build suspense with the whispers and the book with just the word "Leave." The moment when Sam's lantern flickers out feels like the perfect ending! The tension is so well done - keep writing like this - you have a great talent for building suspense!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Elias,
Welcome to FanStory, my friend! You have an excellent first post you should be very proud of. Your setting is perfectly set, and description of the situation spot on. I love the eeriness of it, well presented.
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
|
Hi Elias,
Welcome to FanStory, my friend! You have an excellent first post you should be very proud of. Your setting is perfectly set, and description of the situation spot on. I love the eeriness of it, well presented.
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
