A Griever's Prayer
Emotion Poem43 total reviews
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Tom,
grief varies so much from loss-to-loss... and I have found unexpected levels of such an emotion with in each individual case.
Your poem hits upon the heaviness of the living... your rhyme and near rhyme hit ripe notes, just as the rhythm of which our lives take and what our journey and psyche is to experience.
It's a great image to paint the picture within the story of it... there sure seems to be a sad reflection in the loss of her Grandpa... I get that!
Well composed and presented. All the very best in this emotions poetry contest Tom.
With our thoughts we create...
the shaping of our memory.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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Hi Tom,
grief varies so much from loss-to-loss... and I have found unexpected levels of such an emotion with in each individual case.
Your poem hits upon the heaviness of the living... your rhyme and near rhyme hit ripe notes, just as the rhythm of which our lives take and what our journey and psyche is to experience.
It's a great image to paint the picture within the story of it... there sure seems to be a sad reflection in the loss of her Grandpa... I get that!
Well composed and presented. All the very best in this emotions poetry contest Tom.
With our thoughts we create...
the shaping of our memory.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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Welcome to my corner of distracted writing. Distracted because whatever I choose to write about usually pops into my head with a momentary flash. Thanks.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
this is a great poem about grief and dealing with the death of a grand parent and its impact on one's mental and spiritual health. I like the image chosen for the poem
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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this is a great poem about grief and dealing with the death of a grand parent and its impact on one's mental and spiritual health. I like the image chosen for the poem
Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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Thanks. Dad's passing was filled with both grief and joy.
Comment from Karen Cherry
Here is one for you: about my Mom.
I tried to call her the other day
She is not here
I tried to email her a joke I heard
She is not here
She raised me to be self sufficient
She is not here
I miss her every single day
She is not here
I hope she is happy with dad in heaven, since
She is not here
Karen
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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Here is one for you: about my Mom.
I tried to call her the other day
She is not here
I tried to email her a joke I heard
She is not here
She raised me to be self sufficient
She is not here
I miss her every single day
She is not here
I hope she is happy with dad in heaven, since
She is not here
Karen
Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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Through the first three distitches I thought you were trying to say, though her daughter I was nothing like her, and then I understood the grief of her being permanently 'not here.'
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Yes siree Bob! I am clever. Or, heavy handed depending on your point of view. I miss her on Christmas especially, because she was a big kid about it. She would put marbles in the box, pick it up and hand it to me saying, oh dear, it is broke, you shouldn't have shaken it! All us kids would shake boxes trying to determine what's inside. Or, she would put a little necklace in a huge box, along with old books for heft. My favorite was when she put a box inside a box, inside a box..... Momma was a hoot! Karen
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Comment from DonandVicki
A poetic tribute to a grieving granddaughter. Your photography is excellent and complements your poetry very well. It sounds a lot like some of my prayers lately.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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A poetic tribute to a grieving granddaughter. Your photography is excellent and complements your poetry very well. It sounds a lot like some of my prayers lately.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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If these are your prayers, I hope they are answered. As the week moved through the family went from many frowns to abundant joy knowing Dad's misery was at an end and replaced with smiles from the memories shared.
Comment from nomi338
Three months ago, just two days after we celebrated 51 years of married bliss, my wife passed away in her sleep. I still look for her to share some of the many things over which we would share a laugh, or a mystified "What?"
I am always left looking stunned or befuddled when I painfully realize that my best, and most treasured friend is no longer there. If you live long enough, you will lose someone to death, but it hurts like hell when they are so close they become like a limb. It is like losing an arm or a leg that has been there for the majority of your life.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Three months ago, just two days after we celebrated 51 years of married bliss, my wife passed away in her sleep. I still look for her to share some of the many things over which we would share a laugh, or a mystified "What?"
I am always left looking stunned or befuddled when I painfully realize that my best, and most treasured friend is no longer there. If you live long enough, you will lose someone to death, but it hurts like hell when they are so close they become like a limb. It is like losing an arm or a leg that has been there for the majority of your life.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I understand, and besides my wife, I may be missed but for a moment, and like a hand removed from a bucket of water, the ripple will fade as will the memory of me, I believe. My kids tell me I am wrong. Sorry for your loss. It was nice to see you drop by. It's been some time since you have.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A mournful yet hopeful collection of couplets that flow quickly with a blessed plea as conclusion... Thanx for sharing those emotions of loss... Best of luck in the contest! ;)
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A mournful yet hopeful collection of couplets that flow quickly with a blessed plea as conclusion... Thanx for sharing those emotions of loss... Best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Anytime
Thanks for visiting and commenting
Comment from godlucifer
the pain,the grief one must feel is overbearing. hopefully as time pass time will also heal our pain. your poem was a creative write. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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the pain,the grief one must feel is overbearing. hopefully as time pass time will also heal our pain. your poem was a creative write. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Yes. And yet we survive by putting one foot in front of the other
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a time of sadness and grief which you have skilfully captured in this emotive verse. Clearly, the griever is seeking answers or some kind of solution for her loss so that she may be able to restore her life to some kind of happiness again. In a sense, she's mourning the loss of pleasure as much as the deceased. I like this honest and credible perspective on grief. An excellent entry for the contest. Good luck, Tom! Debbie.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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This is a time of sadness and grief which you have skilfully captured in this emotive verse. Clearly, the griever is seeking answers or some kind of solution for her loss so that she may be able to restore her life to some kind of happiness again. In a sense, she's mourning the loss of pleasure as much as the deceased. I like this honest and credible perspective on grief. An excellent entry for the contest. Good luck, Tom! Debbie.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thank you dear FS friend. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Teri7
Tom, This is a very interesting and well written emotions poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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Tom, This is a very interesting and well written emotions poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thank you. By the response I am receiving, it seems this blind squirrel may have found an acorn... or was it discovered because of the bonus member cents that were gifted me by a FS friend. Either way it makes me happy.
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I just think you did a really good job with this. Keep on writing my friend! Teri
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Tom
This is a nicely worded poem about how grief takes over days and nights.
You need strength to get through it to get somewhat back to normal.
You are a good photographer too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Hi Tom
This is a nicely worded poem about how grief takes over days and nights.
You need strength to get through it to get somewhat back to normal.
You are a good photographer too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thanks for the review and compliment, Joan. It is nice of you to visit once more. I hope the New Year has brought you joy.
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You're most welcome, Tom. I always enjoy your writing. Sad to 2025 started out badly for me. I had the flu for the first week and my brother in law died last Friday in his sleep.
I hope yours was wonderful
Joan
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Thannk you, and regrets for your loss. We too, lost a friend as my father-in-law was discovered by my wife Sunday dead on the kitchen floor when she went to feed him. He likely passed 15 hours earlier. So this piece came through the grieving of losing a cherished kin.
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Sorry for your loss Tom,
Joan
