Willing Hearts
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
"Ryan Brown - All around jerk. He thinks highly of himself." LoL
Excellent chapter. The ending was scary. I like the conversations among Noah, Sami, and the rest.
Jasper is as protective as Noah. It's romantic and old fashioned.
Well done!
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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"Ryan Brown - All around jerk. He thinks highly of himself." LoL
Excellent chapter. The ending was scary. I like the conversations among Noah, Sami, and the rest.
Jasper is as protective as Noah. It's romantic and old fashioned.
Well done!
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sanku
We are going to get some serious action .one spy has managed to creep inside. I am sure he would have recognised Sami . Chen.may sniff around now we'll done
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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We are going to get some serious action .one spy has managed to creep inside. I am sure he would have recognised Sami . Chen.may sniff around now we'll done
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind reveiw.
Comment from Sankey
This was a very dramatic, exciting read. You did well. You said the chapter was short. Maybe I am tired, as it seemed quite long but no worries. No spags.
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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This was a very dramatic, exciting read. You did well. You said the chapter was short. Maybe I am tired, as it seemed quite long but no worries. No spags.
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I put the number of words in the author's notes.
Comment from Wendy G
How did that intruder get accepted by the tech team? He seems to have some skills which could jeopardise everything, so they'll have to keep him locked up and away from Sami, whom he will have recognised. Just as well Sami has Jasper! Much drama here. An enjoyable read.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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How did that intruder get accepted by the tech team? He seems to have some skills which could jeopardise everything, so they'll have to keep him locked up and away from Sami, whom he will have recognised. Just as well Sami has Jasper! Much drama here. An enjoyable read.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Noah has a plan. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a well written chapter about a chicken dog (had no idea those monsters were chickens) and a spy that has discovered Sami. If she recognized him, he probably recognized her. Not good! Great dose of danger!
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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This is a well written chapter about a chicken dog (had no idea those monsters were chickens) and a spy that has discovered Sami. If she recognized him, he probably recognized her. Not good! Great dose of danger!
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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I grew up with a Dane. He was a sweet as could be and was afraid of storms, but extremely protective when it came to my mom and me. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
We are getting closer to the end. Your story is so layered, and I am enjoying the process. How do you keep it all together? Do you have outlines or a storybook? Good work. Karen
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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We are getting closer to the end. Your story is so layered, and I am enjoying the process. How do you keep it all together? Do you have outlines or a storybook? Good work. Karen
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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I started with an outline and extensive notes. Unfortunately, my characters often travel their own paths, so I change my notes. Thank you for the kind review.
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I, too, often sit down to write one thing and end up with another. :-)
Comment from Daylily
Whatever changes you felt needed to be made, they definitely worked. I have the same problem that you describe...I do write a lot, but I edit much more. Still, if it winds up being the best it can be, it is all worth it.
The dog picture is a hoot! :-)
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Whatever changes you felt needed to be made, they definitely worked. I have the same problem that you describe...I do write a lot, but I edit much more. Still, if it winds up being the best it can be, it is all worth it.
The dog picture is a hoot! :-)
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I grew up with a Dane. He was a sweet as could be and was afraid of storms, but extremely protective when it came to my mom and me. We also had a chihuahua that little dog ruled the giant dog. LOL It was funny to see.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Drama well done at the end there, revealing that slips can occur in an instant. And, in fact, your chapter started with another drama with Jasper so the scene was set and your writing skilfully structured so that there was an air of tension hanging over the property throughout.
Small edit: Drying her tears, Sam(i)...
An excellent chapter with pleasing pace and anticipation.
Well done, Barbara! Debbie
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Drama well done at the end there, revealing that slips can occur in an instant. And, in fact, your chapter started with another drama with Jasper so the scene was set and your writing skilfully structured so that there was an air of tension hanging over the property throughout.
Small edit: Drying her tears, Sam(i)...
An excellent chapter with pleasing pace and anticipation.
Well done, Barbara! Debbie
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thank you for the catch. I've made the correction. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Paul McFarland
That was a good idea of introducing a stranger into the story at this time. The reader has been waiting for a little action. Waiting to see what Noah is going to do with Ryan Brown.
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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That was a good idea of introducing a stranger into the story at this time. The reader has been waiting for a little action. Waiting to see what Noah is going to do with Ryan Brown.
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Noah has a plan for Ryan. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Just loved this episode Barbara, much action with a man bailed up by Jasper barging in to introduce himself, but Sami recognises him as someone that had been seeking out a prostitute. And the great plot thickens, well done Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Just loved this episode Barbara, much action with a man bailed up by Jasper barging in to introduce himself, but Sami recognises him as someone that had been seeking out a prostitute. And the great plot thickens, well done Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement.