Molly is Moving
Making new memories45 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
A child's poem. Is it to be written as a child or about a child. I couldn't be sure which, but you wrote a brilliant piece of poetry, anyhow ... now explain please what did you mean by "The first height mark?"
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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A child's poem. Is it to be written as a child or about a child. I couldn't be sure which, but you wrote a brilliant piece of poetry, anyhow ... now explain please what did you mean by "The first height mark?"
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much for your feedback, Tom! That's meant to describe the height chart marked on the wall. I can see how that may be unclear, so I will edit. Thank you so much.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, this was adorable, and I only wish I had a six for it.
It is so touching how little Molly tried to pack all that stuff, only to learn that some things, like doors, won't fit in a suitcase (smile).
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Oh, this was adorable, and I only wish I had a six for it.
It is so touching how little Molly tried to pack all that stuff, only to learn that some things, like doors, won't fit in a suitcase (smile).
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much for your feedback!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jessica,
This is a simple poem about how hard it is to leave all the memories of a house when you move for both children and parents. It also shows how you can grow to love the new home when you can do some of the things you did at the old home. It also shows how easily children adapt.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great week.
Joan
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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Hi Jessica,
This is a simple poem about how hard it is to leave all the memories of a house when you move for both children and parents. It also shows how you can grow to love the new home when you can do some of the things you did at the old home. It also shows how easily children adapt.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great week.
Joan
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Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much for your feedback!
Xo
Jessica
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Don't mention it, Jessica.
Joan
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Exactly the poem I wish I'd had when I moved my 8 and 6 year-old children. A tug on the heartstrings as Molly keeps wanting to move things in her home that hold special sentimental value but must stay behind. I have two tweaks that might assist the reader in holding the the rhythm - in second line "ev'ry" instead of "every", and in sixth stanza "fav'rite" instead of "favorite".
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Exactly the poem I wish I'd had when I moved my 8 and 6 year-old children. A tug on the heartstrings as Molly keeps wanting to move things in her home that hold special sentimental value but must stay behind. I have two tweaks that might assist the reader in holding the the rhythm - in second line "ev'ry" instead of "every", and in sixth stanza "fav'rite" instead of "favorite".
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, my friend! I am grateful for your feedback. I will re-visit with those suggestions in mind. Thanks again. :)
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Gina Schneller
Hello there! This is so adorable! Well written. I love the picture too. It's not easy for a child to understand moving from a home they have always known and living somewhere new. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Hello there! This is so adorable! Well written. I love the picture too. It's not easy for a child to understand moving from a home they have always known and living somewhere new. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much for your feedback!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Lady MJ
Truly an enjoyable read! Anyone who has moved numerous times (adults and especially a child) can identify with Molly. What a gifted way to capture the apprehension and anxiety that one experiences when they have to leave behind what they have grown to love.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Truly an enjoyable read! Anyone who has moved numerous times (adults and especially a child) can identify with Molly. What a gifted way to capture the apprehension and anxiety that one experiences when they have to leave behind what they have grown to love.
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much for your feedback! I truly appreciate it.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt with us. I know I'm a fan, but this didn't come into my PM box. I'm glad I found it. I understand the problems with moving. We were military for 23 years, many moves. When my parents sold the house my brother and I grew up in, dad took the door jamb that he had marked out height on as we grew. Mom still has it.
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt with us. I know I'm a fan, but this didn't come into my PM box. I'm glad I found it. I understand the problems with moving. We were military for 23 years, many moves. When my parents sold the house my brother and I grew up in, dad took the door jamb that he had marked out height on as we grew. Mom still has it.
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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Barbara, thank you so much. I'm moved by what you shared; that's beautiful. Thank you for your review. I'm sorry it didn't show up in your messages; I think it's probably because it was in the contest at the time. I appreciate your feedback and kind words, as always.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from LisaMay
You've realistically captured the distress at moving through a child's viewpoint about the special things that make a house a home. Then it is reassuring for Molly to have the excitement of making memories and the discovery of new things. Your poem develops well through these emotions.
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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You've realistically captured the distress at moving through a child's viewpoint about the special things that make a house a home. Then it is reassuring for Molly to have the excitement of making memories and the discovery of new things. Your poem develops well through these emotions.
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from nomi338
This excellent story should be a book. While more illustration would be nice. It is not totally necessary. I enjoyed reading this so much, I absolutely wish I had written it. Increase the font size and submit this as a children's book as soon as possible. Trust me, I do believe it will sell.
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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This excellent story should be a book. While more illustration would be nice. It is not totally necessary. I enjoyed reading this so much, I absolutely wish I had written it. Increase the font size and submit this as a children's book as soon as possible. Trust me, I do believe it will sell.
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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Nomi, your review has left me feeling incredibly honored. I cannot thank you enough for the kind words. Your suggestion has been duly noted, and I look forward to exploring it further. Your feedback and insight are very much appreciated!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from zanya
a-h-h this is simply a gem - told from the perspective of a child moving to a new home with some regret but discovering that life can be just as exciting in a new home - significant childhood moments - shared with a loving family stress can be eased or eliminated
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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a-h-h this is simply a gem - told from the perspective of a child moving to a new home with some regret but discovering that life can be just as exciting in a new home - significant childhood moments - shared with a loving family stress can be eased or eliminated
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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Thank you so much!! I am truly grateful for your feedback and review.
XoxoI am truly grateful for your feedback and review