Route 66: Fetal Memories
Birthed Memories43 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha what a fun and perfect ending, Jay. I enjoyed reading
your contest entry. I liked the way it was organized and how
you described everything so well. I felt like I was along for the
ride. That 'accident' was very strange to find someone who was
a Good Samaritan, but it worked out well for your family. I've
never heard of date malts and sounded well. . . gross.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Haha what a fun and perfect ending, Jay. I enjoyed reading
your contest entry. I liked the way it was organized and how
you described everything so well. I felt like I was along for the
ride. That 'accident' was very strange to find someone who was
a Good Samaritan, but it worked out well for your family. I've
never heard of date malts and sounded well. . . gross.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Oh, date malts are delicious, if you don't mind little bits of date clogging your straw. Quite tasty. Thanks for reading, Jan. It means a lot to me.
Jay
Comment from Mary Shifman
I thoroughly enjoyed your delightful story of a family vacation. I have traveled old Rt. 66 but I never came across a faux dead body or Captain Jonas's Restaurant. It's these kinds of memories that keep us going.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I thoroughly enjoyed your delightful story of a family vacation. I have traveled old Rt. 66 but I never came across a faux dead body or Captain Jonas's Restaurant. It's these kinds of memories that keep us going.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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You were fortunate to have traveled the old route 66. I wish I had space in that tale to include all those delightful "trinket stands" alongside the road, usually manned (or womaned) by Native American Indians. Their jewelry was amazing: the silver bracelets, studded with turquoise; and the belts: I still have the scent of ripe leather deep in my nostrils. Mary, thank you so much for visiting my story.
Jay
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You are welcome. It was an amazing journey.
Comment from Paul McFarland
I must slide over to the prose section more often. This is a great story. The two lines about route 66 are really special. This entry should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I must slide over to the prose section more often. This is a great story. The two lines about route 66 are really special. This entry should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Paul, for coming over to our side and depositing your kind words. Route 66 is no longer with us, of course. A horrible loss for us, I feel. Your six stars are embraced. Thank you.
Jay
Comment from jmdg1954
This is a great read. There are many lines within your story that were absolutely marvelous, I think my favorite was - "Route 66, stretches like a diagonal caesarian slice across the hot belly of America;"
I never read of a roadway described like that.
Thanks for the travels...
John
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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This is a great read. There are many lines within your story that were absolutely marvelous, I think my favorite was - "Route 66, stretches like a diagonal caesarian slice across the hot belly of America;"
I never read of a roadway described like that.
Thanks for the travels...
John
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I'm so pleased to hear you enjoyed this read, John. I wish route 66 were still available for others to pluck memories from. It was such a marvelous experience. Thank you for sharing mine.
Jay
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I love the way this was written, you used a true child's perspective, right from the beginning:
I was 10 -- my first year in double-digits.
lovely phrase. And through to what I presume was a catastrophic ending. The question is did it cost you your free night's lodging? kay
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I love the way this was written, you used a true child's perspective, right from the beginning:
I was 10 -- my first year in double-digits.
lovely phrase. And through to what I presume was a catastrophic ending. The question is did it cost you your free night's lodging? kay
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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No, back then there was no auto air conditioning and the temperature was on the other side of 100 F during the day. So when nightfall came, it didn't take much cajoling to get Dad to pull into a motel with a pool. No, we kept our lodging for that night. Thanks, Kay, for reading and for the lovely 6 stars!
Jay
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for sharing your Hemingwayesque recounting of your vivid childhood memory, Jay. I guess you made up a new phrase back then and you got to use it more than once much to the chagrin of your teen sister. But what in the world is a "date malt"? A drink made of dates??
I know this will do well in the contest!!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you for sharing your Hemingwayesque recounting of your vivid childhood memory, Jay. I guess you made up a new phrase back then and you got to use it more than once much to the chagrin of your teen sister. But what in the world is a "date malt"? A drink made of dates??
I know this will do well in the contest!!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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A date malt was (and still is in the desert towns) is a rich and creamy milk shake made with crushed dates. I always insisted that they added powdered malt to the mixture. Soooo good! Thank you, Helen, for visiting this story.
Jay
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Good imagery: "As I was writing that first paragraph, it just seemed to go with the car and the times, I guess. Kinda gives the piece a Hemingway flavor." & "When he flipped open his billfold, there, opposite his driver's license, was his polished oval badge in gleaming bronze," An entertaining unique simile: "Route 66, stretches like a diagonal caesarian slice" Good personification: "a pretty angry first-of-summer sunburn before our trip." & "never seen a meaner sunburn than yours." A good ending...we'll be back.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Good imagery: "As I was writing that first paragraph, it just seemed to go with the car and the times, I guess. Kinda gives the piece a Hemingway flavor." & "When he flipped open his billfold, there, opposite his driver's license, was his polished oval badge in gleaming bronze," An entertaining unique simile: "Route 66, stretches like a diagonal caesarian slice" Good personification: "a pretty angry first-of-summer sunburn before our trip." & "never seen a meaner sunburn than yours." A good ending...we'll be back.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading, Liz, and sharing what was memorable to you.
Jay
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***Smile***
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Jay,
What a great story. I saw a picture of a Desoto the other day. I wonder whatever happened to them? At the time I guess they were fine cars. I can only recall going on one vacation with my family. We rented a camper and the place where we were rained the entire time. I can't say it was much fun, but it was different. I'd still like to travel on Route 66. I understand that there isn't much there now, but I don't know. I'm sure you were proud of your dad. He sounds like a pretty neat fellow. I'm glad that you all got to enjoy the benefits of his caring. Sometimes the good guys win. Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Hello Jay,
What a great story. I saw a picture of a Desoto the other day. I wonder whatever happened to them? At the time I guess they were fine cars. I can only recall going on one vacation with my family. We rented a camper and the place where we were rained the entire time. I can't say it was much fun, but it was different. I'd still like to travel on Route 66. I understand that there isn't much there now, but I don't know. I'm sure you were proud of your dad. He sounds like a pretty neat fellow. I'm glad that you all got to enjoy the benefits of his caring. Sometimes the good guys win. Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Tom. I'm so happy this story resonated with you. Yes, Rt 66 is a thing of the past. Lesser things have been preserved as shrines. Your six stars mean so much to me, Tom. Thank you so much.
Jay
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
This was a fun read. The description was excellent: the heat, the car ride, the boredom, and the rivalry between siblings.
I love the way the man advertised his restaurant.
And your ending was perfect.
Nice job.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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This was a fun read. The description was excellent: the heat, the car ride, the boredom, and the rivalry between siblings.
I love the way the man advertised his restaurant.
And your ending was perfect.
Nice job.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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I'm so happy the story gave you pleasure. That means so much to me. Be blessed and write on!
Jay
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Your Dad and mine must have been brothers in cars. Mine did not have a fake badge. That was a great trip and a good story. Your ultimate word wasn't used in our house after we got kicked out of a restaurant in Kentucky because my sister ran naked all the time outside and was very dark at four.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Your Dad and mine must have been brothers in cars. Mine did not have a fake badge. That was a great trip and a good story. Your ultimate word wasn't used in our house after we got kicked out of a restaurant in Kentucky because my sister ran naked all the time outside and was very dark at four.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Oh ... very dark, as in dark-skinned. I thought you meant the situation was dark because your sister ran naked at four. I'm glad you enjoyed the story, Carol. They were some great memories.
Jay
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Those were the days when the neighbor called her the N word. The parents couldn't even pull down her shorts to prove she was white.
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Yes, hatred runs deep.