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Comment from lyenochka
This was a fun poem and makes me wish that such fun neighborhoods still existed. There was a lot of fear even before the pandemic and so many kids were not allowed to simply go play with friends nearby. Some were kept so busy in many extracurricular activities that they had no time for just fun play. Thanks for reminding me of the ideal type of healthy playtimes for kids. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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This was a fun poem and makes me wish that such fun neighborhoods still existed. There was a lot of fear even before the pandemic and so many kids were not allowed to simply go play with friends nearby. Some were kept so busy in many extracurricular activities that they had no time for just fun play. Thanks for reminding me of the ideal type of healthy playtimes for kids. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Helen,. I truly appreciate that you were so insightful to what I was trying to do here. I had someone who marked me down for my grammar. Lol, it was the messing up of the grammar was my first goal of this poem. To make it more Dr Seuss like and repeat the words to make it sillier, all while trying to get a great message out there. Thanks so much my dear friend for you very kind comments.
Comment from karenina
When read aloud, as I would read "Hop On Pop" -- this totally works.
You are right... Readers should go back and enjoy each line, as they would if they were reading it to a child!
Karenina
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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When read aloud, as I would read "Hop On Pop" -- this totally works.
You are right... Readers should go back and enjoy each line, as they would if they were reading it to a child!
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Karenina, I truly appreciate that you were so insightful to what I was trying to do here. I had someone who marked me down for my grammar. Lol, it was the messing up of the grammar was my first goal of this poem. To make it more Dr Seuss like and repeat the words to make it sillier, all while trying to get a great message out there. Thanks so much my dear friend for you very kind comments.
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Oh well...
I read somewhere that Lewis Carroll was criticized for making us "silly nonsense words" and thus demeaning the art of writing.
Of course, the poem was "Jabberwocky" ~ I'm fairly sure Carroll got the last laugh on that one!
(I loved your poem!)
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I love that. It is hilarious. Thanks for th much needed laughter!
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So, anonymous~ Just sit back and wait for the right publisher. The best revenge is to live well and prosper!
(LOL)
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And you have made a friend for life!
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Yay!
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, a fun poem. I could feel the child within you. I like how you went through the different types of play.
Of special note:
Hope my play friends had fun, and my poem understood
(author, we all had a lot of fun, and we understood the poem.)
Good rhyming. Great photo choice. 11 kids. I guess my 10 grandkids are visiting and they brought a friend? As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Hello author, a fun poem. I could feel the child within you. I like how you went through the different types of play.
Of special note:
Hope my play friends had fun, and my poem understood
(author, we all had a lot of fun, and we understood the poem.)
Good rhyming. Great photo choice. 11 kids. I guess my 10 grandkids are visiting and they brought a friend? As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 28-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Margaret, I truly appreciate that you were so insightful to what I was trying to do here. I had someone who marked me down for my grammar. Lol, it was the messing up of the grammar was my first goal of this poem. To make it more Dr Seuss like and repeat the words to make it sillier, all while trying to get a great message out there. Thanks so much my dear friend for you very kind comments.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I love this verse!!!
It is light, carefree, whimsical, and a joy to read.
Life is complicated right now for me, this was a welcomed distraction. It made me smile.. thank you for that!!
I actually read it quite quickly and the timbre created by the rhymes reminded me of a ping pong ball bouncing on a table.
I appreciate your presentation, the image, font choice, and color story are perfect!!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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I love this verse!!!
It is light, carefree, whimsical, and a joy to read.
Life is complicated right now for me, this was a welcomed distraction. It made me smile.. thank you for that!!
I actually read it quite quickly and the timbre created by the rhymes reminded me of a ping pong ball bouncing on a table.
I appreciate your presentation, the image, font choice, and color story are perfect!!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thank you so very much Kitty. I love that you seemed to get all the ,messages and the fun too. The fact that it made you smile, also made me smile. Another chain reaction and I love that I was able to do that again for you. I wish I could do more. Please know you're being thought of with much love and caring. Thanks for the kind words for my poem, my lovely friend!
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a perfect children's poem. It shows that no matter what we do, we can learn from it. The rhyming scheme was very good and the rhythm and flow were great. I enjoyed your children's poem very much. Gtetchen
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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This was a perfect children's poem. It shows that no matter what we do, we can learn from it. The rhyming scheme was very good and the rhythm and flow were great. I enjoyed your children's poem very much. Gtetchen
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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You are so very kind Gretchen. Thank you for your lovely comments and for seeing it the way I wanted it to be read and understood. Silly but with a message of friendship, caring and joy, with some fun. Thank you as you made my night my dear friend!
Comment from Anne Johnston
I really like your poem; it is a message that is needed today. Children need play time, they learn to get along with others, share, settle disputes and then get over them. I fear for children today, who spend so much time on cell phones and other technology, do they learn these things?
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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I really like your poem; it is a message that is needed today. Children need play time, they learn to get along with others, share, settle disputes and then get over them. I fear for children today, who spend so much time on cell phones and other technology, do they learn these things?
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Oh Anne I couldn't agree with you more. I wanted this to be as fun as we had reading Dr Seuss (my favorite childhood author) to our children. I had one review today criticizing my grammar and telling of ways I could correct it.
Lol, what they didn't realize that it takes a little bit of thought to mess up our language just to make it fun for a child. I have a 12 yr old grandchild that everyone in the family says he either inherited grandma's creativity or was that since he first started talking we would take turns saying silly lines that would rhyme with each other. I wish I had written them down.Y'know at 12 he still does it with me Sorry to be rambling, but I truly appreciate your lovely comments so much. Thank you my dear friend!
Comment from Spitfire
Excellent poem to motivate children to get out and play rather than stayed glued to a smartphone or other tech device. Stanza three is the best as it points out practical reasons for playing house or sports. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Excellent poem to motivate children to get out and play rather than stayed glued to a smartphone or other tech device. Stanza three is the best as it points out practical reasons for playing house or sports. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Hello my Spitfire friend! I always enjoy your reviews as you are always so kind. Thank you so very much for the thoughtful comments
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your fun poem, Mystery Author.
I enjoyed reading it. I read it through, then read it aloud.
It sounded like one a youngster would enjoy. I like the
repeated words and the emphasis on the word play. Your
rhymes worked well, and you gave readers great examples
of why play is important. Psychologically speaking, play is
a vital part of a child of any age learning to fit in and growing
from experiences by playing. That word 'playing; isn't just speaking
about running, jumping, games, etc. It means part of a child's
development that cannot be overlooked. Without it, children
suffer in ways known and unknown. Your poem was more than
just a 'fun' poem. It had a vital message to all.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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You did a great job with your fun poem, Mystery Author.
I enjoyed reading it. I read it through, then read it aloud.
It sounded like one a youngster would enjoy. I like the
repeated words and the emphasis on the word play. Your
rhymes worked well, and you gave readers great examples
of why play is important. Psychologically speaking, play is
a vital part of a child of any age learning to fit in and growing
from experiences by playing. That word 'playing; isn't just speaking
about running, jumping, games, etc. It means part of a child's
development that cannot be overlooked. Without it, children
suffer in ways known and unknown. Your poem was more than
just a 'fun' poem. It had a vital message to all.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much Jan! I truly appreciate your kind comments and I agree with everything you said. Thanks again my dear friend
Comment from dragonpoet
I think the idea of the poem is that fun is as important as work. Playing teaches as you have fun. I think some of the mono rhymes sound a little forced.
It does fit the topic well. The words match the pictures well.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healhty
Joan
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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I think the idea of the poem is that fun is as important as work. Playing teaches as you have fun. I think some of the mono rhymes sound a little forced.
It does fit the topic well. The words match the pictures well.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healhty
Joan
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Joan. I know that the sillier with word play poems, the more my grandkids loved the Dr Seuss silliness. And since this was only to show how important play is to even learning and being a good friend, it felt right to me. Thank you again for your kind comments and feedback. As always, I do appreciate both.
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Don't mention it. Dr. Seuss is always a favorite read of kids and adults.
Joan
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Don't mention it. Dr. Seuss is always a favorite read of kids and adults.
Joan
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Don't mention it. Dr. Seuss is always a favorite read of kids and adults.
Joan
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Don't mention it. Dr. Seuss is always a favorite read of kids and adults.
Joan
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Don't mention it. Dr. Seuss is always a favorite read of kids and adults.
Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Never underestimate the play among children as they grow and learn how to make friends and helps them become accepted into their social circle, the learning never stops when we are older, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Never underestimate the play among children as they grow and learn how to make friends and helps them become accepted into their social circle, the learning never stops when we are older, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Dolly. I truly appreciate that you were so insightful to what I was trying to do here. I had someone who marked me down for my grammar. Lol, it was the messing up of the grammar was my first goal of this poem. To make it more Dr Seuss like and repeat the words to make it sillier, all while trying to get a great message out there. Thanks so much my dear friend for you very kind comments.