Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 67 "Love Orchids ..."Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from L.Renee Chamberlain
Good use of words to create a moment. Can see the flowers, imagine the breeze. Little bit of a flow issue. It's hard to differentiate from one line to the next for me, but otherwise I like it. Calming.
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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Good use of words to create a moment. Can see the flowers, imagine the breeze. Little bit of a flow issue. It's hard to differentiate from one line to the next for me, but otherwise I like it. Calming.
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Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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L. Renee Chamberlain, while I don't understand this low rating - I do thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I am always looking for critical improvement recommendations to improve any work that I post. respectfully,
Comment from June Sargent
It's not easy to write a rictameter that actually makes sense and flows naturally. I love orchids and can appreciate how this flower inspired this beautiful piece. Should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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It's not easy to write a rictameter that actually makes sense and flows naturally. I love orchids and can appreciate how this flower inspired this beautiful piece. Should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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June, I do appreciate your kind validation.
Comment from Frank Malley
I dislike the word 'splendid' to mean striking, gorgeous, or beautiful. I always hear it uttered by some British, Dr. Watson-type man whose is essentially disguising that he is an intellectual cripple. 'Splendid' also seems to me a word that wishes to say something more grand about a topic questionably worthy of greatness. And orchids are truly a great and beautiful topic that probably require straightforward words for their descriptions, words that sidestep the associations present in a word like 'splendid.' Perhaps my objection is odd; this poem is otherwise excellent.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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I dislike the word 'splendid' to mean striking, gorgeous, or beautiful. I always hear it uttered by some British, Dr. Watson-type man whose is essentially disguising that he is an intellectual cripple. 'Splendid' also seems to me a word that wishes to say something more grand about a topic questionably worthy of greatness. And orchids are truly a great and beautiful topic that probably require straightforward words for their descriptions, words that sidestep the associations present in a word like 'splendid.' Perhaps my objection is odd; this poem is otherwise excellent.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Frank, I certainly appreciate every word and while you do have a point of view, my perspective of an orchid is as follows:
adjective: having great beauty and splendor, Therefore it appears to me as a splendid example.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
You took a difficult format and wrote a good poem. The syllable count is on point. The text makes sense. The visual fits perfectly. However, the font as a cursive text needs to be larger so each line may be clearly seen and understood. Well-done! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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You took a difficult format and wrote a good poem. The syllable count is on point. The text makes sense. The visual fits perfectly. However, the font as a cursive text needs to be larger so each line may be clearly seen and understood. Well-done! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Sandra, thank you!
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You are welcome.
Comment from sunnilicious
I can tell that you are simply intoxicated by the orchid flowers on a plant. They are rather intriguing. Erotic. Mysterious and so open to communicate. It must be the the drawing of the scent. Nimbly nodding stood apart as excellent alliteration, but it all works nicely together. Enjoyable to read. Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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I can tell that you are simply intoxicated by the orchid flowers on a plant. They are rather intriguing. Erotic. Mysterious and so open to communicate. It must be the the drawing of the scent. Nimbly nodding stood apart as excellent alliteration, but it all works nicely together. Enjoyable to read. Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from MissMerri
This is such a beautiful poem! The description of the orchid (a flower I dearly love) is so clear and precise. The "nimble nodding" alliteration is particularly pleasant, and the opening and repeated word, "Splendid" is exactly right. I think this is a most appealing Ricktameter. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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This is such a beautiful poem! The description of the orchid (a flower I dearly love) is so clear and precise. The "nimble nodding" alliteration is particularly pleasant, and the opening and repeated word, "Splendid" is exactly right. I think this is a most appealing Ricktameter. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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MissMeri, thank you for your wonderful validation. The orchid does provide months of rare colorful resilience requiring minimum attention.
Comment from Boogienights
How lovely. I find this type of poetry interesting, you have done a beautiful job describing this flower. I love flowers, my favorite being lilacs. Thsnks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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How lovely. I find this type of poetry interesting, you have done a beautiful job describing this flower. I love flowers, my favorite being lilacs. Thsnks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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BoogieNights, thank you for your wonderful validation. The orchid does provide months of rare colorful resilience requiring minimum attention.
Comment from Fleedleflump
Love the sensual personification, turning visual admiration into something deeper and more connective. Effe time use of alliteration and some beautiful phrasing top this off.
Mike
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Love the sensual personification, turning visual admiration into something deeper and more connective. Effe time use of alliteration and some beautiful phrasing top this off.
Mike
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Mike, thank you for your wonderful validation. The orchid does provide months of rare colorful resilience requiring minimum attention.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This is the first Rictameter poem I've read since the contest began - it's beautiful! You've done such a great job of keeping within the guidelines while painting a picture of one of my favorite flowers. I like the way the words gradually widen and then narrow on the page, and the image you used is lovely.
Great entry - good luck!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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This is the first Rictameter poem I've read since the contest began - it's beautiful! You've done such a great job of keeping within the guidelines while painting a picture of one of my favorite flowers. I like the way the words gradually widen and then narrow on the page, and the image you used is lovely.
Great entry - good luck!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Pam, thank you for your wonderful validation.The orchid does provide months of rare colorful resilience requiring minimum attention.
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent rictameter entry in this contest, the shape is good, the narrative great, the syllable count is perfect, an all round splendid job, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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This is an excellent rictameter entry in this contest, the shape is good, the narrative great, the syllable count is perfect, an all round splendid job, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Roy, thank you!
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Bless you